Profile review

I pretty much agree with the advice you've already received. You might want to try composing your text in a word processor on a computer and run both spell check and grammar check on it before pasting the text into your profile on SLS.

In Looking for I'd delete both the line about women over 30 (change youngest Desired Age from 18 to 30 instead) and the line about good email and pictures available.

In Description I'd delete both the line about being straight Asian guy and about average build with few extra pound. Add a few lines about what you like to do for fun. It looks like you enjoy sightseeing and sports - include that as well as anything else that might indicate common interests with couples and ladies you hope to meet. Things like such as cooking, enjoying movies or ballroom dancing.

In Fantasies I'd delete the line about spending time with elder ladies - you've already addressed that by changing your Desired Age to 30. And as MsMolly mentioned change the last line to "would like to participate" and leave off the info in parentheses. I assume you mean gangbang but you might want to spell it out rather than abbreviate - you already have a problem of being possibly misunderstood so don't make anyone guess at what you mean.

Additional Comments should not be left blank so maybe this is where you should state that English is not your native language and maybe where you are from originally.

Your current pictures are OK - not great but I've seen worse. An full length picture dressed for a casual date (nice jeans & polo shirt or dress slacks and dress shirt) should be the next thing to add. In a private gallery you might want to add a few smiling face pictures that you open when you initially contact someone (and let them know you opened your pictures) or when someone contacts you. You always want to smile, watch for messy distractions in the background and avoid selfies.

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. Okay, if you are only interested in women 30+, change your toggles for age preference to reflect that. Also, please, please, please put that English is your second language in Additional comments. If your spoken English is better than your written English, put that in too, because right now I'd worry that we couldn't communicate, because I have a hard time with heavy accents.

That last line in Looking For about people having pics open for your viewing pleasure? You need to delete that immediately. I'm not sure what you're going for, but it sounds entitled and rude, which is probably not the impression you want to make. People will or will not have photos for you to look at and you'll just need to be okay with that.

You do not need to mention your extra pounds. That is what photos are for.

Your verb tenses need work and that's probably not feasible, but it would help if you corrected the last two items in Fantasies from "I like" to "I would like," which is the right tense.

Other than that, your grasp of written English is going to hamper you, particularly if you don't run what you write through a grammar and spelling check. But it is what it is and there are people for everyone. Good luck.

I made changes to my profile can anyone review it

english is my second language

Hi your profile is not great. It's okay if English is not your first language - is it? - but you should probably say so in order to manage the expectations of others. And you'll need to figure out how to communicate well enough in writing that people are willing to take a chance on you. Is that something you can do? If not, you would be better off attending clubs, parties and meet and greets that allow single men

But if you do want to try the on line route, you need to add some content to your profile.

In Looking For, it's who you're looking for - couples and single women - and what you want - friends with benefits, up for whatever works for them, something else entirely.

In Description, please put something more about yourself in this section. There is nothing about your being Asian, average and straight that would compel my interest.

Fantasies isn't terrible, but you need a period at the end of that sentence.

Additional comments needs something. Read other profiles if you don't know what could go here. Unless you come across something that looks like a legal notice. Don't use that.

Good luck and let us know when you've added some content.

In Description, while it's

Did you join the site because you think it would be easy to get laid? I'm asking based on the other topic you started.

Being a single male on a site for couples is very tough. Stand out from the rest. If people think you didn't spend a lot of time on your profile, they probably don't think you are that serious about playing.
Your profile should be polished. If English is a second language, I empathize. It is a crazy language. However do the best you can or have someone proofread it. Capitalize the first letter of every sentence and use punctuation at the end. If you want to say "average" don't abbreviate it to "avg". That style is okay for texting but on a profile page, it looks better to make it professional.
Say a bit more for each section. Again, you want to stand out and give us a feeling of who you are. Admitting a small amount of sexual experience might be bad but if you really want to put that in say it in a positive way. (I have limited experience but I'm eager to explore, I want to learn new things in the bedroom, willing to learn, etc.)
The pictures are fine. One of them is a duplicate. The one with the aircraft carrier is cool even though you can't see much of you in it; it shows that you like to get out and are fun. This is getting picky but you might consider editing your face in a different way. Try using a blur tool with a circle selection. That way, it doesn't look like pen scribble. If you are comfortable, you might consider showing a little bit of your face; maybe something only blurring the upper part of your face. It would help to have a few more pictures in fun settings. You're on the right track; just more.
If you need any more help or want me to proofread anything, feel free to send me a message.

Btw I am a Asia. Dude..
With avg built

Please review my profile and let me know di I need to do any changes
Thanks in advance.
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