Profile review.

Phoenix, AZ, Us

I have a super rude brain. Not only is it a constant kibbitzer, it likes offering odds, such as "10-1 that's a lie." ;-)

HollyBlueVeteran
Bangkok Noi, Th

"...my brain coughs up an estimated time it would take to flip him..."

Phoenix, AZ, Us

Sorry for the pile on, but, yeah, those who are legitimately dominant just don't bother mentioning it and they really don't have to. It's the difference between having something be integral to your makeup and playing a role. Every single time some guy tells me he's a dom, my brain coughs up an estimated time it would take to flip him. It's never agreed, not once, and since I have no objection to submission, it's not like I'm looking for reasons to disagree.

So, you're fine with your screen name, because being a bull is a legitimate role within a subculture of the subculture, but at the same time, if that's not all you want to do and be, you don't want to emphasize it.

Thank you all for being so forward and honest about the review! Much appreciated !

Virginia Beach, VA, Us

sm's who think they are [doms] aren't.

Preach! If a guy has to say he's an alpha... he's a beta.

HollyBlueVeteran
Bangkok Noi, Th

Your profile is an easy pass. Use all the advice you have gotten so far. Your lone default pic is bad and as quickly as you can use Thelma's method. Keep in mind when it comes to the real world most couples aren't looking for an sm to be dominant and most sm's who think they are aren't. In a short space you are highly repetitive and the role you want to play screams out. Every other sm out there thinks they're a bull or something and they really don't understand the relational dynamics that go into that type of play. If you want to be successful you will have to meet the majority of couples where they are. The simple reality is that dynamic are different with every couple or group you play with. The guys who insists on being the dominant bullish male all the time typically is super insecure and/ or a jackass. Don't sell yourself as him. The overall feeling with the text is that you like yourself too much and it is a major turn off.

Phoenix, AZ, Us

Hi. I hope you read other threads so you at least got a bit of the flavor of the kinds of responses you might get. It's well meant but can get quite blunt.

Okay, so, bonus points, you're not a blue gumby and you're not naked, but I think you could do better for your public photos. Please follow Velma's advice.

As far as your tagline, if you want people to be intrigued, you might want to avoid meaningless terms like "bullish tact" and go for something clever instead.

For the text of your profile, while it's decent, by the time I got to the end of it, I didn't like you. I mean, yeah, I can be cranky, but I don't generally dislike people. I think it's the way you use words rather than something inherent in you. So, let's fix that.

Please limit your use of the word "professional" to one iteration. Similarly, "male." Also, unless it's modified in some way, like "male addition," the word you want is "man." Plus, read what you write out loud, so that you don't get stuck with syntax errors like talking about women and using the word "woman."

Use complete sentences (something that will be evident as a problem if you read your profile out loud), particularly in Description, where the goal is to be interesting rather than to just get through it in the tersest possible manner. Lose the last sentence, which makes no sense, given that you haven't been sentenced to death.

In Fantasies, myself is one word, male isn't capitalized, and it's (again) women not woman; if you call yourself a male addition in Looking For you can't use addition again in Fantasies. Particularly not when coupled with "dominating," which makes no sense in this context, even if you fill in the missing word. Basically, just use clearer writing instead of throwing random words at the question of your experience and fantasies.

Fill in the last section. Not only do you not want to forego a last chance to make a good impression, you don't want to suggest you can't be bothered to finish things. End on a high note.

I actually think there are probably ways in which you can increase your chances of a positive response, but apparently my brain is so stuck on your first being more likeable that it's not bothering to be helpful in that way. I hope you make changes and then come back for a review.

Either way, good luck.

Virginia Beach, VA, Us

Take a look at the sticky that I wrote above the forum.

Basically you need more pictures - One of you dressed up for a date, one of you doing something interesting, and one of you at the beach.

They all need to be full-body pictures and they all have to be taken by someone else.

Swinging is about fantasy. Think about this: What fantasies are you going to fulfill with your current profile? Solve that riddle and you will be successful. I want an interesting, unique guy. Do you think you fill that role and does that come across in your profile?

Looking for any advice on my profile!! Thank so much if you decide to leave a note or two!!