Always looking to be more appealing

Might just be because of the word "Facebook" in his tag line.

Hi. For some reason, your profile is currently off line. Did you mention an alternative way to contact you or commit some mortal sin that SLS doesn't mention in their TOS but punishes people for anyway?

I like the newly cropped profile picture - hopefully the flyover will catch up soon since it still shows the uncropped picture and old tagline.

You're still trying to cram a bit of everything into Looking For. The info about where you live & work and can host or not really belongs in Additional Comments. And the headboard notch comment probably should go in Description.

There is still at least one instance of "eachother" - I didn't notice any other glaring spelling or punctuation issues but I've only had half a cup of tea this morning so I'm not quite my nit-picky self yet.

But generally it looks good.

Have fun!

I've updated the profile with your suggestions - and great suggestions they were. Hopefully this makes more sense now, and the pictures are eliminated (and I will work on getting some others). K.

Great feedback and much appreciated - I'll work on it and post a reply when it's better structured. Thanks again. K

Maybe I’m just biased because I’m a triathlete.

Saw the Ironman pics and I didn’t need anything else to convince me.

Which in a way means his profile worked - at least for other triathletes.

So I guess I need to recuse myself from this for personal bias.

Well now I'm going to feel bad while I rain on your parade. I think you can improve both your text and your pictures - neither is horrid but I get the impression you can do better.

You have very little text in the proper section - almost everything needs to be moved somewhere else and there is a bit of repetition. Once you sort what belongs where you probably need to add a bit of content to Looking For. You should probably clarify your relationship with the other half of chasingthefun2 (wife, FWB or regular play partner) as it will matter to some people. You don't want to leave Additional Comments blank but you have several bits that belong there - you'll want to organize it so you end on a really positive note.

Since you are half of a SLS couple I'm wondering why you don't have your partner take pictures for you - you'd get much better pictures than selfies. The mirror selfies are not a good look - if you insist on them then you only need one shot of the naked abs (keep the second one - the other two have distracting things showing in the background). I'd delete the selfie of you in blue - a bit of the leg of the piece of furniture behind you is showing directly between your legs (that is the clutter/visual chaos in the background that I always warn about). And I'd delete the selfie in the white pants - the background is lit better than you are. Maybe crop your default photo so that you appear in the preview we see in the forums and other places - I was thinking WTF? until I clicked on your profile and saw the whole photo. I actually think you on the bike might be a better default picture. I'm surprised Velma didn't suggest a full body shot of you all dressed up for a first meeting with someone - so maybe get someone to take your picture next time you're out for a nice dinner.

Good luck and have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

Eh. Not so fast. Because, no, your profile is nowhere near perfect. After Velma's glowing approval, I'm going to sound like the crankiest, nitpickiest woman you've ever not wanted to listen to, but I promise that I mean well and no matter how critical, it's about your profile and not about you.

So, first, your photos. If there's ever a man who doesn't need to take a bathroom selfie, it's a married man. Why in hell am I seeing a toilet in the back of one of your photos? Really, dude, do not take photos in the bathroom. That's just gross. Also, I'm immune to hot bodies so take it with a grain of salt, but I'd prefer less skin and more nicely dressed man.

We like what we like, but 25 years younger and eight years older for your age range is just a cliché. It'll look less like a cliché if you up the upper range some, even if you never even get close to saying yes to someone in that upper range, and women your age won't be rolling their eyes.

Your tagline's first sentence is fine. It's not eye catching or anything, but it will do. The second just takes up space duplicating what is already in your profile and is less than useful, especially if you change your location whenever you change location.

Looking For looks as if you composed it on your phone and didn't give much thought to what you were actually looking for. You've used "lifestyle" and "eachother (sic)" twice in close proximity, making for a repetitive read.

Instead of the current structure, try an initial paragraph that says who and what you are looking for, followed by the information about where you're looking and when. The sentence about traveling and the two about your couple's profile belong in Additional comments and the one about role playing goes in Fantasies.

Description starts well and the straight teeth comment made me laugh, but you've again badly mixed your categories and failed to actually address the needs of this particular section. The bit about long term friendships, etc., belongs up in Looking For. Instead, please do a better job of saying more about yourself that will be intriguing to others who need more than a pretty picture of a great body. Who are you? What are you like and what would we talk about? Do you have any interests outside of physical pursuits? Tell me about them.

What you have in Fantasies would be better off condensed and stuck into Looking For. Instead, take the opportunity here to talk about your actual experience and your willingness (or eagerness, if that's closer to accurate) to do role play or whatever. You want to be relatable and this is another good place to work on that.

Fortunately, you have some currently misplaced things to put in Additional comments. Don't waste a single opportunity to interest and please others, so no empty sections.

I hope you make some significant changes and then come back for a review. Either way, good luck.

Thank you!! Wasn't what I was expecting at all but I will absolutely take it! ;) . K.

I think it’s perfect. Don’t change anything.

Just a quick note to see if anyone has any thoughts on my profile and what I could to to make it more appealing. All feedback is greatly appreciated in the spirit of improving what I've written. K.