We really appreciate the text critique. We wanted someone to read it over and tell us where it needs refinement. We'll rewrite the text in the next few days. New photos will be a much slower process. Thanks again.
Thank you for reviewing our text.
Hi. Redoing all your photos is a very good idea, but I'm also going to recommend that you also delete your existing profile in addition to taking new photos. It's not particularly difficult to create a new free profile and then ask SLS to move your billing info over. Right now, even though you have a very good reason for having a 12 year old profile with no certs, you won't get very many chances to tell folks that reason. Instead, most people are just going to pass you by, assuming you're just another wannabe couple. Why create that difficulty for yourselves?
As far as your profile text, it could use a lot of work, not because there's a ton wrong with it, but because it's pretty unfocused and not nearly as interesting as I think you two probably are.
In Looking For, it's better if you confine yourselves to describing who and what you're looking for. You kind of are doing it now, but the focus is on you instead of on who you're looking for. You want people to see themselves in what you write here. Also, your toggles express interest in single women as well as men, but your text does not. One of those things has to change. Also, that's not exactly what latent means.
In Description, I know it's counter intuitive for a sex site, but the focus here should be on who you are and what things you like to do that aren't sex. It's a place to let your individuality shine through. Like, you're nerds, but what kind of nerds? That's interesting, as is lack of dancing ability. That she's oral and he has a good tongue is not. Or at least neither of those things is likely to get you laid, whereas being a specific kind of nerd (and bonus points if your photos don't indicate any level of nerdiness) might.
What also has no place in Description are the things you don't like to do. It's both negative and pointless. After all, what are the chances that someone is going to ask you to poop on them?
In Fantasies, the sentence about loving the outdoors, etc., goes in Description and the part about dropping you a line, if it goes anywhere, goes in Additional comments.
In Additional comments, it's not necessary to discourage people by telling them they'll need to be patient in terms of scheduling. We're all busy and we all require some advance notice. Discretion is just kind of meh. It's another one of those of course things and while you might make a glancing reference to discretion way up in Looking For, it's not a very inviting way to end. This section is your last chance to sell yourselves, so use the space wisely.
If that is the case, I would strongly suggest that you get a new account and ask the admins to transfer your lifetime membership to the new account.
This way it’s kind of like starting fresh and anyway, you have no certs to lose.
Thanks for the constructive criticism. It is indeed true that we've had a profile for a long time but only recently have we had a chance to act on our profile.
We have a special needs child and getting time away has been very, very difficult. However, he has made remarkable strides in independence and social skils. He is now a successful college student and we're incredibly proud of him.
Now we finally have time to do many of the things we wanted to do long ago. We are, in effect, starting over.
Many of our pics are indeed old and in need of updating. She has grey hair now as shown in the pool picture. The upside is that as we've grown older, we've lost a lot of weight too. The old pictures represent a heavier us. He has dropped 75 lbs through diet and exercise and she is now close to the 180lb weight listed. Sounds like the next step are some new pics. We appreciate the review, thanks.
Ok, a couple of stuff to start.
The biggest problem I see are that you’ve been on since 2006 and you don’t have any certs. This is a huge red flag for me.
Second, and I’m only saying this because I’m not exactly svelte ... based on her pictures, I don’t think she weighs 179 lbs. I fluctuate between 170-180 and I’m a triathlete. Your pictures do not match your weights.
So seeing that makes me think maybe She once weighed that back in 2006 but you never updated her weight. If you never updated her weight, maybe you never updated your ages either.
Then picture #2 has her and the male half in a hot tub. She has gray hair but all of her other pictures have her with reddish-brown hair. Well? What do you look like now???
So now you see a cascading effect of red flags.
I think you need to throw every single pic out and take new pictures based on my DEBauCH method.
DATE pic, that is a full body pic of you two dressed the way you would look if you showed up at a date.
An EVENT pic - A Full Body pic of you doing something interesting like a museum, sporting event, or traveling.
A BEACH pic to show off your bodies. A pool is okay. The current picture of you two in the hot tub is fine.
Then a full body pic of CHICK and a full body pic of HIM.
I would throw out ever picture except pic #2 in the hot tub, take new ones based on the DEBauCH method and repost so we can re-review.
I opened a private picture gallery for you to see some examples of the DEBauCH method.
Group,
Please review our profile and constructively critique. Thanks!
