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I just want say Thank you to everyone ??. I greatly appreciate your Input and will get to work on it. Again Ty

We can make suggestions - but you'll have to do the work of making your profile more appealing. ;-)

Currently I'd not even look at your profile - your tag line and default photo would have me thinking "nope" and I'd move on. You have to fix those up so you can get people to even read your profile. I can overlook a so-so tag line if the picture is appealing - unfortunately both are working against you.

Toss all the pictures except where you are carrying that roll of whatever and have a big grin. Some people can get away with a neutral expression - you cannot. YOU MUST SMILE!!! (yes - I'm yelling). With the big grin I'm willing to read your text; without the grin I'd not bother. You can probably keep the picture of you on the boat as well. Velma has a great system for core pictures in your public gallery - get someone to take a picture next time you're out to dinner & dressed nicely or somewhere doing something fun. Smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies (friends or even strangers are usually happy to take a picture for you).

MsMolly covered a lot my problems with your text - and gave reasons! Looking For is pretty good. Description could use some help - delete the beginning of the middle paragraph and move the end of it either to Looking For or Fantasies. Expand that last sentence into a short paragraph - any particular type of restaurants, movies or music? Delete your current Fantasies text and tell us what you'd like to try - did you enjoy that MFF? want to try MFM? I'm not quite sure about Additional Comments - currently it has me rolling my eyes but I've got no ideas for improving it.

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

We are moving offices right now so I’ve been busy.

My big fear is your pictures are mostly selfies and the first thing that makes me think is that you’ve got no friends.

Keep the pic in the boat. Throw everything else away. Have someone take two more pictures of you. One of you dressed nicely like you are going on a date and one ago you shirtless at the beach.

Hi. I hope you've read some of the other threads here, so that the seeming harshness of the critiques doesn't surprise you. I promise, it's not meant to be mean, although it's generally a place where bluntness reigns. It's about your profile though and how you appear to others because of it. It's not actually about you. The purpose is to help you be more successful, so please keep that in mind.

So, I looked at your screen name, tagline and photos before I read your profile. As a result, I was pleasantly surprised. That doesn't mean your profile is great, unfortunately. Instead, it means you're hitting the wrong notes with your tagline and photos.

Look, it's enough that you have called yourself FallenAngel. When you hit that same beat multiple times, with your tagline that indicates you're a bad guy and your photo gallery filled with your scowling face, women are rolling their eyes and saying "riiiiight." Also, they're not saying yes, which is what I'm guessing would be your preference. So, let's clean it up for that reason. Also, actual badasses never bother telling anyone else they are, they just go around being badasses. So, there's another good reason to quash the bravado.

As far as your photos go, I generally leave those up to Velma, but she works long, hard hours and has a marathon this weekend, so she might or might not show up. You can find her advice for single guys on many threads here, if you care to look. In the meantime, here's my advice: No selfies and smile. No scowls, no resting bitch face, nothing like that. Smile, because that's the thing that will make me want you looking down (or up) at me. I'm not alone in that. Of the photos you have, the only one I like is the one where you're holding a roll of something and - surprise twist! - smiling. It's very appealing.

Your tagline should be short and preferably clever. Steal one from far away if you can't think of anything suitable.

Looking For is good. It's short, punchy, and has personality.

Description not so much. There's a syntax error in the first sentence (read it out loud to see what I mean) and the part where you talk about your lack of couples experience and your MFF goes in Fantasies. I like the last sentence a lot. The part I don't like is the middle paragraph. The sentence about single women is better in Looking For - mention couples as well and do so with just as much enthusiasm and the rest of it just needs to take a vacation to somewhere far away.

I know, this is a sex site. And you'd think you would succeed or fail in attracting attention by talking about sex. But no. Your sexual skills are going to be important later, but for making a connection? Nope. We can, most of us, have crazy good sex every day of the week with any number of partners, so great sex is pretty commonplace. That means that at this stage, how you sex is the least interesting thing about you.

Instead, use this section to talk about yourself in a way that is real and charming. Make me want to ask if you'll have coffee with me to see if there's an attraction.

Fantasies is another great place to make a connection with people - hey, look, he's interested in the thing I'm interested in - but you've wasted the opportunity. This is another place to be real. Not graphic, but real. And, yeah, the line about being a couples virgin is pretty cute and would go well here.

Additional comments had decent elements, but you need an extra blank line if that first line is a standalone paragraph, and you'd be better served by sentences that hung together a little better.

And that's all I have at the moment. I hope you collect opinions, make some changes, and then come back for a review. Preferably with new photos. ;-)

Good luck!

Hi everyone. Can you guys help me make my profile more appealing? Thank you