profile review

I didn't look at your profile when you first posted this so I'm not sure if the current iteration is an improvement but there are several things that are off-putting.

We've offered advice on your profile in the past - and it sounds like you're reading advice to others as well. So you know that many of us equate a profile with a resume. At best, your profile is sloppy - typos, missing punctuation, sentence fragments, etc. At worst you're presenting an inaccurate picture of who you are and what you want. And it almost appears as if you are composing your text on a phone - that is never a good plan. If you are successful in sales then you know how to use words - I see little evidence of that.

You have a single male profile - mention your significant other only to say that you are playing with her knowledge and support. Any additional information about your relationship with her only invites others to ask about playing with her as well.

The horribly unequal lengths of Looking For and Description is probably most off-putting to me. It makes me think you really don't care about others. Two or three sentences per section is usually enough and more than six often results in people not reading to the end. Keeping it positive is more appealing than negativity.

Don't try to explain it all in your profile - just give us enough to entice us into exchanging messages.

This is a process - keep tweaking until you're happy with it - and let us know if you want more assistance.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi, I didn't see the first version, but this one still needs some work. Right now it has typos, not enough words in Looking For and too many in Description, plus it's got a big ole glaring red flag at the end.

So, first, you might want to change the percentages in your tagline, since at the moment it looks like you're only very rarely available. Not really a message you want to send, even if it's true.

In Looking For, surely you can come up with something more to say about people you theoretically are interested in fucking. Try for at least one more sentence (look at other profiles for inspiration if you have no idea of the kind of people you're hoping to meet).

In Description, please eliminate paragraphs two and three, neither of which do you any favors, albeit for different reasons.

Fantasies is fine.

In Additional comments, you really need to stop after the sentence that begins "Couples." It sounds as if you've been badgering your significant other, which is really not a good look, even if you sorta redeem yourself with the last sentence.

Then clean up your typos. "Alot" isn't a word, for instance, and you need spaces between sentences. Plus, read it aloud before submitting it for approval to fix the typos that a spellcheck won't find (because the words are spelt properly, but they're the wrong words).

Looks better, but re-read it and you will likely pull out the typos I noticed.

Profile updated. What do you think?

I would think Looking For could be fleshed out a bit more. For example, are you looking for local people only or willing to travel? Do you just want NSA sex or also FWBs? Are you looking for just 1 on 1 or 1 on 2 encounters or are LS parties on the table. Are you looking to play safe only or is bareback an option? Perhaps check out some other people's Looking For sections for more ideas.

Your age is posted as part of your profile as is your weight, so that and your pictures negate the need for the first couple of sentences in your Description. That will also take care of one of your typo's (i.e. losing, not loosing 30 lbs).

In general, it's a bit easier to read multiple paragraphs if you leave a space between them. You don't have so much content that this will be an issue spreading things out a little.

I can't tell from your Fantasies/Experience section which things listed are fantasies vs experience. Wouldn't hurt to make that clearer.

Perhaps consider moving the last 2 sentences in your Description to the Additional Comments. This can be fleshed out better too. For example, can you host? What is your typical availability? Again, check out other profiles for ideas. It's OK to steal ideas you like from other profiles.

Thank you Holly blue. I took your advise and made some changes. What do you think?

Well... it isn't an absolute train wreck and it isn't internet gold. People always run into problems when they self evaluate or rate themselves because it most of the time comes off as awkward or arrogant. You land firmly in the awkward category. You really don't need a 1-10. Let others look, read, and come up with their own opinion. You could flesh out some of the sections a bit more.

As you know playing separately while attached can be a deep dark hole many don't wish to approach. It is good that you are upfront and honest, which is essential. You also need some way for your s.o. to confirm that you are playing with her blessing. Not to beat a dead horse, but couples typically don't like cheaters and don't what to be caught in any drama that can happen.

It is a good thing to remind folks that you have a family. Often people have the impression that a sm has nothing to do except reply to messages and come promptly when called.

Your pictures are good. We can see a bit of your personality in them. Overall, the profile is about middle road.

I love the different perspectives that you provide. I recently erased everything and rewrote the whole thing. Would you mind offering some insight on my profile? I'm sure there are some holes that need patching.