Profile review

I know that you are working on getting more/better pics, but let me add a few more comments for you to consider.

I like the car selfie. The lighting is good, the colors are great.

Get rid of the selfie of Mr.Major. I happen to like like selfies in general, but only if they are well done. This one is too close, the lighting is crap, and shows a blah background.

I don’t like your main profile picture either. I do like your smiles, and the feeling of togetherness that the picture engenders. Looking at that picture makes me think that you are a friendly, warm, loving couple.
The problems are the grey, flat lighting, way too much bulky clothing, and the background that looks like a used car lot. Take those smiles, put them in a restaurant, or living room, and you’d have a winning picture.

Thanks, creative type writing always gave me issues. Appreciate the feedback and will keep tweaking. I agree with all the points made.

I think some of the problem is really poor sentence structure in the Description area. When you list several interests it is more pleasing if they all follow the same structure = watching/talking sports, dabbling in graphic design and camping in the great outdoors. I'm not quite sure how to deal with "enjoys gaming" in that sentence but since you are familiar with the type of gaming you can probably make it work. And too many sentences start with we, he or she - variety in your sentence composition improves the readability. Now it almost feels like a list of sentences.

I'm not a fan of the ending of each individual's paragraph where the other tells their favorite sexual or nonsexual feature of the other - could just be me though.

In Fantasies you need to change "here" to "hear" and you've repeated "meet fun people and have a good experience" from the Looking For section - probably should delete one of the occurrences.

MsMolly's suggestion of reading the text out loud sounds silly but it really works for finding problems.

You're making progress - good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. Yeah, I agree that it's missing something. Your photos show a lot of personality and somehow the text of your profile is more than a little bland. I think maybe if you read it out loud, some of the places where it falls flat might become apparent. If that doesn't work, think of this as your resume for both long lasting friendships and singular nights with compatible folks. And then turn it around. What would you like to know if you were them? Is it in your profile? Do you sound interesting and vibrant?

Reading out loud will probably also catch your typos, which might help.

Also, MMF is a very different thing than MFM, so you might want to fix that if he is actually straight.

We will work on new pics over the weekend see if we cant come up with some new ones. I edited the written profile with some suggestions but I still feel it is missing something, just cant tell what right now. Removed the () and edited some of the verbiage. May take a min to show the edits.

This is a sex site and you'd think people would want information about how you sex before agreeing to meet. That's not actually true for a lot of us. Partly, it's like getting a report card from the one who loves you best, so the metrics are suspect, but mostly it's that isn't the thing that will make a connection.

I went to a small hotel party last night, where there were nine new people I could have had sex with, at least theoretically. By the time it got to that point, it was really clear who I actually wanted to have sex with and vice versa, even though everyone still had their clothes on and we hadn't talked any specifics about sex. Your profile is like the those of us at that party. It's your charm and uniqueness and ability to make the beginnings of a connection that attract people and make them consider having sex with you. The details of his cock or her porn habits aren't anything like as interesting as what kind of people you are and whether we'd make each other laugh. So, focus your profile on the things that make you unique.

What you have for individual interests is good, but it's hard to tell whether it's enough buried as it is with unnecessary other things. You might need to say more about yourselves as a couple.

In Fantasies, there's nothing wrong with looking for that elusive single woman, but by framing it as your ultimate goal you're indicating that any couples you find along the way are chopped liver. That probably isn't the impression you want to make.

In Additional comments, the only thing I'd change is "please message us" instead of "please don't be afraid..."

That's all I have. Good luck!

Hi. I know I'm late and it's certain that I'll duplicate some advice, because stream of consciousness doesn't really allow for editing, but I have some thoughts. Also, thank you for being lovely about distilling some of the information from other critiques as you worked on your own profile as well as eliminating the need for a warning. ;-)

So, first, your photos. I adore the one of the two of you together. It so charming and sweet. Also, the head shot of him. The car selfie of her is, first of all a car selfie and second, while she looks beautiful, she also looks...sullen, maybe? Anyway, it's a great shot but not a great shot to draw in others. And here's the problem with photos of body parts: They are usually taken by someone who is very fond of said body part, but when you put it out there in public, others don't have the context, so it's just a body part and it lacks the attraction it has for the photographer. Totally okay to have a good eye catching shot of her assets - it's mostly men doing the looking here and a sexy pose is definitely going to attract attention - but instead of body parts, take Mrs. U's advice and make it a sexy shot, because that gives context for those of us who don't already love her ass. I hope that makes sense.

So, your tagline needs to change. Substitute something that either draws people in, is funny or short and sweet. What's wrong with that bald statement that actually belongs in Looking For is that it's trite in this section, so there's nothing in it that will draw people to investigate further. Instead, it's kind of a duh, plus the consensus is that "like minded" is a completely meaningless term. Seriously, you can do better just by throwing down some random words, and even better by stealing from someone far away from you, if you can't think of anything.

In Looking For, it's women not females (it's noun vs. adjective and just because SLS gets it wrong, you needn't follow along) and it really would be useful to know what you play style is, even if it's that you're open to everything from one time things to going on vacation together. This section is your first opportunity for others to see themselves and identify with what you're looking for, so a certain amount of detail is warranted.

In Description, I like the start of it. It is sweet and I think it's useful to describe yourselves as laid back, because that sets a nice tone, but wind the term into a sentence in a way that doesn't require the circuitous "We consider ourselves to be..." portion of the program. Someone already handled the drama question beautifully (really, just leave it out) and the sexually oriented content was also addressed, but I'd like to explain further, since it's so counterintuitive.

OP: It's actually nice to see someone tap into the suggestions already made BTW. A lot of the suggestions wind up being the same or similar. Wish more people submitting a profile for review would do that.

Your profile is very detailed, and your pictures look fun, but I didn't think your profile sounded very fun.

Speaking your mind and condescension are 2 vastly different things friend.

Your profile isn’t bad.

Your pictures show that you are in love, which is good.

Your biggest problem is that you don’t have any full-body pictures. This is a huge issue. I have a reputation for speaking my mind, so I’m just going to say it:

You are wearing too many clothes. This doesn’t mean that you should take nudes. It means you need at least one picture of the two of you dressed nicely like you are going to a nice dinner or church.

Go out to a nice dinner and have the waitress take your picture.

Based on the clothes the guy is wearing, I have a feeling he may not have nicer “date” clothes.

There is a Mens Warehouse not far from you in Rochester. Go there and have him fitted for the following:

1 Navy Sport coat.
1 Pair of Grey Slacks.
1 pair of Khaki slacks
2 Shirts - Navy and White.
1 pair tan shoes.
1 tan belt.

My husband can go around the world from tea with the queen to a job interview in that mix and match outfit.

Make sure you get the clothes tailored. Do this, then take your Date picture - full body.

Based on the car selfie, I’m sure the lady half has plenty of dresses. If you don’t have heels, go get a cheap pair of nude heels from Ross. Wear them during your photo shoots. Heels pump up your ass and make you look better. They should be at least 3” in length.

I’m not saying you have to wear heels cooking dinner or when smashing the patriarchy, but do it when you take pictures.

I opened a private gallery to show you the kind of pictures you should have.

Take the date picture and then repost do we can re-review.

I agree with the feedback, pics are something were working on now so should get them updated soon. The profile content stuff also makes sense, some quick edits should round that out. Thanks for the ideas!

I like the profile content.

When it comes to the pictures, I suggest a sexy photo shoot fantasy acted out by the two of you. Use a neutral colored background without any distracting things in view of the camera [laundry baskets, dishes in sink, etc. ] Have the horny photographer {hubby} take pics of the model (wife) wearing those orange undies and high heels bent over the bed or with one foot propped up on a chair or other poses and let the assets be prominently displayed. Change up the photographic wardrobe with a couple different lacy silky bits of underwear and take lots of pictures. Pick the best couple and put them in your private photo gallery. Pick the best one and crop faces out for your public gallery.

Good luck
Mrs U

From the Looking for section I don't get any idea if you're just looking for NSA sex or FWBs, or if it doesn't matter. Might be worth another sentence or 2.

In Description, when some people see the word "drama" in a profile they assume that the couple is more likely to cause it. When you think of it, nobody likes drama so you really don't need to expound on that. Kind of like saying, "If you're looking to poke me in the eye with sharp objects, we are not for you" ;-)

In Fantasies/Experience, you mention some experience but not what that is. It may be helpful to say something about that in a general sense (i.e. we have full swapped with 1 other couple, did a 3-some, etc). If you have at least seen each other playing with others then people will know you are OK with that.

You have some minor things like (text in parenthesis) that don't really need them, but overall it looks OK to me.

Looks like you already have read various other reviews and taken advantage of the advice given others. Nothing too terrible jumps out at me about your profile.

You might want to say a bit more about what you're looking for - one time encounters, on-going FWB arrangements or something in between. Description probably needs the most work - mostly just cutting down a bit. I'd cut way back on the sexual details - leave a bit for play partners to discover on their own. Don't describe your bodies - let your pictures do that for you.

Why are you posting selfies? Take pictures of each other for your individual photos. Of your current pictures I really only like the one of both of you - you're both smiling (although she looks like she's also freezing). That is my #1 rule for pictures - smile! Then watch for cluttered or visually chaotic backgrounds and avoid selfies. I'm not a fan of the pictures of her ass - but the one in the orange undies is particularly bad (classic example of visually chaotic background that makes it hard to focus on the subject). So get a few pictures of each other in addition to the two of you together (out to dinner and/or doing something fun).

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

I've read aton of these posts and we rewrote the profile. One thing I anticipate is needing 1 or 2 more pics with us together full body. I'm not offended by criticisms and understand how this forum works. Have at it.