It's good to be specific without going into detail. For example, in Looking For, are you looking mainly for MFMF, MFM, FMF, FFM, FF, some combo of these? Also, are you mainly looking for 2 on 2 or 2 on 1 meetings, or are you also interested in LS parties/events?
The Description is OK, but doesn't speak to anything you like, such as hobbies. These can be conversation starting hooks and also let you know if someone bothered to even read your profile. For example, if you said you like golf, someone can reach out and ask what local courses you like to play. It is simply a potential common interest to start a conversation over.
Fantasies/experience is OK, but it is kind of a niche. If you're open to other things to get your feet wet, wouldn't hurt to mention those. Again, specifics without details (i.e. FFM, etc.).
In Additional Comments, perhaps mention availability (i.e. weekends only, weekdays, etc) and ability to host. Being able to host can make things easier when it comes to play time and is something that's likely desireable for people that can't host.
Lastly, cut/paste the whole thing into something like Google Docs to let it point out any grammer/punctuation/spelling issues, then cut/paste it back into your profile.
