Profile Help

Yeah - a big block of text with typos is not appealing. I had a hard time reading it in order to comment here about it - I would not read it if I were searching for someone to play with. It reads like a brain dump with no organization and some repetition. You're going to need to take another whack at the revisions.

Most of us are busy - your tag line should entice us to open your profile, your profile should entice us to send a message (or reply to one) and your messages should entice us to meet. Your profile does not need to tell every last detail - save some things for messages or meetings.

If you're composing on your phone then just stop. Go find a real computer and compose your text in a real word processor, preferably one with grammar check in addition to spell check (and be sure to run both when you think you're finished). Figure out the difference between there, their and they're. Get rid of text message abbreviations and emojis. Telling you this is like a resume didn't seem to work - pretend this is a college paper for the pickiest professor you know. MsMolly's suggestion to read the text out loud sounds silly but it really does help find where things aren't quite right.

SLS is a bit quirky about formatting - you need to hit "enter" four times to put a blank line between your first and second paragraph in a section, but you only need to hit "enter" twice between the rest of your paragraphs. Forum posts work the same way.

Hi. Let me get this out of the way first: FIX YOUR GRAMMAR AND SPELLING.

Either you wrote this on your phone or you don't know what those underlines mean. Then get rid of every lol and hmu, because this is basically your job interview and those are a solid no. Also, try for declarative sentences - that means get rid of things like "I would say," and go straight to "I have an athletic build" - because they will make you sound both more mature and more confident, both traits you want to demonstrate here

In Looking For, it's kind of a mess, but it's a good mess. Just lose the lol, make it women instead of Females and fix your sentence structure. It sounds weird, but reading what you wrote out loud is invaluable here.

Same thing with Description, where it's the interesting kind of mess again. Just fix the typos and grammar, including your non-standard approach to capitalizing random letters, lose the lols, read it out loud, etc.

In Fantasies, there's just a little too much detail, so do some pruning. Also, if you haven't updated your age, do it now, because it isn't automatic.

Your dislikes can go, because it's highly unlikely anyone is going to ask you to piss on them (I've been doing this for years and it has only happened to me once) and the rest is even less likely. If someone asks to peg you, say no; it needn't be here. The part about this being an older profile but not used goes down in Additional comments as the last paragraph.

In Additional comments, it's SINGLE MEN (not males) and I actually kind of like how you have alluded to the potential for bi play but that's only true if you are interested in it. If not, don't bring it up.

That's all I have now. Go forth and edit.

“ The real question is what are YOU looking for? lol.”

That’s a great line. Following it up with lol tells me it’s bullshit that you think somebody might want to hear.

“ love to hear from there experiences, stories, their life, etc”

One of the they’re, their, there’s is correct, do you know which one? Believe it or not, poor grammar and punctuation matters to a lot of the people on here.

Add a few more pics and run your written parts through a word processor and you should be aces. Good luck!

Alright. My profile is update. I will admit that the structure of it is a bit all over the place. I was trying to share more info, but not sure if I shared too much. Hopefully it seems better to you guys :)

Hi. Your profile is so far from where it needs to be that I'm with PAW and want to suggest you scrap what you have and go do some research before subjecting the rest of us to it. If nothing else, please get rid of this: Hopefully, learn a few things and better my sex game.

You're already fighting against the perception that very young men are shit at fucking, so don't make it worse by all but admitting it's true in your case.

Noble, you have gotten off to a fair start with your profile pic. Try it with a flat/ uncluttered background, use the timer function on your phone app, and smile. Start there and use the advice in the sticky at the top from Thelma. Is this about sex? Yes, it definitely is and most LS people like dealing with other people and not anatomical pieces to hop on and off of. Be yourself and find a way to express yourself in your pictures.

You probably typed all of this on your phone and as already suggested that type of formatting can be quite off-putting for many people. Toss out your description. Anything that comes across as boasting whether it be about prowess or the size of one's banana never lands well. All too often those are the men who lasted 3 minutes and I could barely find the bulge in their pants. "Is that a tic-tac in your pocket or are you happy to see me?" Comes to mind. You received solid advice to let this section be about who you are. When you re-type the profile do it in wp program and think of it as having a conversation with a lady or couple sitting across from you while you fidget with the top button of your shirt. Try and be relaxed be still a little nervous.

As already mentioned, the LS is definitely not the same as random hook-ups. From the outside, the similarities can fool you and movies and tv rarely get it right. As a single you need to just ask yourself, "Would I really enjoy watching my girlfriend/ wife flirt with another man at dinner and then have sex later?" Foundationally, the LS is about doing something for the benefit and enjoyment of one's partner and it is a mutual expression. We find enjoyment from our partners finding enjoyment in the LS. If that sounds odd or strange then it isn't a big deal. Not everyone is geared toward the LS and there isn't anything good or bad about that. Again, be yourself and don't end up in situations that push you beyond what you are comfortable with. Single men have terrible experiences because they never truly understand the LS.

I hope you've read other reviews - we're quite an opinionated bunch and this process may seem a bit harsh. Just remember that it's all about your profile and not you personally.

Actually this first bit is about you personally - I'm wondering if you really are a swinger or just a single guy hoping for lots of ladies to hop on your dick. If you've had enough experience to know, or at least think, that you enjoy swinging then stick around and we'll help with your profile. If you think this will be easier than picking up someone on a vanilla dating app or at your local bar then you're in for a lot of disappointment. The single ladies and couples that play with single gentlemen can be very picky because there are so many single gentlemen available.

Several things jump out at me about your profile:

• Your join date is a long time ago yet your tag line says you're still building your profile. Your tag line is meant to entice others to open your profile and read more about you - so you might want to rethink what you've written here.

• Stop with the text message abbreviations. They indicate a lack of effort. Generally I give up on someone that won't send messages that are complete sentences, let alone someone that uses abbreviations all the time (most of the time I have no idea what they mean). I'm not alone in that.

• Drop the upper limit on your age preference range to something a bit more realistic. For a 50 year old the default might be a reasonable range, if a bit optimistic on the low end. For someone your age that doesn't mention an interest in older ladies it just looks like you'll fuck anyone - again, it implies a lack of effort.

• You focus solely on sex. We're all here for sex - that's a given. Most of us want to know a bit more about the sort of person you are before we invite you into our bed. Are you a dancing fool? Do you hike the great outdoors? Are you the life of a party or do you hang back a bit? Vanilla interests also make for great conversation starters when messaging.

Look for a post from mayhem8 titled "Generic profile advice" and read it. Then read other reviews given to single gentlemen. Look for advice from HollyBlue and MsMolly - they've been at this a while plus they are great at explaining why. Velma's photo advice is a sticky at the top of the Better Profiles forum.

Let us know when your revised profile has been approved and we can provide more specific advice.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi, I want to know how I can make my profile stand out and how I can better introduce myself to profiles. Also how I can better message other profiles . Any help is appreciated :)