Made a few changes

Hi - we're also looking for feedback and advice since what we're interested in and focused on appeals to some, but rules us out from most opportunities. UNLESS it's the working and verbiage?

Unless it's that stupid warning that gullible people put in their profiles - that always, always has to go - nobody cares whether you follow specific advice or not.

As mentioned, you have some avoidable typos. You could also use some blank lines in between paragraphs and a few minutes reading aloud to catch some errors that spellcheck won't. Most of it is good though, has some character and personality and is fairly appealing.

Except.

In Looking For, you will lose almost everyone, because you've made a serious strategic error there. If that's the section where someone perusing your profile hopes to find themselves, whelp, unless I'm comfortable being a convenient afterthought while you wait for a relationship to come along, I'm moving on. I'm pretty open minded, but most women don't like to see themselves as some guy's afterthought and I'm no exception.

What if you restructured your thinking as well as your profile text and said you were looking for couples, married women playing along and single women for playtime and as companions for parties and events? And you also hoped to eventually find someone for a relationship. Same thing, but the focus is no longer "I'm looking for a cum dump until something better comes along," which is what you have now.

You're composing this on your phone - aren't you?

Copy all your text into a work processor and run a spell check and grammar check on it. At the very least it will catch the sentence fragments, run on sentences, random capitalizations, missing spaces and poor punctuation. Reading the text out loud is another way to find problems in your text - especially problems with phrasing.

You still don't need to tell us your age or where you're from in Description - that information is in your stats. If you get older or move then you only have to change it in one place.

I think you're text is much better - once you fix the grammar issues. Work on getting a few more good pictures.

No need to apologize for keeping things that are important to you - our advice is only our opinion and you need to have your profile reflect you.

Have fun!

I appreciate yall's advice & I made some changes. I also have some things to think about. I kept the capitalization of Wicked Games & the one back shot of me for personal reasons.