Okay. Ready for a re-review. Two photos are awaiting upload. Pic of us together faces blurred and full body shot hubby took of me ( it’s actually in different folder, but I don’t know how to move photos between folders)
And that’s exactly why I was looking for??
Goodgollymsmolly thank you for the feedback.
I appreciate all of the feedback we received. Now it’s time to do some work on the written portion. lol.
njny has given excellent advice that can't be improved upon, so I'll just stick with details.
In Looking For, a category meant to describe who you're interested in finding and playing with, you've devoted a lot of real estate to yourselves. That, combined with some of the language, makes it appear you're looking for ambulatory sex toys rather than real people with whom you wish to interact. In addition, you have a lot of conditions (around the same age, message us, let us know outright, no endless chitchat, etc.) Neither are all that unusual with people who are new, but a lot of folks aren't going to get past that first section without noping out. In addition, because you just sound like a lot of work for what will probably end up as girl/girl only, you've lost another chunk. And you lost 95% of single women by looking like you had no interest in their interests in the first sentence. So, that might explain the dearth of people reaching out to you (not that most single women would, btw, because we already garner more interest than we need).
Description is a milder version of the same. You needn't mention anything about single men; by selecting not interested, you've blocked them. If you call women "women" instead of "females" it will look a little less impersonal. Plus what do you mean about sharing your relationship? Are you looking for a poly situation or do you just want people with whom you can have sex? Because it's unclear right now. Say more about yourselves. What makes you the unique couple you undoubtedly are?
Fantasies is okay as a category, because it sounds truthful and individual.
Additional comments is kind of a waste of space and has too much detail. It is okay to say you keep your photos current, naturally, just the dates are tmi. Kudos for appropriate use of a semi-colon, but no space before it. You might want to talk here about being new to this and maybe what brought you to swinging. Or maybe put a little of that in Description. Be human, be yourselves, just dressed up for company that you're actually looking forward to meeting.
You could use a better tagline, too.
The advice you'll get here might sound harsh, but it's in service to making sure you have the widest possible pool in which to find compatible playmates.
Good luck.
Velmaandshaggy- I fixed that one statement when the first person pointed it out. I have changed the pics up I am currently attempting to blur this one of the two of us. I still feel like it look likes us, but might be cause I am so familiar with it.
Working pics first and then going to look at profile wording. Thank you for taking the time to look at it. Once I get it all fixed, I will message all of you to give another look over; if you all don’t mind.
You might’ve fixed your profile since you first posted.
Your pictures are OK-I would consider posting a picture of the two of you together. You might also consider posting a picture of you to dress nicely like you’re going to church or out to dinner.
goodgollymsmolly/njnybiwfemme that you for feedback. I will work on the photo edits.
goodgollymsmolly would love to hear your feedback when you have time.
We are new to site and lifestyle so we kind of based profiles on what we see. I appreciate the feedback and comments from all. The best ones are the harshest ??
The overt racism is definitely the reddest of red flags, but it's not the only one.
I don't have the time to take your profile apart in detail right now, so that will have to wait. My overall impression though is that the two of you are not fun, have a lot of rules, and don't really see other people as being particularly interesting or valuable. Plus, your photos aren't good.
Thank you for the feedback. I will remove it today. It helps getting perspective from members who are seasoned and outside the local area.
It's not bad. One massive red flag for us is the comment on race. It's offputting and makes you sound racist. You can easily remove it and weed out the folks you don't want to play with through pics and emails.
Remember that, just like you, when folks read your profile they're looking for things you have in common and for things that rule you out.
So remove things that may rule you out and add things that could be good conversation.
Right now you're just a hot, potentially racist, couple.
I was hoping to get some feedback on our profile. We are newer to site (since May;I believe). Lots of people look, but don’t always grab right peoples attention. Was not sure if we put too much info out there or not the right info. Thank you in advance.
