Profile review

Fort Payne, AL, Us

I do hope you understand that we're an opinionated bunch - our advice may sound harsh at times but we really do want you to be successful here.

You really need to reorganize your text - a lot of it is not in the proper section. I would copy all your text into a word processor and then evaluate each line - does it answer the question implied in the section header? Then you need to eliminate duplication and make sure everything is a complete sentence. MsMolly has given a lot of specific advice to help with that process.

The photo in the mustard colored coat is the best of the bunch - but it's not really a good photo for enticing others to read your profile. Read Velma's advice in the post at the top of the Better Profile section and have a friend take a few photos for you - always smile, be careful of the background and avoid selfies.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Phoenix, AZ, Us

Hi. I get the impression that English is not your first language and some of my suggestions would sort of depend on whether it is or is not.

Let's just go with stuff that is pretty universal though.

Your photos are mostly terrible, although for different reasons depending on the photo, and can mostly go away (I kind of like the one in the mustard colored jacket. Instead, please, please, please smile. Don't take photos in front of busy backgrounds. Don't, unless there's a reason, like you're at a pool, do a half naked photo. Try to avoid selfies in general.

Your tagline is funny and a little bit of a headscratcher that is missing a word. You need "to" in between "not" and "touch."

Your categories are a little mixed up and a good chunk of what is in Description now belongs in Looking For. That is where you say, among other things, that you're looking for a fwb.

"Clean, respectful and sane" raises red flags for me. "Clean" is pretty much a default for most people and if you're going to bring up sanity as one of your qualities, I'm going to wonder why rather than be convinced that you are sane. Especially if you are specifying sanity as a desired quality in others. Do you meet a lot of insane people? If you need to get to know people first, that goes in Looking For as well.

In Description, most of what's left after you move things to Looking For isn't useful. Your age is already in your toggles, your philosophy about pleasure says nothing about you (it's so generic it could go on a plaque), and I would imagine most people are uninterested in changing a couple's dynamic.

That leaves woodworking and your safe sex and drug policy. The policy probably goes in Additional comments. Anyway, you need to do more than say you like working with wood. So, what sort of person are you? What kinds of things do you build? Say more about yourself.

Fantasies starts off well, but two of the last three sentences are a little jarring and the one about vaping goes in Additional comments.

Which is great because what's there now is just not hitting a good note.

Anyway, collect whatever feedback people give you and then make changes. Please run it through spelling and grammar check.

Good luck.

I would like a profile review with tip on how to do a better one