WJandJK Profile Review Request

Thank you for the comments and suggestions. All have been helpful. We have been working on a rewrite and some new photos based on the feedback. Hope to have an updated profile up shortly.

Just a general suggestion, but you want to look at what you're putting in each section and ask where it best fits. For example, "JK prefers gentlemen that are clean shaven or have neatly trimmed beards." could be more of what she is "Looking For" or perhaps "Additional Comments" as it it a Description of her. It's not always a clean line though, hence the general suggestion to keep it in mind.

Speaking of descriptions, there is no need for physically descriptive text if you have proper pictures, so things like, "JK is a curvy lady" can go away. A good profile shows the most info in a concise and enjoyable to read way.

The Description text should be more about the things you can't see from a picture. Things like. what you enjoy doing besides just sex, and perhaps a little about your personality. This is where people will be able to tell if you have common interests (besides sex) and provide conversation starter "hooks" for people to potentially bite on.

Right now, it just basically says you like to eat, drink, hike and bike, and she likes to knit/sew (?) and he likes to take pictures. It's something, but if you have other things you also enjoy (cards/board games, movies of a particular genre, watching or participating in sports like golf/bowling/etc, boating, or whatever), these are all things that people can engage you with. You're already on a sex site so it's a given you're looking for that.

The concise part can be difficult, but you want to ask yourself how what you're writing can be interpreted. For example, what does "We want to continue to push our boundaries..." mean? Some may look at that and think perhaps he wants to consider Bi play, even though his toggles say "Straight". It's somewhat common for guys that will consider Bi play on SLS to set their toggle to Straight, so perhaps this is a seed that you don't want to plant, or maybe you do ;-) Yet another thing to consider.

Hi. You've done the disclaimer, so I won't. I don't think it will be too painful, though.

First, it's just easier if I give you a different version of Looking For, which corrects the omission of single women (your only cert is from one, so it's best to talk about them even if you don't pursue them) and some syntax issues:

We are looking to meet couples and women for socializing and intimate play. We like to meet first for drinks/dinner to see if the chemistry is there for all of us. We are looking to meet couples for full swap and we are open to doing so at our first meeting if everyone is in agreement, but are flexible and willing to go at the pace and the comfort level of the couple(s) we are with. We have found that we have enjoyed ourselves the most when we are with people that we mesh well with socially.

I don't love it, but think it does a good job of introducing you in a way that is informative and feels kind. I took out the sentence about boundaries, because everyone has them and it's not something that belongs in this section anyway.

In Description, you aren't new, so that part has to go, and, really, I'd just boot that entire first paragraph, because it adds nothing. Seriously, most of us are initially at least a bit reticent with new people, whether we're actually shy or not, plus again with the couple(s) issue.

The second paragraph is a much better start, but work out is two words (you work out in workout clothes) and the rest of it is great except for the last phrase, about him being patient for his time to come. The phrasing is awkward and its meaning is a little obscure (which is code for I have no clue what you're trying to convey). Also, emphasizing manual and oral sex might be an indicator that he has erection issues. Not saying to leave it out, just that it's how that is generally read.

Fantasies is a section about fantasies as well as experiences. You've handled the latter, albeit with a lot of words to very little detail, but punted on the issue of fantasies. You might want to rethink that strategy, because it's one of the ways to be approachable. Not saying you need to type out a porn script, but a lighthearted g-rated nod to one of those couple fantasies might be just the thing to appeal to others.

The last section is mostly fine, although I'd change "relationships" to interactions, unless you're looking for something more poly than social/sexual, but you really do need to pull that Sydney University nonsense. Not only is the threat toothless, it's all an internet legend.

And that's all I have for now. Good luck in your new home.

I don't have much time tonight but after a quick read I don't see too many glaring problems with your profile.

Definitely delete the warning at the end - almost all of them are meaningless and paint you as gullible.

You indicate high interest in single ladies but don't mention them in Looking For - you might want to include a statement about the sort of ladies you enjoy playing with.

I'm not fond of the method you've used to blur your faces but otherwise your pictures are pretty good.

Hopefully you'll get additional advice - I'll check back tomorrow when I have more time.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

I opened a private gallery to show you the kinds of pictures you should have.

Kill the first picture of the two of you on a boat. It makes her look like she has fat arms.

The follow my instructions on the DEBauCH method.

We have been with SLS a little over a year. We would appreciate feedback on our profile. We are about to move to a new area of the country far from our current location and would like to improve our profile for our new home area. Understand that the reviews can get tough but we do appreciate the efforts by the reviewers in advance.

WJandJK