Profile has been revised and updated

Only twenty minutes?

It took me months to come up with our halfway lame tag line. ;-)

I followed MsMolly's advice by cutting down my profile bio quite a bit, and removed quite a bit of pictures that open public, I will adjust accordingly per your suggestions and add my interests and hobbies.

Thank you, the tagline is definitely a improvement, took me a moment or 20 mins to come up with that one.

I am currently at work, and will getting off soon, if you have any more suggestions, I will be happy to hear.

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Not sure if you made changes based on MsMolly's advice - I was out of town with a dead charger and just rejoined the online world. ;-)

Anyhow - you could pare down the public photos a bit. Usually five or six are plenty when so many are similar - start by removing the ones with cluttered backgrounds (like that ceiling fan). And thank you for the lovely smile - very appealing!

In your text, I'd move the paragraph about open relationship & private photos to Add'l Comments. In Description try to be less wordy and include interests/hobbies rather than only describing your looks & personality. Looks should be handled by photos. Personality is important but interests and hobbies give a starting point for conversation. Just because we're here for sex doesn't mean it's all about sex.

I'm guessing you changed your tagline - that is definitely enticing rather than informative.

All in all, it's looking good - good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Thank you, I appreciate the thoughtful feedback. You made some solid points, and I can definitely see where I need to tighten things up. I’m going to start adjusting the gallery, rework the tagline, and turn the bio into something that feels more balanced. I really appreciate you taking the time to break it down for me. If you have any more suggestions, I would love to read them. Thank you again

Hi. Two easy fixes you could make would be in your gallery (fewer photos please) and your tagline (it's meant to entice people to open your profile, not to inform them).

For the text, it's a little scattered, it's imbalanced (your sections should be roughly the same size for reasons I'll articulate if it matters), and the updating thing reminds me of an old television program called Colombo, with his "Just one more thing" signature line. Try just turning that into an integrated narrative rather than a timeline. And tighten up the whole thing so that people are curious about you instead of feeling they know everything they need to about who you are. Flirt instead of blurt, basically.

If this is enough to go on with, great. If specifics are needed, say so and I'll expand.

Best of luck.

I finally had time to sit down and revise my bio, update it, and add more information about myself so it gives a better picture of who I am. I’d really appreciate some honest feedback on it, please. Does it sound good, or is it too much information?
I’ve heard that longer bios aren’t always the best, so I’d love to know if it flows well and if there’s anything I should add, remove, or tighten up. Thank you.