New Neighbor

Thank you so much for your all your suggestions. They have all been incorporated. I'll work on my pronoun issues and fix it no time.

I really do appreciate you helping me out.

I'm still in a really good mood, but the mellowness has worn off and I apologize in advance.

This is a complete sentence: I split my time between Philly and Collegeville and am looking for friends inside and outside the bedroom in both places.

You want no hassle and no pressure (otherwise it doesn't mean what you want it to mean).

For the sake of variety, I'd recommend this change: I want to find the mythical unicorn, etc.

Please leave out the part about showering. If anyone ever shows up to meet you without having showered, there is something wrong with them and you should politely excuse yourself as you leave. Keeping it in will make people wonder what sort of women you've been hanging out with and, really, you don't want that. You should also leave out the part about being hung, unless you have a horse cock (forearm size or bigger), in which case it's a useful warning and will keep women like me from contacting you. Otherwise, the only people who don't think talking about your size means you're not so good with using it are other men, for reasons I will never understand. Let your certs do that advertisement for you.

I like what you've done with Description. You just need an "a" before new passion.

Other than that, I think it's a really inviting profile, particularly given your age, where you're kind of expected to be clueless (and you clearly aren't, except about pronouns). You might consider another photo or two, but what you have is good.

Good luck.

Thank you Miss Molly. I took your advice and incorporated your suggested edits. I'll be changing up my profile occasionally to keep it fresh.

Hi. I might be feeling excessively mellow due to an unexpectedly great day, but I started by hating your profile and ended rather charmed. This is not to say it's perfect, because it definitely is not, but I think most of the issues can be eliminated by judicious pruning.

First, in Looking For, combine the first two sentence fragments into one complete sentence. That will eliminate the redundancies and make the grammar police happier. When you say you can be outspoken when starting to drink, it sounds like you're signaling that you're a belligerent drunk. Unless you're just giving fair warning, I'd leave that out.

The part about lessons being available upon request? No. The most positive response that will elicit is an eyeroll. You're 22 and that means you're already operating with a credibility deficit, so don't invite people to question what you do have to offer.

Eliminate the asterisks and incorporate your parenthetical information into the parent sentences. Nobody wants to read footnotes on a sex site.

I'd get rid of the three paragraphs that start with Photos and end with willing. They're a hot mess for various reasons, which I will explain if you're interested, but right now I just want to get to the end of this and go to sleep.

In Description, I would like to know a little more about you. What's there is pretty good, although "if we meet" can go, but more content would be great. Hair and eye color? What do you like to do that others might want to ask you about? Not a ton, but something that gives a sense of you.

I actually like the rest of it and think it hints at someone who might be interesting without giving a lot away.

I'm new here. I'm hoping to meet some good people. First impressions are significant. I hope you find my profile enticing. Let me know your thoughts.