Profile review (please)

You're very welcome. What you have looks great. Change your tagline and default photo periodically to increase your success and otherwise, really, all you need is a cert or two.

Best of luck.

Thank you, ladies. The 2nd rewrite is done.

It’s been so helpful to get a woman’s perspective.

Hi again. Way better. I still have some refinements to suggest, but you have a solid profile. If you could get at least one certification, I think that would definitely increase your opportunities, but you're good otherwise. And I really like your tagline.

Looking For - The last sentence either needs a semi-colon and no "but" between the two phrases or to be two sentences.

Description - Lose the second iteration of "nice" and only mention your dick if by above average you mean you swing a hammer. Otherwise, let it be a surprise. Anyone who wants to know ahead of time will ask for a photo and the rest of us won't have to activate our suspicion button (it's kind of axiomatic that guys who mention penis size are, despite disclaimers, rather more enamored of their equipment than what it can do for others). Also, trustworthy is one word.

Fantasies - It's "I'm not camera shy and only ask that you share..." and I'd leave out "then you can be sure" so as to sound more confident.

Additional comments - Lose the exclamation mark and you're good.

Really, a very nice profile. You might eventually add a few more photos of you smiling - you have a nice smile - but even there I think you're fine. Good luck!

Thank you @goodgollymsmolly98226 @PhoebertAndWife and @VelmaAndShaggy! I've read your replies to other peoples posts and also applied your critique of mine, and made several changes and added new content. If you wouldn't mind taking a second peek, I would appreciate the feedback.

Hi. Here's the standard disclaimer: Anything said here, no matter how intrusive or critical it might sound, is kindly meant, with the ultimate goal of getting you as much sex as you want or need.

I'm going to speak as much to your general difficulty with writing profiles as to what you have here. The aim might be slightly different, but the principles are the same.

The first trick is to understand that your goal is to appeal to others. It isn't any more complicated than that. Except that it can be complicated to condense yourself in a way that is authentic, appealing and directed towards whatever it is you're aiming for. But it's better to start with more and winnow out what doesn't serve you than it is to just give bare bones.

You've taken the bare bones approach, so we don't have a ton to work with. Not much isn't the same as nothing, though, so please remember the disclaimer as you read through. ;-)

Your tagline isn't terrible, but you know what image it gives me? A soft dick. That's probably not what you meant, but not meaning something doesn't result in others getting an idea in the way you meant it. I encourage you to change it - to something clever if you can, sincere and serviceable if you can't.

In Looking For, you actually sound discouraged when you describe yourself as a dreaded pesky single male. Not the best start, you know? Besides, if you can read, write, think, and are considerate, there is nothing about you that will prompt dread. The problem isn't too many single men (and it is men rather than males), the problem is too many male persons who have poor social skills and a worse understanding of swinging. I don't think that describes you, so given time to build a network of friends and acquaintances, there's no reason you won't thrive. Start with confidence, though, because it will help.

The parts that belong in this category end at "Single (women) are always welcome!" and the rest belongs in either Description or Additional comments.

In Description, there's no reason to mention what you aren't interested in. You're also probably not interested in half a hundred other things and you needn't mention them either. The part about friends first belongs in the first section, because it's what you're looking for, and that leaves you with no more in your description than easy going and no drama, and the second is already contained in the first and doesn't require being called out as a negative quality.

So, what do you put in this section? Who are you? What kind of person are you? What do you like to do? How are you unique and special and like no one else on the planet? Tell me a story. it doesn't have to be a long story, but it does have to demonstrate some kind of self reflection and enough detail that others can connect with you. I don't know about you, but I'm always looking for members of my tribe, even if all I really want is a few hours of their time, never to see them again. How can you lay out the ways in which you might be a member of someone's tribe?

Too complicated? That's fine. Then just write out a few of your qualities other than being easy going and then say a few things about what you like to do and call it good. Just keep being relatable in mind.

As far as Fantasies, it's probably your strongest section currently. Just leave out the indirect phrasing of "I will say", fix your typo and lose the "within reason" thing. That last is because role play needs discussion and negotiation anyway and there's no reason to hedge until you have something about which to hedge.

Additional comments is fine, but no better than that. Can you think of one more thing to add that ends on a high note? If so, that would serve you well.

Please make some changes and then come back and let us take a second look. Good luck!

You need more content - two or three sentences per section is usually the minimum for telling enough about you for people to decide if you are worth more time. Sometimes it is really hard to keep Description info from creeping into other sections but do your best to analyze if you have things in the correct section. Add if you are looking for on-going FWB or one time party play or whatever to Looking For. Add your hobbies or leisure activities to Description - do you cook, build tree houses, ride motorcycles?

Are you really OK with roll play - I assume rolling down a hill rather than off a cliff - or do you mean role play? Spell check can only do so much! And being fine with role play sounds like you don't really like it but will participate if you must - probably should reword that.

Your tag line is negatively phrased - "spark = ignition!" says the same thing in a positive manner.

Most of your pictures are reasonably good - you might want to delete a few with minimal smile. Delete the one in the chair - you look like a kid in an oversized chair.

So - add more detail and phrase it in the most positive way possible - give us a reason to contact you!

~Phoebert's Wife

I would take out the "dreded single male line."

Show confidence. Confidence is sexy.

The problem with your profile is that it's boring. There is nothing interesting about you. Talk about your passions anf hobbies. Show me what you bring to the table and prove to me that you won't make me bored.

Writing good profiles has never been my strength, on here or even vanilla dating sites. I could certainly use a little constructive criticism and any suggestions you may have.