Hello beautiful people!

A big THANK YOU to all who contributed in anyway to making my profile better.

This forum has some of the most insightful folks on this site. We are lucky to have you.

Cheers to you all!

@Privateice: thank you for a thorough analysis! I appreciate you taking the time. You made valid observations, except for the beard photos. I only have one in a beard, but will take the feedback and add some formal wear pictures as well.

Many thanks again :)

People on this forum are among the best.
Cheers.

Your pictures are okay. Attractive. You might replace the tank top pic for one in formal wear. Always nice to see a fellow in a jacket and shirt with a collar. I assume you clean up well and know how to tie a double Windsor.

First letter of the second paragraph under "Looking for" is not capitalized. Should be."If..."

Suggested change: OR
Single women are ALWAYS welcome for short term fun or long term FWB arrangement.

"Please note I am well groomed and clean shaven." This belongs under your description, not in Looking for. Also, ALL your pictures, you have a beard. Either take a picture or two without the beard, or clarify what body part of you are talking about shaving? Because I was not getting you. Unless what you mean is: "Please be well groomed and properly shaven in appropriate places. I always am."

Description:
Date of last update for your pictures is a bit much. Just stating that they are recent is good. If they were taken within 6 months, seriously. That's okay.

Put your Kik at the end of the Profile under Additional Comments.

Remove "Please note that" you have used that construction a couple times. Watch repeating yourself. Repetitiveness is never good writing.

Collapse all of the sentences except the last one about massages into one paragraph.

Additional Comments:
Try to rephrase as many of these as possible without starting each line with the word "I." Putting each sentence on it's own line is okay tho.

Certifications:
As far as your certs. They are many and impressive. The problem when you get too many certs is that you begin to look either WAY narcissistic or like a **complete* man-whore. Combined with a profile that overuses the word "I," it could be both. I don't know you at all, but I would shy away from this profile. HARD... into oncoming traffic.

There is such a thing as coming on TOO strong. The Hard Sell is for used cars. You're no used car. A profile is a marketing tool. You don't have to sell yourself hard. Sell yourself easy. Weed out your certs... Down to no more than ten, maybe eight if you can prune that viciously.

Remember, you don't have to convince us that you are the most amazing sex god on earth. You only have to convince us to talk to you, or have a drink. Sometimes less is more.

RonKathy: hello sexy people!
Thank you for your kind words.

Lady and Tramp: I am a big fan! I used to be on the forums but haven't in a while.
I did make some changes last night, but I didn't touch the certs or the section that describes me.

Thanks for your feedback!

I'm thinking that you've already made some changes since I don't see some of the things that others have mentioned.

In and of itself, that's a good sign.

Otherwise, I think yours is one of the better written profiles I've seen in a very long time.

Tramp

goodgollymsmolly98226: Tactful or not, I very much appreciate you taking the time to write.
You made some good observations for me to consider, and will likely incorporate some into my profile.

Thank you again sexy lady for the feedback!
cheers.
Mo

Hi. I apologize in advance for not being tactful.

You have six galleries and 17 certs and that feels so excessive that I wouldn't bother reading your profile. If I got as far as your public gallery, I would note with disfavor that some of your photos blur your face and others do not. That sort of inconsistency, plus the large number of photos and certs, would indicate to me that you jump around like a flea and don't commit to whatever you're doing at the time. I'm not saying that either of those things are true, only that this is the impression I would derive.

As far as your profile itself, I categorically dislike colors, exclamation points for men, bolded text and smilies, all of which you use, and not to good effect. That may well be a minority opinion, because not everyone is sensitive to the way things look.

If I got to the part where I read your profile, I'd nope you for biphobia, negativity in multiple places, the description of your brains and dick, that you use "amazing" to describe yourself, missed the part where you are more than almost mid forties, and don't understand that photos of massages don't show the quality of the massage. Also, for way too many words. I would assume that you would talk, talk, talk.

Ignoring all of the above, though, I like the paragraph in Looking For that starts "I am looking for..." It's good, both in construction and in tone. I also like the sentence that reads, "I am happy to meet...," but it belongs in Additional comments.

The part about liking to meet couples who love photos is useful information, but you have to resolve the contradiction inherent in saying you won't share them while having a blurred but still somewhat recognizable photo of a woman in your public gallery.

I'm hoping those with whom you could connect well will weigh in, because I'm clearly not your target audience.

Ah darn it..the way your profile reads I thought you would be game for sure..peace

Blackleatherman: I have no interest in engaging in juvenile conversations!
Peace

I don't have time to read your profile..but can you prove your straight? Oh yeah Welcome to the Forums.

I promise, this is not showing off :) I take pride in investing the time to write my profile, and I invite the sharp minds and accurate suggestions of this group.

Please read my profile and offer any suggestions which I thank you for in advance!

I go through dry spells of meeting LS people and I like to know, that nothing in my profile is turn off to the readers. If it is, then shame on me and thank you for your input!
Cheers!
Mo