curious69 - rather than continuing to post on someone else's thread, please go back to the Better Profile listing and click on New Topic to start your own thread (it is to the upper right of the list of existing threads).
Would someone please be willing to review our profile and provide us with feedback to increase our chances of success. All feedback would be appreciated and taken receptively.
Thank you.
We are curious69couple420
curious69 - please start a new thread requesting your own review so that any advice for you doesn't get confused with advice to the original poster of this thread.
Please take a look at our profile and help us make it more attractive.
Thank you D&A
The photo issue is an ongoing one, but the site knows about it, so maybe it'll get fixed sometime this week or next (yes, I did roll my eyes just now).
I think you guys nailed it with the addition, by which I mean you clearly represented yourselves, addressed the limitations of creating a profile, and did it all charmingly.
Super nice job.
This is a never-ending process. Things change or you think of a better way of phrasing something.
We just hope our suggestions help you create a profile that works for you!
Thank you again for your feedback. There seems to be a issue uploading photos today so we were unable to add a few more together photos. We looked to improve on every section and made an addition to the last section. It just ended in pure honesty. I did think it was positive though though. We really appreciate the work you two have put into helping us as well. Hopefully third time is a charm.
Hi. I'm glad you made some changes and checked in again.
First, on your photos, I'm usually anti-selfie, but you two are seriously adorable and there are enough good photos of the two of you together that it works. I'd just delete the two of her that have all the clutter in the background, because that's not a good look.
I had to ask myself if I was giving you a pass because you are adorable (I'm saying this in an encouraging, approving way, with no sexual overtones, just to make that clear), but I don't believe that's true. Regardless, I think almost everything you have, even when I can think of ways to improve the flow, works just the way it is. Language matters and the way you've used it, with only one exception, underscores a view of you as a smart, thoughtful, and interesting couple, as well as charmingly new. So, I just have two suggestions.
The first is to eliminate the last sentence in Description, because it has too many meaningless or can-be-taken-wrong words to fix (which also means do not recycle any of them anywhere, please and thank you). The second is to not leave any section blank. Anything can go in Additional comments, but end on a high note, which will cement the positive feelings you've engendered.
Good luck!
I didn't see the previous profile but I think you're now over-using "nice" rather than "fit" in your description. ;-)
Description and Looking For aren't really telling us anything - it's all very generic and bland. Tell me what you are passionate about - sports, cooking, travel, hobbies or whatever. That will give us an idea of what interesting topics the conversation will include. Let others decide if you are nice, open minded or drama free. If you mean drug free then say that rather than clean. And like-minded doesn't really mean much if we don't know your mind.
There is no reason for individual selfies - take pictures of each other! Your full body shots are great but you should compose your shot to eliminate more of the floor and ceiling - and watch for things in the background that distract from the focus on you. Fewer mirror selfies means you can have pictures in other locations - pose in sexy lingerie on the couch or bed, go outside and take pictures building a snowman or take a walk in a park and get pictures with unique plants. You've got the smiles - we just need to get y'all away from that mirror!
Rearrange info a bit to better fit the section headings and include something to the last section (indicating if you can host or will travel is common). Try to maintain a positive tone - say what you do want, not what you don't want.
Good luck, have fun and stay safe!
~Phoebert's Wife
Would you be willing to review and offer further opinion please. Thank you.
Thank you for the feedback. We greatly appreciate the detail you went into.
Yeah I also found the description of what you were looking for to be somewhat confusing. Playing alone with cameras and a cheering section? If you have something specific you are into feel free to tell people but I couldn't figure out what that was.
Hi. I'm going to take you at your word, but I hope you're prepared for bluntness. It's kindly meant, I promise.
Okay, so, your tagline is fine, although it's a tagline rather than a title so only the first word is capitalized. However, if you're going to use the word freaky then some backup in your profile is going to be necessary. No, merely wanting sex outside your relationship does not qualify.
In Looking For, concentrate on other people rather than you. The part about being fit (you get to use that word twice and no more, certainly not four times) and professional? That goes in Description. The part about no single guys? Use Tools to not only express no interest but also to block them. Then you don't have to start your profile out with what you don't want. If you feel some strange need to emphasize something you are also showing with your toggles, then do it in Additional comments.
With what's left, you need an extra blank line in between paragraphs and your language could use some clarity . I have no idea what you're talking about with cameras and playing alone. I'm sure you know what you mean, but you need to make that clear. And if you want NSA with couples as well as single women, change your sentence structure to reflect that. Right now it looks as if you might want one thing with couples and another with solo women.
In Description, since your bodies alone aren't enough to guarantee quality playmates, do your best to seem likeable and interesting. Try for at least a few lines and talk about who you are as people. Since you really do need to limit your use of the word fit (it's evident in photos and it's in your tagline), try to focus on what makes you unique as a couple. Not sexually, because - and I can't emphasize this enough, particularly to newbies - that's just not special, but in who you are.
Fill out the last two sections. The idea in profile creation is to attract others. That means you leave no chance to do so untaken. Your experience or lack thereof and your lightly sketched out fantasies are a terrific way to do that. No experience? Great. Present that in a way that has some charm. This is also the place where if you really are freaky, you at least give a mild hint of the way in which that is true.
In Additional comments, you can write anything you want that doesn't fit in the other three categories. Just end on a high note, because that will help.
I hope you make changes, including some additions, and then come back for a review.
Good luck!
Looking for a unicorn. That line goes down the block and around the corner. Wish you the best of luck, but finding unicorns is not the easiest path.
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Would someone please be willing to review our profile and provide us with feedback to increase our chances of success. All feedback would be appreciated and taken receptively.
Thank you.
