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Late to the party, but I do want to point out two things that may seem a bit nit-picky but are worth addressing imo:

In the "Fantasies" section you switch your voice between first and third person in the same paragraph. My suggestion is to pick one and stick with it, preferably first person. By that I mean you should speak in "I" terms whenever speaking about the woman's fantasies, and use "he/him" when speaking about the man's fantasies.

Edited it would be "One of my fantasies is to sit back and watch him with another woman and then join. His is to watch me dominate another woman and have her pleasure us and then we lay her down and take our time pleasuring her" (Only edited for "voice", not punctuation or grammar)

The reason that's important is first person for a woman describing her fantasies is a strong draw. Third person describing a woman's fantasies can create doubt about whether she's really into whatever fantasy is being described, as it could have been written by a man (unfortunately this is a very common scenario). When you switch the voice used, it muddles what could otherwise be a strong message if you're looking for F/F play.

Also, what's NSW? Do you mean NSFW? I like to think I'm well-versed in the LS and kink, but that acronym confuses me (and the Urban Dictionary/Google)

MsMolly: yes, I do see that, but they also write under fantasies “One of her fantasies is to sit back and watch him with another woman and then join”- this should state “single woman”, since it isn’t clear if this is with the woman of a couple or single woman. Also, when they write “We are looking for a couple into girl on girl play with men in the room”, just wondering what the men are doing- are they just watching? It would help clarify things for couples of what they are seeking.

Piggybacking off what Velma said below, if there is a pic of him with a cigarette, then the profile should indicate that he (or both of you if it is the case) is a smoker, which right now, it does not.

In description... "he surveys the seen"...should be "scene." I believe GGMM covered it below but "an" should be "and" in a few spots.

Got the impression that, while you checked off wanting full swaps with couples, you're just looking for a girl to join you/both. For us, that's somewhat conflicting the way it reads. Agree with the others that encourage more personal info which might increase interest from those looking for similar.

We're only able to see a single picture, so cannot comment on the others. But that one looks nice. The tilted doorway/angle is interesting and the pose is well done.

Do you need to delete a private picture of him with a cigarette in his mouth. That picture is very trashy. Remove it.

Much better sense of you now!

Your pictures are still your weak point - I really want to see both of you smiling. Even if you obscure your faces a smile affects your entire body. The best picture is him with the drink - it looks like he was enjoying himself and a girl can imagine having fun with him. The picture (in a car?) where he appears to be smoking will turn off some - especially since your toggles don't indicate that he is a smoker. Please get other people to take pictures of you - I think she forgets to smile while concentrating hard on getting a nice selfie. Plus too many selfies makes us think you have no friends! What you have is good for now but replace them soon with better ones.

And I'm totally aware of the humor in giving photo advice while having no default photo of our own! ;-)

Ron & Kathy usually pass popcorn at this point!

Have a wonderful anniversary celebration next weekend.

That's not what they say, Kira: "We are currently only into girl on girl play with a couple or ffm with a single lady."

Overall, I do like your profile, just have a question regarding your play preferences. You mostly seek FF play (with the guy(s) not participating, only watching), yet you are open to your man playing with the other woman. Is that correct? So for couples you play with, the other man can only watch and/or play with his woman? It’s absolutely ok to only seek what interests you, but this may limit your pool quite a bit for couples where both the man and woman want to play.

~Kira

Hi! Okay, I really like the way you've incorporated some suggestions and ignored others. I think you have a profile that captures your unique voice and it's pretty damned charming. So, good job! I just have a few suggestions, mostly to do with typos and missing punctuation.

The only substantive change I'd make is to just go take a full body clothed photo of your husband, anonymize it and upload it to your public gallery. Particularly since you're looking for a woman for FFM, it's pretty critical to just have photos of both of you.

For the rest, it's just fixing typos:

Tagline - there's a comma missing between one and right

Looking For - for grammar reasons, it's woman rather than female

Description - There's a comma missing between girl and very, between anything and has. It's scene rather than "seen," and there's another comma needed between getaway and as.

Additional comments - you have "for our anniversary" twice.

And that's it. I particularly like how well written and clear Fantasies is. I think you sound like terrific people who know how to have fun and communicate well.

Good luck!

Thank you all for your feedback. I'm opening an album for those that replied. Is it better now? Thanks again

Hi. I looked at your profile earlier, but didn't really have time to do it justice before I had to leave. Just a quick warning that this can be an uncomfortable process, but it's kindly meant.

So, first, your age range is a little funky. It's 16 years younger than him and three years older. You might want to try something a little more balanced in your profile and then just decide on a case by case basis. Plus, opening it up a little on the top end will get you a bigger pool in which to fish.

Then your tagline is not only a cliche - the we don't bite...unless you want us to thing is really common - there's a typo (it's to, not too). Short and clever is good, just try to be original (or at least steal something from a profile far away from you that sounds original).

In Looking For, I don't really get a sense of the people you're looking for. It can sometimes be helpful if others can see themselves in what you've written and the only thing you've really listed about these theoretical others is that you want them to be drama free. Which is great, but how many people who are full of drama know that? That number may be more than zero, but not by much, so that's not a useful descriptor. So, make this section more about others, with all that in mind.

In Description, you've devoted a fair amount of real estate to things that are going to be evident in photos. You're better off giving a better sense of yourselves than currently by adding another detail or two.

Fantasies is good, but I think I'd recommend leaving out the part about pillow princesses and going straight to what you're looking for, which is reciprocal oral. And there's something a bit unsettling about that last sentence. It might be the ellipses, but it sounds a little wistful.

In Additional comments, you might want to add something permanent here as well as using it for current updates to your plans.

I'll leave the photos to others, except I too respond better to smiles, but that's otherwise a really good photo of the two of you.

Good luck. I hope you make some changes and then come back for a review. I noticed you have some missing punctuation, etc., but I don't feel like being that nitpicky tonight. Except that it's and/or.

I hope you have read enough other reviews to realize that while we may be blunt we aren't trying to be mean. Everything said here is about your profile, not you personally.

Your profile doesn't really tell me anything about you - so I'm not going to be terribly interested. Do you have any interests besides partying? And I'm not sure what sort of relationship you want (NSA, one & done, ongoing, FWB, etc). Don't repeat information that shows in your pictures or in revealed in your stats, use complete sentences and phrase it as if you are both talking (she or her rather than I and he or him rather than my husband).

I'm not real sure that the picture of the two of you is better than the one of her bent over. It's probably a tiny bit better because you are both in it but your neutral facial expressions are not appealing. Take advantage of Velma's picture advice for core pictures. Then remember to smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background (what is that sticking up from his head?) and avoid selfies (whoever put you in the pink rope should have take pictures).

Let us know if you'd like additional advice after your revised profile has been approved.

Good luck and have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

It's not horrible, just kind of ho-hum and boring. Noting pops out at me as interesting. I always suggest putting hobbies into a profile because that is a way of hooking in people who have similar interests.

If there are no pictures of the guy, I'm going to assume there's a reason why and I won't be interested.

That being said, I opened up a private gallery for you. Use it as a guide for the kind of pictures you should have. The absolute most important picture to have is one of you together, dressed nicely, like you are about to go out on a date. I need to know what you will look like if I ask you two out.

So work on your pictures first and then we can get to the text. Use my private gallery as a guide.

I read some of these topics I hope we are not one of those couples with a terrible profile and had no clue! I already know part of the issue is that we need more pics of the hubby available. What else can you tell us? TIA