Profile review

Google Docs is free and works pretty well.

Are you composing and revising on your phone? That makes life difficult - I've never attempted it but doubt you can see much of your text at one time.

Try copying all your text to a word processor on a laptop or desktop. Then as you rearrange text it is easier to notice duplication/repetition and to see how your sentences work together. Once you're reasonably happy with your text you can then run spell check and grammar check to catch any obvious problems before you copy each section back to SLS.

In general I like your profile - you probably did just fine even before asking for advice!

CatchyNickname this is awesome! Thank you for taking the time to help!

We are actually working on a new main image, many of the ones we tried (even fully clothed) ended up hidden on the app version of the site, because boobs I guess? I hear you on the permanent fangs ;-) we should probably get that in there somewhere…. Admittedly grammar is not my jam so I do appreciate the feedback and we will look it all back over. I felt it was a bit long too but I think the more we rework it and incorporate feedback like this the better it gets. I’m going to do some updates and hope to hear your thoughts! Thanks again!

Really like the adjustments you've made so far. It was one of the better profiles that's been submitted for review in my memory and it's only gotten better. There's some details that I think you'd benefit from considering, remembering that this is all meant to help, and you don't have to follow a single bit of my advice. They're just things to think about:

Your profile pic is good, but I'd like you to think about adjusting it. Right now 2/3 of the picture is palm trees, and he looks blurred out even on a 32" computer screen. Crop and resize the picture so the two of you are centered in the picture, larger, and clearer. That'll likely drive the number of your clicks dramatically not just because you're both good-looking, but it also shows an obviously casual, candid, intimate moment where both of you are quite happy just to enjoy each other's company.

You're clearly out, so consider using your first names in your profile. That will dovetail nicely into the T&A introduction story in your profile. It makes you more memorable to boot.

Your tagline could be punched up more. The rhyme is cool, so if that's an important part of it I'd lean towards "If you came here looking for T&A, you found us and we are ready to play"! Same number of syllables, still rhymes, even has a beat, but provokes some curiosity about the T&A profile name.

You might want to move "newbie friendly" way up the list. We entertain tourists from time to time ourselves, and find they're more open to just cut loose and get naked than locals. By moving that idea closer to the top, you're more likely to get a newbie couple to read through the rest of it rather than bouncing because you wouldn't be interested in a couple just starting out.

This next one is less a suggestion and more strong encouragement: Run the whole thing through a grammar checker. Take a good look at the construction of your paragraphs. As an example "That said, we really dig couples that are into repeat action. Once we know each other we LOVE to play first and all go out after! Where are our fellow brunch fuckers?! " The first sentence should drive the remainder of the paragraph, but the two sentences that follow don't say anything about repeat action nor could it logically be inferred. The last two work perfectly together, but not with the subject of the paragraph. Mind you, none of the information conveyed is bad, it's just not in the right place.

You could shorten your profile and resolve those conflicts simply by combining a few paragraphs. The same topic seems to be the focus of more than one paragraph, so condense them into one. Some paragraphs contain multiple topics, so split them into the right paragraph. That'll help you avoid the "tl;dr" syndrome. Folks will stick with you longer if your profile flows smoothly. You may not care about tl;dr (we purposefully have a long profile we composed as a discriminator) but if you do, that's one way to avoid it.

If I remember previous iterations of your profile correctly, you mentioned you both have sharpened teeth. That REALLY should be in there somewhere if I'm remember it correctly. Could be intriguing, could be off-putting, but definitely not something you'd want to surprise anyone with. Speaking personally, if I know about something like that in advance I can find the kink in it. Put Mrs. T&A on her knees about to take me in her mouth and I see some surprise pointy teeth and my dick would run for the hills.

Lastly, consider reaching out to playmates you knew under beergeeks and get a few certs. We kind of do the same thing (bang visitors) in a different tourist town, and that's something I've gotten positive feedback on. To be more specific, I have been told directly that one of the reasons tourist couples decided to meet us was our certs made us real (versus someone that would steal your kidneys)

Hope that helps, but more importantly, I hope it didn't hurt! Happy Fucking!

In the WORLD that IS straight.

Can't imagine why you'd have any problems with your photos considering the superior photo handling capabilities of SLS. ;-)

Oh good catch PhoebertAndWife didn't realize there were some duplicate photos in there!

Totally agree that rearranging content to better fit the section headers would be a major improvement.

Personally I like to see the sections be somewhat similar in size. Usually Description and Fantasies will be longer than Looking For and Add'l Comments but try not to let the difference be huge after you rearrange. You don't need to tell everything in your profile - just enough of a well rounded picture to entice people to contact you or respond when you contact them.

You could eliminate a few of you photos - many of them are essentially the same. I'd eliminate the photo of two people walking away from the camera since it's impossible to tell who the people are. And I think you have a duplicate you should delete.

Looking good now and will look better with a few tweaks.

Have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Thanks so much mayhem8 this is great. Didn’t even think about frisky being grabby but that makes sense, probably go with “flirty” instead. And you’re right the sections are definitely a bit jumbled. Working it over again now. I appreciate the feedback!

Most of what you have in Looking For fits better in the Description or the Fantasies/Experience section. You use the term "like-minded", but that means different things to different people, so it's much clearer if you just say more specifically what you're actually looking for.

For example, "Looking for couples for same/separate room full swap. She's OK with above the waist girl on girl play, but mainly looking to play with guys." Are you only looking for experienced players or are newbies OK? Are you looking for parties or just mainly 2 on 2 play? Meeting people while on the road is something that can go here or Additional Comments section.

Anyway, the things in the Looking For section should focus on what you want from others, versus things that describe you. FWIW - Use of the word "frisky" can equate to "grabby", so I'd be reluctant to use that word. Your call though.

Description looks OK, but this will fill out more as you move the content you already have that fits better here than where it is now.

Just about all of the content in Fantasies/Experience belongs either in the Looking For or Additional Comments sections. Treat each section like you're answering a question based on the topic title.

Other than lacking in "Looking For" content, I think your content is mostly OK. It just isn't in the sections it best fits in. I'm sure that isn't likely to hold you back, but moving it would be an improvement over what you have now.

Thanks for taking the time to check it out! That’s a good point. I wish they had “bi-friendly” as an option :) I do love making out with a pretty girl but am not looking to go down on one… but you’re probably right in the lifestyle that’s pretty much “straight” ;-)

I think your profile is, generally, very inviting.

I think you can and should change your orientation to straight if you aren't actually questioning your sexual orientation. Either way, that is the part of your profile that doesn't mesh with the rest. Be an ally.

Women who do love women already know that "curious" women in this lifestyle aren't actually bi.

Updated our profile (changed usernames and figured it was a good time to do a refresh). Would love some honest feedback!