Welcome Cookiecutter couple. Would you please begin a new thread with your request? <<Forums/successful swinging/Better Profiles and click "New Topic" A new topic lets other members address your profile directly and you get the benefit of direct and specific help - xoxoxo
Y'all have to huge wonderful smiles and everyone here wants to see you have more sex with others. Catch you under a new thread.
Please review ours, lately it seems we are missing something or maybe update our photos.
I wrote to him and hopefully he'll reply. The reason for my interest is to learn if others experienced the same, totally positive results as we did. We took every suggestion (except for new pictures) and we've been getting many more birds than before...and several are complimentary on our profile - it made me a believer in the power of group-think helping others have more sex with other...cool kinkiness there. I just wanted to see of it worked the same for others.
By the look of his profile, Angus did a very good rewrite, but he never got to the pictures...
Looks abandoned.
Hey Angus - months ago you asked the forum to help with your profile review and I'm wondering if you wouldn't mind returning a favor and helping the members of the forum with some of your results? I'm not connected with SLS in any formal capacity; just a newcomer to the review forum interested in helping others use the forum effectively.
I interested in hearing whether you used some, many, all, or none of the suggestions others offered and whether you saw improvements in your contacts? Thanks, Ward.
Hi bucky33. Welcome. You'd be better off starting your own thread, which can be accomplished by opening Better Profiles and clicking where it says New Topic. I just gave your profile a quick look and you could definitely use some help by as many people as were willing to weigh in.
The biggest red flag is that you've been a member since 2011 and have no certs. That will not fill people with confidence and I'm not sure what you can do about that. Other than that, you need more content. If you don't feel comfortable starting your own thread, then maybe just go looking through the many pieces of advice and pick out what suits you. Good luck.
Biggest thing is that your profile is very sparse/basic. You acknowledge that there are a lot of single males out there but your profile doesn't do anything to make you stand out.
The description is where you would normally do this. Sometimes less is more but the statement, "Young for my age" is literally too brief and makes no sense. "I look young for my age" does. You don't need to go crazy, but it's not like you're paying by the word ;-)
Not always relevant but sometimes mentioning activities you enjoy besides sex can become a talking point and/or common ground. For example, perhaps you're passionate about golf. That could set you apart from other males where perhaps that might matter to someone. You could also look at prior advise and profiles of those that got advice to get some ideas as to things to put into your profile.
I'm certainly no English major but, for the people where grammar matters, your Additional comments section needs work. Aside from grammar issues, "Why" would it be worth it for someone to get to know you? Again, probably something for the Description versus Additional comments section.
Newbie here, just discovered the Forum. i would love for an honest review of my profile, always struggle on how much to include. Thank you in advance for your time and comments.
So I like everything about your profile except two things--and I have been to Hobbs, NM. There are swingers in Hobbs?
First, your Tag Line:
The purpose of a tag line is two fold. This is the FIRST THING people see about you. The first thing they read. It has to be snazzy, attractive, and clever. People who don't read profiles, the Tag Line is ALL THEY READ. So if someone reads NOTHING ELSE, what do you want them to know about you? Mine currently reads "49% more Redemption than Shawshank, 10% more 'it' than IT." More importantly, when people are trawling through "Who's On," to find someone to chat with, this is the ONE THING they can read about you. I chose who to chat with based on two things: is he online and does he have a cool Tag Line. Your Tag Line, is LAME. Full of information, but LAME. Also change Tags from time to time. You clever and funny. You have the ability. Write something worth chatting with.
Second, you don't have any pictures at all now. From the dreaded bathroom selfie to no pictures. I have the same problem with pictures. One of my favorite pictures is a dreaded Car Selfie. I still use it because it's SO DARN CUTE. The moral of this story is, if a picture is a great picture, you can get away with it. Read a dozen or two articles on how to take selfies. Take a hundred or two hundred selfies in different poses. Practice. Practice. PRACTICE. It took me months before I got even ONE good picture. But I got one. Over time, I got a bunch. Don't just take one, take ten or twenty pictures at a time. Any professional photographer will tell you, they take ten shots to get one or two good ones. When you aren't a professional and you are working with a phone instead of a high end DSLR, take 20. ONE of them might not SUCK.
What poses (never show your face, your face and your cock goes in the Private folder):
formal wear jacket, tie, collared shirt, slacks, yes, everything must be pressed.
3 shots in active settings (doing stuff in the desert, going to the city to shop, visiting the caverns etc). NM is a GORGEOUS PLACE. Take some damned photos of The Land of Enchantment with yourself in them!)
OPTIONAL: if you look good with your clothing off take, a photo of a body part without your clothes: Chest, arms, legs, butt, back. Whatever looks good. If you are NOT attractive without your clothes, do not do this.
Well, yes, it rambles a bit, but if your profile is too generic it won't attract the sort of people who want your brand of "not the average bear." None of us attracts everyone and that's okay, because what most of us are looking for are people who get us, at least on some level. Unless you just want to be a stunt cock, which is a fine and worthy goal, it's a good idea to show something of your personality upfront.
On your photos, don't let a quest for perfection get in the way of posting photos. While you're waiting for a friend to take some, change the view of the camera on your phone so that the phone doesn't show and take a selfie or two, maybe outside. Googling Selfies for Dummies will give you useful tips. Just remember that the only thing worse than a bathroom selfie is a blue gumby.
As far as your profile, you have some errant commas that can go. First up is the one between groups and for. And put another space between the first and second paragraphs. I'd get rid of "That of" and go straight to Staying, but if you don't like that, the comma after That of doesn't belong. And I don't know about you, but staying up al
l night when I was young, even with all night sex involved, never left me exhausted. Lest readers question your stamina, I'd just put a period after youth and remove the rest of the sentence.
Also, because this is a swingers site and you don't want to scare people off, I'd get rid of the word "lovers." It's kind of a dividing line, so maybe "playmates" instead?
It's halftime or half-time.
You can put one of your extra commas after "anything goes" and before "with minimal exceptions."
And you can remove the comma between "reasonably fit" and "gentleman." Boats is not capitalized (and now that I think of it, consider using a capital letter only on the first word of your tagline) and it's lying in the desert.
I'd leave out the whole line about not liking negativity and that it has no purpose.
Other than that, I like it and think it's a fair representation of you. Nice job.
Thank you both. I have done a significant rewrite on most of it. I feel that I may have created new issues such as the super bowl reference and it;s rambling.
I believe it is more personable now. Still working on pictures. I want exceptional,
OMG, "I am coming to see you right now" would be a well received response from you, i do not however, feel it is deserved yet.
If you could make one last read, it would be great.
Yeah, being physically naked isn't at all daunting, but asking strangers to judge you, even if it ultimately benefits you, is really hard.
You're right, I don't like your photo. I don't mind selfies, but this is the dreaded bathroom selfie, plus you aren't smiling and that expression is doing you no favors. Have a friend take photos of you and smile.
It will probably come as no surprise that I don't like your tagline. Yes, it's important that men who swing can get and keep it up, but you're a person and that's what you're marketing (because dicks aren't even a dime a dozen). If you can't think of a clever line on your own, search for men a thousand miles from you and steal a good one.
In Looking For, that whole first paragraph can go. It not only doesn't work, it starts the enterprise off on a negative note that isn't easy to recover from. Feel free to do what the rest of us do and shrug off the dysfunctional communication or maybe make an occasional pissy post in a forum thread. Instead, start the section with "I am looking for..." Feel free to move up the misplaces part about anything goes fun. Maybe the part about nymphs too, although I'm puzzled as to where the competition thing is coming from.
I think I get where you're going with the stampede thing and the verb list, but they don't work and there is no way to make them work. They just need to go. I think the sentence about "Just the fundamental, etc." is fine.
In Description, good stamina is fine, good wood makes me raise an eyebrow and not in pleased speculation. Remove the pun, please. That kind of humor is even more of a dividing line than facial hair. Say a little about your appearance and maybe about the things you like to do that don't involve sex.
In Fantasies, it's hetero. I like the rest, although I'm not sure what overlooked items might be and maybe some clarification would be in order, so long as we're not back in verb list territory.
Additional comments just repeats what you've already said elsewhere. You have something to put here and you might want to add more content. You might even want to recast that sentence about seeing someone unrestrained to how much you like to see women unrestrained, etc.
Anyway, I hope others comment because I feel like while I'm suggesting useful deletions, it's missing the key to showing you as a pleasant person and potentially fun playmate, which I think is hiding right now.
I have a bit of apprehension to being mentally naked in front of a group, but I would like the critics of profiles ( you folks) to give me an honest review.
I think the profile has become a bit coarse and possibly offensive. There are parts that might be cryptic or unclear. It might even try to go in too many directions.
I am expecting to be told that the picture itself is offensive or at least reflects me poorly. Please tell me what you would like to see. (Other than a penis).
Please keep in mind I am trying appeal to a diverse cross section of ladies. (think Don Juan with exceptional versatility here or man slut if you like). What would catch your eye ladies?
I expect that you be straight and honest, do not dilute your opinions in favor of kindness. Please feel free to give me a good spanking. lol
I also think you should be applauded for what you are doing.
Thank you for your time dear friends.
