Hi. It can be really hard when you do your best to create a profile and then people come along and say seemingly mean things about it. It really isn't meant to be mean. Instead, the process holds up a series of mirrors so that you can see how things look to others and then you get to decide how and what to change. Unless you remind Velma of an episode of Criminal Minds. I'm not sure what to do when that happens. ;-)
So, first, your photos aren't going to do it. You'll need to do some adaptation of Velma's rules if you're solely trying to appeal to women, but they still work. Just remember that most women are not particularly susceptible to sultry in other women. it's generally more about personality, so show that instead of your breasts.
So, moving through your profile, your age range is a little narrow, but you like what you like. Your toggles are currently set to Want Drinkers/Smokers because that's the SLS default. If that's not what you want, you'll have to wait until all your changes are approved and then go in and change just that.
Your other toggles, for Interest levels in activities are a bit of a mess, because they're confusing and unsupported by the text. You need to resolve that in some way. Also, when you go in and change your toggles for couples, etc. back, leave a slight interest in couples so that you have access to couples where she plays separately.
In your tagline, it's customary to refer to single, bi women as unicorns, but it's a controversial practice and you won't offend anyone if you stop using that ridiculous word.
In Looking For, please use complete sentences and talk more about who you're looking for and less about yourself. The thing about unicorn hunters that makes many of us stay the hell away is their predilection for being interested solely in themselves and what they want, so it's particularly important for you to change the focus to the person or people you're looking for so that women will find something charming and relatable in this section. So, for instance, the line about needing to get things started right now should probably go.
Description is pretty good, but I don't really get much of a sense of the two of you. Like, I know something about what you like, which is great, but I don't get a sense of you as people. Everyone is special. In what way are you special? And you can totally leave out the part about being secure. This is a thing you demonstrate rather than say.
Fantasies has some ups and downs. The first line is great, the second is not, the third is your internal dialogue, which makes it perfect for that first meeting but not for your profile, and the last two lines are just confusing. When you do a rewrite, try to imagine that you are a stranger reading it and see if that gives you a better vantage point for making this section clear.
You've left a section blank and you shouldn't. Not only does it suggest you aren't good at details (and sex with women is all about details, so that's not a great look), you've passed on a last chance to make a good impression.
As far as finding a single (or married and playing with permission) woman between the ages of 28 and 42 who is on SLS, within 100 miles of you, and willing to play solo with another woman... It's not impossible, but it's not easy either. You really need to bring your A game and that means being your best self. So, write clearly, be charming and real, have photos that show way more personality than skin, and understand that you're part of a large group looking for a member of a much smaller one.
Also, please use spell check.
Good luck!
