Looking for advice on profile

Hi - I posted on another blog also. We're also looking for feedback and advice since what we're interested in and focused on appeals to some, but rules us out from most opportunities. UNLESS it's the working and verbiage?

Thank you both for the reply. I knew my pictures needed work, and I agree with everything noted. I will keep working on it and ask for another review soon. Thank you again.

Your profile is a resume and since you hopefully know as much about your sex life as your professional life then the text should be just as easy to write! Pictures are a bit of a different wrinkle but you should be able to manage. Just remember that everything said here is about your profile, not about you personally. Blunt seems to work best at cutting through all the bullshit so that tends to be our default. We really do want you to look your best and attract the fun you are looking for.

Go read other reviews and look for Velma's DEBauCH system for core pictures for your public gallery - she created it for couples so you'll only need the DEB portion. Get friends or strangers to take pictures for you - dressed for a first meeting (Date), doing something fun (Event) and if you want to show off you body then shirtless somewhere it makes sense (Beach). My picture advice is more general - smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies.

Sit down at a computer and compose text based on each section header - use a word processor so when you're done you have a good spell check and grammar check to find all the obvious errors. You have a couple good lines but mostly you've missed the boat - most of your text sounds like sound bites. And your profile is amazingly repetitious given how little it contains. Personally I like a profile that's about 30% sexy and 70% vanilla - I want to know that we have enough in common that conversation will be good. And I look for clues that a single guy really has a swinger mindset and isn't here just because he thinks finding sexual partners will be easy.

Looking for should tell us about the couples and ladies you hope to meet (outdoorsy, movie goers, winery lovers) and the type of encounters you hope to have (one-time NSA, ongoing FWB). Description should not repeat things in your stats or that show in your pictures (avg build). Tell us what you like to do (hiking to waterfalls, check out new restaurants, volunteer in a soup kitchen) as well as what you're like (life of the party, quiet, funny). This section is how we find out if we have anything in common. Experience/Fantasies should give us a clue to what you've enjoyed in the past or still want to try. Everything should be positive.

Let us know when your changes have been approved if you'd like additional advice.

Good luck!

Phoebert's Wife

Hi. I'm going to say mean things, but they're kindly meant and the purpose is to help you clear away stuff between you and your goals.

This is very much a resume, one written to increase your chances of getting laid. In its current state, it will not do that.

Your one photo is bad, your text is lackluster and your age range - a third your age to eight years older - will have every woman 40 and up rolling her eyes at your vanity. Plus, you have completely avoidable typos.

I'm headed into yoga, so I don't have a ton of time, but basically you need to start over.

Looking For is about who you're looking for, with those folks at the center of whatever you write, and then what you're looking for with them.

Description isn't currently terrible, but it doesn't give much of a view of you as a person, so it doesn't make the sale. Every person has a story and at least,one interesting thing they do. Where's yours?

Read Fantasies out loud and fix the errors. Ask yourself if there's anything you've written that would attract others.

End on a high note in Additional comments.

And that's all the time I have. Good luck.

I am looking to improve my profile. Any advice will be appreciated. It almost seems easier to write a resume than to put up a good profile on a dating site.