Profile assistance

Let me add our two cents from a "full swap, couples only" point of view. Keep in mind the feedback is similar to medicine in that it's main function is to make things better, but unfortunately may be a bitter or difficult pill to swallow.

It feels muddled overall. The tagline comes from a good direction, but doesn't hit the target. It makes you seem high-mileage (which is not a bad thing for us, just an observation) but the experiences listed paint a different picture. I really don't understand if you're traveling for work often, empty nesters who travel for fun, a couple that intentionally travels to new places before considering play, make your living in the golf industry, or something completely different. I'd offer different advice depending on why you're found in different cities often, so some context would help.

I've been trying to figure out how best to guide the fine-tuning, and in the end I have this: Trim out the fat (cliches and overall wordiness). Get more specific on the hooks (as an example, don't just say concerts, talk about artists you enjoy or want to see). Work on grammar and formatting, particularly in the her/him/us section you have. Tell us more about her bi side, as this will be important to your potential playmates.

Those are the things that would take this from "Let's see if they contact us" to "We should contact them", which is generally the goal of a profile, right?

Good morning, again thank you very much for the feedback. We have made the adjustments and waiting for the approval.

I'd move the line about singles to Looking For and the line about traveling & changing profile location to Add'l Comments. But otherwise it looks much better.

Adding a few blank lines would make the rather large block of text in Description easier to read.

The CliffsNotes version of SLS formatting: for a blank line between paragraphs hit "enter" four times after your first paragraph of a section (or forum post) and twice after all other paragraphs.

Hi. I just realized my initial post was missing at least a paragraph and might have been confusing. Sorry about that.

Anyway, since you've not taken some of my initial advice, I'm guessing it's not of interest and won't repeat or expand upon it. Leaving me with a "nice job" and please fix that confusing and ungrammatical sentence about singles. Since it's both men and women, eliminate any toggled interest in single women as well, and move the entire revision to Looking For. Maybe something like "We might occasionally entertain a single, but will reach out if that's the case."

Please take a look at the profile again for the content of the message. We will work on new pictures when we can make the time. Again, thank you for the feedback and insight.

Thank you for the responses, we have made some updates and awaiting them to be approved.

My initial impression of your profile is that you've concentrated on the negative. MsMolly has done a great job of pointing out particular problems - make some adjustments and come back so we can take another look.

Your photos are better than most but I find it hard to believe that you'd attend an event together as pictured. If I'm wearing a little black dress & heels then Phoebert knows better than to be wearing jeans - not even brand new black jeans! Read Velma's post at the top of the Better Profiles forum - her DEBauCH system really does give you good core photos for your public gallery.

Swinging while traveling is difficult (been there, done that, had very little success). Contact those you'd like to meet as far in advance as possible - give them a ballpark idea of when you'll be in their area and begin exchanging messages about the possibility of meeting. Most of us have a multitude of commitments - spur of the moment meetings are often impossible. We were often long gone by the time someone replied to us - we were moving every day or two - if you stay put longer you'll probably have more success.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. I'm so glad you're enjoying your experiences so far. I'd like to say that this will be enjoyable too, but probably not. It's never easy to make what feels like your best effort and then have it criticized, but it's also hard to see ourselves as others see us, so that's what this process is about, basically adjusting until you're better representing yourselves and making it easier to connect with others.

So, first, I think you could do a better job in your photos, in large part because he's dressed too casually. I'm not the only woman who has complained about couples where she's clearly spent time and effort and looks great and... he's in cargo shorts. So, when there's a photo of a hot woman in hot shoes cuddled up to a guy in jeans, "cargo shorts" is what comes to mind. Anyway, the sticky at the top of Better Profiles outlines a kind of system for taking effective photos.

Your tagline conveys super useful information, but I think it could do the same thing more playfully: "Limited engagement in your town" is the first thing that came to mind and feel free to use it, but I bet you could be more clever.

In Looking For, you start out pretty well, although we should probably talk about using full swap instead of hard swap, with or without "". Hard swap isn't really an agreed upon term, but if I ran into it, I'd think you only wanted straight swaps with couples and, among other things, would be super confused about why you wanted singles at all or mentioned that she's willing to have women give her oral. Anyway, after that, you put some large roadblocks in that I don't think need to be there. Start out by saying "Traveling couple is interested in, etc., instead and leave out the busy professional thing, because nearly all of us have to schedule carefully for one reason or another and there's no reason to emphasize any particular difficulty. YOU CAN ALSO LEAVE OUT THE SHOUTING, which just is a bad look, plus it's "disease," and when someone uses "clean," I kind of worry that they have internalized some kind of slut-phobia and assume that people in the lifestyle als a much more passive description. Does that makes sense? I'd actually leave those parts out anyway, focusing instead on the qualities that would be apparent when having an initial clothes on meeting and let your future certs do that work.

In Fantasies, you don't need "" around "tip" and it's full swap, but otherwise it's really good. Update as you get more experience.

Additional comments is okay, with the exception of the ALL CAPS issue and needing a clearer policy about single men. Other than that, the word you want is "discreet."

Good luck! I hope you continue to thrive.

Good morning, we are new to the lifestyle and so far enjoying it a lot. We've put a lot of thought into our profile but we'd just like some constructive criticism on it. Thank you in advance