Profile revamp

Hi. It's definitely better. I have some quibbles, but nothing major.

In your tagline, you need a comma between "public" and "naughty."

In Looking For, I think you can spin that notch in the bedpost sentence in such a way that it sounds more positive. Maybe "I'm definitely looking for mutual attraction rather than bedpost notching." And then I'd suggest you lose the sentence about looking for hwp people. It's partly so you don't repeat "looking" from the previous sentence and "people" from the next, but it's also because women are already self-conscious. Maybe say you have a preference for those who are hwp? You can always turn down anyone who doesn't fit your template, but this way you've left room in case Sophia Loren shows up.

In Description, leave out the hwp thing. Your photos show that. Maybe go back and insert that you work out? You can also leave out your height and weight. They're in your stats and don't need to be repeated. "Hygiene is a must." I know what you mean, but I also know that it's unlikely people are going to meet you reeking of sweat and sour milk if you're even sort of good at reading profiles. So, what you're signaling is that you think women and their pussies are a little stinky. Probably not a good idea to introduce that doubt, you know?

Instead, tell me more about you. What do you like to do when you aren't fucking? Any hobbies or interests?

In Fantasies, it's woman rather than female and the rest of it works really well.

In Additional comments it's "women" not "woman" that you prefer pleasuring.

It's not the most exciting profile ever, but I think it does a good job of representing you and what you're looking for. Your photos are going to be important, so maybe have someone else take a few?

Thank you ggmm. I have made some changes. Nothing with photos yet as I don't regularly take pics of myself. What do you think. Any a d all criticism welcome.

I think ggmm pretty much nailed it. When filling in any of the sections, ask yourself if the content matches the heading. For example, in Additional Comments you start out with "I am looking for...". That's what the Looking For section is for. Comments about email and such in the Looking For section should go in the Additional Info.

Probably the single most important section is the Description, because it's where you can set yourself apart from others. It is also where you have the least content. For a lot of people it's not just about the sex. They want to know that you maybe have some common ground/interests. You want to talk about the stuff that people can't see in the pictures. Do you like music, dancing, old movies, horse back riding, golf, etc, etc. Something that another may relate to.

If you are truly looking for a girl to do parties and such, your profile makes it sound like once you feel comfortable dating in the LS world that you plan to go back to the vanilla world and leave your party mate behind. Not a very appealing proposition.

Hi Steven. Your profile could definitely use a refresh.

First, you need an actual tagline. Not only is having your kik in your profile a violation of SLS's TOS, it will not do what a good tagline can, which is encourage people to open your profile.

Following on that, roughly in order, your stats say you live in Leesburg, VA, and your text says you live in Bridgeport, WV. Please pick one and then eliminate the notation in the body of your profile. Your profile is more than two years old, but the text says you're recently out of a relationship. Also, when you say you're looking to explore before getting back into dating, you are indicating that you think swinger women are an easy landing space before you rejoin the vanilla dating game. Congratulations on being so efficient in losing the interest of every single woman within 100 miles. You'd lose married women too, but it's mostly the husbands setting up MFMs here, so they might not even notice.

If you're open to m/m oral, then bicurious is fine. If it's more oh, hey, I'm not going to freak out if there's some incidental touching, then straight is more accurate.

Mention of your willingness to share your email and photos is something I wouldn't put in a profile anyway, but putting them in this section, which is already so impersonal that I wonder if you're looking for actual humans, makes a poor impression. Please say something about the kind of people you're looking for. Any characteristics that you might be interested in? Anything? Also, that last line needs to go. It doesn't belong here and it's structurally awkward as well as poorly punctuated.

In Description, you're again impersonal. There has to be more to you than average white guy who hits the gym regularly. What makes you unique? What makes you Steven? Say something about that. You're selling yourself here, or should be.

Fantasies is good but since you have a cert, you also have at least some experience. You might want to say that you have MFM experience and enjoy it (or whatever).

In Additional comments, eh. Fine. But add "also" between the I and the am or you lose married women too. And it's have a good time, not gave a good time.

Your photos aren't doing you any favors. You have standard car selfie and standard naked selfie with a messy, cluttered background. I like the third one, which has the advantage of showing some personality. Feel free to put a full length nude in your private gallery, but please, please, please pay attention to the background. No dirty clothes, mess, etc. And the next face selfie you take should have your face in a pleasant expression.

Maybe think about who you are and what you want and put that in your profile.

Would anyone be interested in giving some advise on bettering my profile. What do I need to do to enhance and attract others?

Thanks,
Steven