Looking much better!
I agree with MsMolly about the foot fetish - leave off the last line and refine the second line a bit - "I absolutely love barefoot women with a fabulous pedicure, toe rings or ankle bracelets".
Reading the text out loud might help you find some of the awkward phrasing and missing punctuation. But definitely cut & paste the text into a word processor and run a spell and/or grammar check.
Hi. I think you've done a really good job. I am going to suggest a few refinements, though.
The first is that I'm uncertain why you care whether women are straight or not, because if it isn't some really pressing need, you've just eliminated most woman within a hundred miles of you. So, I'm not certain why you would want to shrink your pool that much.
The second is to fix some awkward syntax, so "...and laid back with a great smile so I’m told," becomes ...and laid back with what I'm told is a, etc.
The third is to eliminate "It drives me wild when she shows me her feet especially the soles of her feet." It's fine to have and publicly own a fetish, but that last line and level of detail is deeply squicky for those of us who don't have a role in it. Unless foot play is a requirement, you have enough to indicate your interest without turning off the rest of us.
Finally, it's "meet up," two words instead of one, and I don't think you need to have the part about not hosting on your profile. There are some questionable punctuation choices, but I think you'll catch them all if you run this through spell check.
Update: i have taken all your advice and rolled them all into what I think is a pretty decent profile. I understand profiles are always a work in progress. Still working on the pics however. Hopefully this results in some positive responses. Too bad I cannot meet each of you individually to thank you.
My join date was back in 2017 as I was curious about the lifestyle and the people on here, I had hoped that I could convince my wife at the time to give the lifestyle a try but didn’t want anything to do with it. So I gave up on the lifestyle till now, I’ve been impressed with the people I have meet in the lifestyle on how friendly, and laid back many of them are it’s a breath of fresh air to me.
Looking better - it is a process!
You need to rearrange your Looking For text so that the bit about adding a third is after couples rather than after single ladies.
Take your age out of description - it doesn't match what is in you statistical information (this is why you don't want it in both places - too easy for them not to match).
And maybe change the toggle for level of interest to something lower for single guys.
Thanks good golly miss molly, your critique was excellent and on point. I’m working on it as we speak. Thank you everyone again for the assistance
Trying to live up to priceless resource status is a little daunting. A lot daunting. How about Velma is the priceless resource and I just bat cleanup?
Hi Mr. Flex. I really love your smile. And that's probably the last nice thing I'll say to you, because I'm inclined to tear your profile apart, You have written what I call a so close profile. Like, it's in the right neighborhood and then you take some left turns when you should be going right. And those are the toughest, because I'm arguing against instincts that are almost right and there's often a lot of resistance. So, I'm going to be extra blunt with you.
Tagline: No. I mean it sounds good to say you're the perfect package, but superlatives like that just encourage people to look for flaws. You don't want that to happen. Like, you really don't want people comparing the actual you to their image of perfection. So, try something else.
In Looking For, most of it can go elsewhere, but it doesn't belong here. And you can leave consideration of people's sexual orientation out, unless it somehow matters to you, which apparently it doesn't. So, your first sentence has the bones of what belongs in this category. It just needs to be two complete sentences talking about who you're looking for and what you are looking for.
The part about meeting up to see if you're a match belongs in Additional comments. The part about working odd hours, not being able to host and being separated but not divorced all point to you being a cheater. With the added confirmation that you've been a member of this site for 18 months and are still separated rather than divorced. I'm not saying you are a cheater, I'm saying what you have now sends up that red flag. And none of it belongs in Looking For.
So, we're going to split some of that information up and leave a little of it out.
The first mention of your marital status does indeed belong in Description, but just describe yourself as separated. We all know that means you're married, but don't use that word. It's good that you're DDF, but the rest of it is kind of a washout. Let your photos and your stats describe your physical attributes (and that's another reason why flattering but honest photos are important) and unless there is something markedly unusual about your dick - if it's 2" long and bigger around than a Coke can, I'm going to need to know that, because that's never going to work - don't mention it. The women who want to see or have you describe your cock before they have met you will let you know that. Which means if you have a dick pic in your private and/or personal gallery, don't automatically open it.
I also don't care that you have amazing oral skills, believe it or not. What works for 99 women won't work for number 100 and I might be the exception. Also, it's usually code for "can't reliably get it up, but I have other skillz."
Other than that, no lols and I'm not sure what you mean about having an electric personality. That's kind of a slippery term. Instead, tell me some real things about yourself. Who are you? What do you like to do? What is it that is unique to you that will make me say yes to meeting you?
Fantasies is good. You just need a comma between "pleasured" and "especially" and a period or a semi-colon between "pleasuring" and "it's."
PA is right about the Sydney University nonsense. Get rid of it. Instead, this is where you put the information about working odd hours and needing some advance planning for evenings and weekends. Leave out the rest of the information about not being able to host - deal with it when you get a positive response to emails and have plans to meet - and still be prepared for some searching questions. I mean mine was "Huh, are he and his wife still living together?" This is also where you put the bit about liking a casual meeting first.
Good luck.
Thanks everyone for the advice, I’ll keep you all posted
It definitely isn't easy for sm's. Patience is a good rule of thumb. The first thing that screams in your profile is the potential drama from being separated coupled with not hosting. Granted most who don't host do so because of their kids, roommates, or a nosey neighbor. Yes, it is great that you are honest, but just let people know you are single.
Your first section is to talk about who and what you are looking for. Cut loose on this section and give a little more detail so ladies and couples will know if they fit with what you are shopping for. Also, move the details and logistical stuff about meeting down to the last section. Don't say you are looking for people who can host but simply say that you are unable to at this time.
With your personal description don't apologize for who you are or any of your attributes. Different ladies prefer different shapes and sizes. Just describe yourself well and how you would like to ideally take care of a lady.
I cannot see any of your pics aside from your default. However, I would suggest something semi-formal with a tie or not for your default pic. Also, dress well for your first meeting with a couple or a lady. Stay away from selfies and pictures in bathrooms or messy rooms as much as possible. The thing you want to do is try and show people who you are. Your smile is a great starting point but it can be an informal pic of you doing something you love.
Good luck.
As PAinAZ said - all criticism is aimed at your profile not you. And hopefully MsMolly & Velma will be around soon - those ladies are truly a priceless resource so heed their advice. I'm willing to point out some glaring problems - I am part of your target audience and generally picky.
Married but separated is going to be a problem as you already know but if you are actively working towards a divorce saying so might help. Yes divorce sucks but if I know you are truly headed that direction I'd be more willing to start talking with you; just separated means I'd probably pass.
You need to sort through your text and take everything about you out of Looking For - it belongs in Description. Don't repeat information contained in the statistical toggles and dropdowns (that just means you have to make future changes in two places). Please don't mention details of your privates or post pictures of them in a public gallery - anyone wanting either will ask. The information about working odd hours should probably go in the last section but you can omit the rest of your scheduling details (most everybody is busy and needs to plan). And the disclaimer should be deleted - it makes me question your sanity and intelligence.
Velma will give you specific advice about pictures - but the basics are easy: smile, no selfies (especially in the bathroom mirror) and watch out for clutter in the background. You'll probably have to take a lot more than you think to get a few good ones (good thing we're living in a digital age).
Good luck & have fun!
Thank you kindly for the advice, yes my situation does pose challenges as I thought they would have. I think by me being honest and upfront counts for something. Unfortunately I’m probably in the minority with this school of thought. I’m looking forward to what the others have to say....
Hi everyone semi/new guy here, I’ve been frustrated with the lack of responses to emails and I was advised by a frequent poster on the board to have you guys check my profile. Please be blunt and honest as I want to be successful as most of you are on here. Thanks in advance..
