Hi. I don't know that it's a problem, actually. It's more that people look at your profile for whatever reason and then close it without messaging you and that happens to all of us.
Do I think there are some questionable things about your profile? Yep, although no real red flags. However, you might want to either load those private photos into a private gallery on SLS or not mention them, because the way it is now - I have private photos, but I'll have to give them to you in some other way - is a little dodgy.
I also don't love photos of unsmiling people. I meet those folks at Trader Joe's and that's enough, thanks. Please, smile in your photos, or at least have a pleasant expression on your face.
It is (I think) the image of play, not the imagine and most women do not fail to reach orgasm with a new playmate. Once you've introduced that incorrect fact, the rest falls apart pretty comprehensively. I don't think I'm unusual in disliking being told what men are going to do with and to my body and it doesn't help if your intentions are benign. So, from my vantage point as a woman, you've started out with a few strikes against you. I'm trying to imagine what a man - and most of the people actively looking here on SLS appear to be men - would make of your approach. I don't think they'd ding you for being presumptuous, but I don't think you'd be making a sale either. Maybe because if it's true that with you most women don't reach orgasm the first time, someone else might be a better bet.
So, there's that.
In other words, I think you should fix that section so it doesn't sound like you're telling women about themselves. And then you should run the whole thing through spell check and maybe catch the typos.
Good luck.