Hi DuraMata. You need to start your own thread. If you back out of this post to where all the Better Profile threads are listed, on the right hand side of the upper third of the page, you'll see "New Topic." Click that and you can start your own thread.
I think I need profile help too - feel free to check it out and give feedback
Awesome, thanks hun!
Now that you've been so lovely, I feel even worse about slinging criticism your way. And yet.
At the moment, I don't have time to go through each gallery and give detailed recommendations, but this is yet another place where I'm going to tell you to ruthlessly prune what you have, which is 129 photos. Here's the reason: Your SLS galleries are meant to give people an idea of whether they want to know more about you. I mean, sure, provocative photos can definitely do that, but this is not a place to be comprehensively thorough. It's not your Facebook wall or your personal album of good times. It's also not a place where you want to exhaust people.
So, get rid of duplicates. Get rid of non-provocative closeups of your tits and all but one shot of each penis and your vulva (I don't recall with detail, but I think you have one good shot for each guy and a great one for you, but the rest not so much). Definitely ditch anything with a Snapchat filter. As you prune, think about what other people would like to see, because this is what your SLS photos are for. You want to entice, not tire. And again that means thinking about the purpose of these photos.
I have to run now, but let me know if you have any questions or want detailed suggestions on what to keep and what to ditch.
You ladies are amazing! So much feedback, I’ll be tweaking our info for awhile now! Haha! I’ve opened up our private pics for you all, there’s a lot more behind the initial interest grab on the home page. Velma, your pic tips are epic and I’ll definitely be following some of them going forward!
Thanks for your time and interest. It’s obvious you girls know how to make SLS a better place!
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I know I'm coming late to the party, but I've been busy. I'm going to say some things you may not want to hear, but I'm only saying what other people are thinking.
Ok, so first off, I have to admit my own biases. I'm not into the whole Poly thing, It confuses me because there is only one man on this planet I want to love.
Regarding your profile, it sounds like you are in a two-guy three-way relationship. This makes me confused about who is runing the profile, especially since there is only one picture of one guy. So... it's a unique situation. That could turn some people off. But you can't do much about that.
I mainly work on pictures. I opened a private gallery so you can see the kind of pictures you should have. The pictures you have now... They aren't good pictures and the guys look so much alike that at first I though they were the same guy.
You need full-body pictures. Yeah, I understand why you don't have full-body pictures. Do it anyway. I would not meet a couple who doesn't have full-body pictures. Use my pictures as a guide. I think you can probably get away with a "Date" picture of the three of you dressed up like you are going to a nice dinner or church.
Fantasies starts out well, although it's a bit of a head scratcher how a woman who lives with two men still has an unfilled fantasy of DVP. But it ends in barbeques. No. You can talk about that up in Description, but not here. This is the place where you talk about sex. Not how good you are at it, but what a few of your fantasies are and what your experiences are.
Additional comments is great. It's open and warm and exactly what it needs to be. Just add line breaks and delete two of those exclamation points. ;-)
Good luck!
Hi. I agree that your profile shows a ton of personality, but I think you can do better. Here's my disclaimer: I'll be criticizing your profile, not you. Even if it feels mean, it's definitely not meant that way. I promise, my intent is benign.
I also am really picky about spelling, grammar and punctuation, and instead of picking on yours item by item, I'm just going to suggest you rewrite yours on a computer or tablet with a robust spelling and grammar program. That way you'll get rid of most of your incorrect and really distracting capitalizations and maybe reduce your use of exclamation marks by a third. Both of those things would improve the look and feel of your profile.
So, first to your photos. Your default is striking, but she also looks nothing like that in the other two photos showing her face and that's confusing. The rest aren't very well composed from the standpoint of attracting others. I hope Velma shows up tomorrow to give photo advice, but if she doesn't, I'd suggest clothed, full body photos, preferably with all three of you in view, everyone smiling.
Taglines are meant to be short and attention getting. Yours is neither. Clever is best, sincere is also fine, and you have the perfect lead in to all sorts of interesting taglines by virtue of being a triad.
Looking For immediately addresses that there are three of you, but could you make it shorter? And use the word triad, which would make it impossible to misunderstand the situation.
The rest of the section could stand some tightening. Of course you want chemistry. It's kind of a prerequisite for successful swinging. But by using the word twice in close proximity, you've turned it into a cliché and that's not helpful. Also, you aren't a couple, you're a triad, so that sentence about honest couples needs to be recast. Also, how many dishonest people actually recognize their own dishonesty?
As far as having women be the point person, that's probably going to lose you a significant number of potential playmates. Most of the people doing the contacting are men. It may be the hunter thing, it might be that women prefer to meet in person rather than waste time on emails and texts. I'd suggest leaving this part out and developing your spidey sense about who is wasting your time pretending to be a couple.
There's also some stuff currently misplaced in Description about what the three of you are interested in doing with these couples and women that could stand editing and significant compression before being moved here.
Description is exhausting to read. Some of it is because you aren't putting extra line breaks in between paragraphs, some because there are a lot of words. Like, you have everything I need to know and a whole bunch I don't, at least not until we meet and I ask you things like how long have you been together? Leave room for people to be curious.
I like the exuberance a lot and think it's lovely, but could you do some editing so it isn't like a river at spring flood? It might help if you talked less about the individual members of your relationship and more about the things you do as a triad. You could also just eliminate the sexual bits, because those are actually not as interesting as one might think, given that this is a sex site. It's just that, given that this is a sex site, we all have many opportunities for sex so that's not actually the way to connect. Instead, it's about being relatable and interesting in ways that make people take notice and want to get to know you better. And then fuck you.
Thanks Sammy! I made that change!
It shows a lot of personality. My main criticism that it may be worthwhile to start with the fact that you are a triad and what you looking for/wanting right away. I got it by the end (I think), but my main reaction at first was confusion.
Hey everyone, would like some feedback and any suggestions on our profile, if anyone has a chance. I’m happy to review yours as well! Thanks!
