Updated profile

I like what you have done so far and think your photos are charming. I hope you check back in for a review when you're far along in revisions, but in any case it's already way better.

I think the slightly risqué picture you that you added is good.

More later, I’m on vacation right now.

Thanks guys! I will try and rework with your suggestions. We started this profile a year ago and got sidetracked by life. Trying to start it up again!

Not sure I can really add much but I'll chime in just to say the advice given so far covers everything I noticed about your profile. Since I only ever search for single guys so I can't really say if the repetition of looking for single women will affect your chances with couples.

My photo advice is much more simple than Velma's - smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies.

So replace two pictures, clean up your text a bit and expand Description - far less of a rewrite than many that ask for advice!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi and welcome. I suspect you're a terrific couple, but your profile could use some work. Velma has the photos handled, so I'll just say that I agree about which two should be deleted. As for the rest, I apologize in advance if I sound rude. It's not meant to be mean, I promise.

You aren't new anymore. Your profile is more than 20 months old and "new" at this point is just a red flag. You're adorable but you have no certs and are still using the word new in multiple sections? Yeah, people are going to pass you by for that alone.

In your tagline, you can get away with just getting rid of the first word. What's left isn't particularly clever, but I almost always check out profiles where there's a reference to being nerds and I'm probably not alone there. (Velma might chime in to strongly disagree that it's a selling point, but there are actually a lot of us who swing, I promise. Just don't take a photograph wearing a Star Wars or Minecraft tee shirt. ;-) )

In Looking For, you're kinda where you need to be, although the word you're looking for is women. SLS's grammar is shit, which is confusing, but "female" needs another word to work as a description. And maybe you can add "married or single" to woman to address SammySings' concern. Other than that, the sentence that starts "Even..." is actually a phrase and needs to be tacked onto the preceding sentence, after a comma.

In Description, just get rid of the notice about your profile being updated. It's like hollering out "Honey, I'm in the middle of shaving" when nobody asked what you were doing. In other words, it's a non sequitur. Other than that, don't waste space describing things that are better displayed in photos. People can see his beard and her red hair. You've got another iteration of newness that has to go, along with its accompanying typo. In its place, maybe a little more about you? What kind of people are you, other than kinda shy? I'm sure you're special and well worth getting to know, but you have to think of this as a resume, which means writing enough that others want to know more.

Fantasies has a syntax problem that you'll find by reading what you write out loud, plus you need "woman" and there's no comma after Bdsm. I'm kinda torn about whether you should mention it if after more than a year and a half on this site you still don't have any experience. And I think not, but like I said, I'm torn.

Additional comments doesn't really need the mention of your children. At your age, it's normal to have a family and almost all of us have to schedule things ahead of time for various reasons.

Good luck. Keep making changes and come back for reviews along the way.

Your pictures are good. Your profile is fine except it really stresses wanting another female. Nothing wrong with that but might turn away interested couples. More of an FYI because you might be fine with that.

I think you look happy and in love which is very important to me.

I normally review pictures, so I opened my private galleries to give you a few ideas.

I often say that you need five pictures - I call it the DEBauCH method. A DATE picture where you are dressed nicely. An EVENT picture that shows you doing something fun so I know you have a life outside of swinging. A BEACH picture to tastefully show off your body, a picture of the CHICK and a picture of HIM.

You are mainly following the format, so I have a few ideas to tighten things up.

I would get rid of two pictures - the picture of him wearing the tank top and the picture of the lady's ass. But don't worry, I'm going to give you some suggestions.

Maybe pose the guy in an area with more light. Ditch the tanktop, go with a polo or casual button-up shirt.

Instead of an an ass, let's have some fun with this. Look at my profile. There is a picture where I am leaning back in lingere and it's captioned "Good Girl, Bad Habits." Maybe you could do a picture like that, but with D&D dice on your breasts? Conversly, if you want to show your butt, maybe a face-down, ass-up picture with D&D dice on your lower back.

Give that a shot, repost and let's see what happens.

Added some more pics and info. Please take a look and let me know what you think