Have you read any other profile reviews? You'll find a lot of good advice in them that's is applicable to your profile. And you'll probably notice that many of us offering advice are rather opinionated and blunt. It's all about your profile not you personally - we really do want you to find what you're looking for.
The whole point of your profile is to entice others to contact you (or reply if you initiated contact). We're all here for sex - you need to emphasize the things that make you different from every other single gentleman with a dick in his pants.
Treat each section as a question to be answered. The first section should be about the type of people you hope to attract (outdoor enthusiasts, club goers, couch potatoes, etc.) and what sort of relationship you prefer (one-time NSA encounters, on-going FWB or something in-between). Try not to talk about yourself - you've got the rest of the profile for that. In Description tell us some of the vanilla bits of your life; the sexy bits can go in Fantasies/Experience. Use the last section for any odd bits that don't really fit elsewhere. A half dozen sentences or less per section is often enough and complete sentences are better than lists and fragments.
Most of this is rather generic advice - MsMolly pretty much took care of specific advice. ;-)
Good luck, have fun and stay safe!
~Phoebert's Wife

