Profile review please

I think the revisions are a definite improvement. I do think you're going to attract only a narrow slice of people in your area, but after a couple of rounds it's pretty clear that's all you're looking for, and that's what effective marketing is all about.

My only other thought is that this profile reads start to finish as if it was written by a man. Since it's often men who do the looking, that might not be a problem, but I suspect a number of women will veto you. Maybe have your wife read it aloud and make sure she's comfortable with what and how everything is written?

Good luck.

Ok, so those 4 paragraphs were basically to say that we should take out the HWP, and everything else looked good?

Ok, updated the profile, still working on the pics. Thoughts? And thanks in advance.

Start a new thread and we can help you.

Let us know when you are done and we can review.

Awesome feedback! Thanks, we will get some changes going here shortly. We appreciate the honest opinions!

Hi. I'm really sorry, but before I'd reached the end of your profile, I'd dismissed you as superficial folks that wouldn't interest me long enough to get through a cup of tea.

It's full of cliches, you don't sound like interesting people, and your photos just reinforce that.

The thing is, I don't actually believe any of that is true. But it may reflect both how you want to be seen and who you want to attract. There are some things in your profile that suggest you really aren't all in on the swinging thing and prefer to keep things very superficial.

If you want something else, then you're going to need to turn down the gloss and be real. No about him by her, etc. A better tagline. An explanation of why you have only limited interest in full swap. The elimination of that prescriptive about contacting you. Stuff like that.

If you like who you're attracting, what you have is fine. I'd still get rid of the presciptive language, because really polite adults don't tell other adults what to do.

One more pic idea and an explanation. Maybe one weekend, go to a Detroit Tigers game and take a pic together at the ballpark. She would look awesome in a scoop-neck Tigers shirt.

I'm a big fan of pics of the husband and wife together - because aren't we doing this together? Bonus points if you two look like you are in love.

And I have a theory about pictures: Pictures tell a story. You two say you like the water and country music and traveling, but you don't show any of that stuff. I really only see boobs and buts. So what are people going to write about when they write you: "Hey, she's hot. Wanna chat?"

I use pictures to create what I call "hooks." These are things to "hook" couples into writing us. So we have pics at the beach, cycling and at Nats games because if you like the beach, cycling or baseball, it makes that first conversation a lot easier. Right now, the only real thing people can contact you about is your bodies. With us, people can say: "Hey, want to go cycling?" or "Hey, we like Nats games too. We're going next week." And so on...

I mean... It's not bad.

I think that you kind of fall into the demographic that I call "hot fun couples." You're hot. You're in shape. You aren't really full swap, but kind maybe are. It's kind of like... I imagine you two like Derick's family from Stepbrothers. You know, where you make 550K a year, have an amazing house and haven't eaten a carb since 2004. I kind of feel like you swing because you can. Because you worked hard and won at everything else in life, so you kind of deserve this and anyway "IT'S THE FUCKING CATALINA WINE MIXER!"

So... contrast that with me. I started this whole thing because for 20 years, I would meet random men (and a few women) who were traveling in DC and fuck them in their hotel rooms. I didn't really want to stop doing that when I got married, so swinging was sort of a compromise. And my husband gets the occasional threesome out of the deal, so he's got that going for him, which is nice.

With your current profile, I wouldn't feel comfortable reaching out to you. Not because I don't think we would get along - believe me. I would play your cock like a fine Stradivarius and I would wipe that "curious" right off your wife's profile - but because you seem so hot that you are almost unattainable. I mean... we're in shape and we look good at the beach... but I personally feel if we reached out to you, you would reject us.

So, if you want to meet couples who are exactly, and I mean exactly, like you. I wouldn't change a thing. But if you are wondering why people aren't contacting you, I would suggest giving yourselves a "make-under." Like add a few pictures of you doing interesting things - vacationing, at the beach, on a boat and maybe a few of you two dressed up for a night on the town.

I would remove the tattoo picture, the nude pic in the pool and the picture of the male half shirtless and nude. I would replace that with a picture of the male half shirtless on the beach, one of you two on vacation together (I bet she can rock a maxi dress), one of you two on vacation doing something interesting (visiting a historical site or skiing) and maybe one of you dressed up in a suit and little black dress like you are going to dinner.

But if you are happy with the people who are reaching out to you, then I would leave it the way it is.

Please let us know your thoughts. Changes, more or less of something, etc. Thanks
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