Profile help

mastervjj - please start your own thread so advice for you isn't mingled with advice for the OP.

I too would love profile help, lol! Please look at my pics too and see where I might be able to improve. Thanks in advance!

If you read other reviews here you might find some of the advice applies to you as well - a lot of people have similar problems creating a profile. ;-)

Here are some questions for each section to help jump start your creative writing skills:

Looking For: Are you looking for quiet, laid-back ladies and couples, outdoors types or those that will dance the night away? Do you prefer on-going, FWB arrangements or NSA one-time encounters?

Description: What do you enjoy doing when not working or swinging - building birdhouses, painting portraits, growing your own veggies or running marathons? Do you enjoy wineries or breweries; rock concerts or jazz festivals? How do you keep in shape - playing softball, lifting weights or practicing yoga? Do you tell amazing stories or are you the best listener? Information about non-sex related interests allows others a way to connect with you.

Experience/Fantasies: Do you have experience with couples? Do you want to try anything like role playing?

Add'l Comments: Can you host or travel?

Try to write in a conversational manner and minimize repetition (that's a problem with your current text). Keep everything positive. You don't need to go into great detail in any section - just enough information to entice others to exchange messages and arrange an initial meeting.

For your public photo gallery read Velma's post that outlines her DEBauCH system for core photos - lots of good information there. And smile - the neutral expression is not at all appealing.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. I'm going to take you at your word that you want criticism. Even though you've asked for it, it's not always comfortable to get a critique, so I'd like to assure you it's kindly meant.

So, first, you have a nice body, but the naked/half-naked selfie is a tired, tired, tired look. As is the semi-grim facial expression. Instead, please differentiate yourself by getting rid of everything you currently have and take photos where your phone isn't in evidence (use a timer or enlist others), you're dressed in well fitting clothes, and your expression is suitable for something other than a mugshot. Smiling is generally a good idea.

In Looking For, please focus more on who you're looking for. What you're looking for can be there too, but right now it's so generic that it's uninteresting. So, do some thinking about the people you'd like to attract and find a way to write this section in such a way that it focuses on them and then on what experiences you'd like to share with them.

In Description, you introduce the idea that you'll open up when you're comfortable. I'm probably not the only woman who would look at that and decide that was more work than I wanted with a casual playmate. How about you just leave that out, along with being quiet (which is what I assume you mean by "quite"), and talk about your more positive qualities. What kind of man are you? What are some of the (non-sexual) things you like to do? There are about a million single guys out there trying to hook up with the much smaller number of couples and women who play with them and while, as I said, you have a nice body, that's just not enough to really attract many others. But there is only one you, completely unique and worth knowing. Display some part of that.

In Fantasies, the first and last sentences are fine. The two in the middle can go, one for being redundant and the other indicating you don't care about your prospective partners.

Additional comments is nice. Just get rid of the ampersand and use the word instead.

I hope you get more advice, make some changes, and come back and let us see what you've done. Good luck.