A Critique Please

I appreciate the advice. I'll take a harder look at my wardrobe, remove some skin pics, and work on my syntax. Thanks guys!

Your profile isn't really bad but you really do have a lot of odd syntax happening which is odd for a professional (unless someone else deals with written communications for you). And I'm going to guess that you're in sales or marketing based on the number of cliches and sound bite type phrases in your text. I'd try to eliminate information in Description that is in your stats, show in your pictures or involves judgements and pare that section down to a similar size to the other sections.

I agree with Velma & MsMolly about eliminating some of the nude photos - pick the best one or two. In general you want to smile, watch for clutter and visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies. Until you can get a nicely dressed, full body photo taken by someone else the mirror selfie in the blue shirt is fine - but having so many selfies makes it look like you have no friends so get someone else to take a few pictures for you!

Let us know if you'd like additional advice after your revised profile has been approved.

Have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

I can be thorough or I can be gentle. Not both. Done properly, this can be a fairly invasive and uncomfortable process that is possibly made more tolerable if you understand that people responding really are hoping to make things better and easier for you. But I'll take you at your word and just say that you can eliminate all the photos of you indoors showing skin and that you should read what you wrote aloud, because you have syntax errors that a spell check won't catch.

Good luck.

I would get rid of the picture of you in the blue shirt and tie. The blue shirt does not fit. The tie is too long. The tie should reach to your belt and go no further unless you want to run for president. This current outfit basically makes you look like a divorced dad who went to his son’s high school graduation but then ended up at Applebee’s drinking because the son wanted to go back to his mom’s house instead of his dad’s apartment even though it was his weekend.

It’s important to have a nicely dressed “date” pic, but I think you would look better if a jacket and no tie. Go to a nicer bar and have a waitress get a picture of you in your suit drinking some kind of whiskey/bourbon.

I also think you need someone to take a picture of you in full kit on your bike.

Delete one of your nudes- you have too many. Maybe the o e in the shower?

I've been on the site for a while and think I have been able to build a good profile over time, but I'm always open to constructive criticism.

So fire away...but be gentle!