Profile Help!

Thank you all for your help! Your criticism was needed. Also thank you for not being too hard on me!

Hey JP - I'm pretty much in agreement with MsMolly so read her advice again and pretend it's from me. Aim for short and sweet - most people read a profile rather quickly so you want to give them enough to pique their interest but not so much that they get bogged down in extraneous detail.

Toss or move most of what is in Looking For and try to put into words who and what you're looking for (hot-wife playing alone, couples for MFM, on-going FWB, one-time encounters, etc). Surely you have more interests than hockey - do you cook, feed stray cats, take landscape photos? That is the sort of info to add into Description after deleting the obvious (height & HWP). Add just a hint of a fantasy before saying you'll tell more when asked.

Definitely delete the bathroom selfie. There are only a few things to remember about pictures - smile, watch for visually chaotic backgrounds and avoid selfies. Friends or complete strangers will almost always take a picture for you.

Have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi, JP. I don't have particularly mean things to say, but they might feel a little personal. Really, I just want your profile to do a better job of representing you.

I would like to look at your photo gallery, but somehow SLS has managed to combine it with someone else's, along with their 29 certs. Okay, no, now I have it. I can keep them separate if I'm careful. Please lose the bathroom selfie. Instead, have someone - a stranger, a friend, any server - take full body photos of you with your clothes on. Bonus points for being in front of interesting backgrounds or doing interesting things.

Your tagline is fine, not exciting, but fine. If you haven't changed it or your profile default in six months, now's a good time.

In Looking For, you can lose the first line, because this section isn't about you. It's about those you are looking for and what you're looking to do with them. So, fewer uses of the word "I" in this section, please and rewrite it so it really is about others.

Description has one interesting fact, that you play hockey, information that is better handled with toggles and photos (height and body composition) and a little bit about who you are as a person. I think you can do better. The whole I'm shy about talking about myself needs to not apply here any more than it would apply to writing your resume. Do you want the job? Then work for it. So, who are you? What is special about you? What are your other interests? Maybe even say a little more about hockey than that it keeps you in shape. It's such an interesting contrast to your self description of being calm and laid back (my daughter played hockey and those words don't come to mind when I think of her former teammates).

Fantasies is kinda cute, but you've lost an opportunity to have people identify with you or say, oh, hey, we're interested in that too. You could also just confine yourself to saying what kind of interactions you want (NSA, FWB, whatever) in Looking For and moving the configurations you're most interested in down here. If you have experience, especially in MFM, say so.

Additional comments is fine if you add "Yep, all of you." and put a comma in "let's."

I hope others show up to help refine your profile, but in any case feel free to keep coming back until you think you have exactly what you need.

Good luck!

Hello everyone, my name is JP. I was hoping that some of you can critique my profile and provide helpful pointers on how to improve it. Im relativly shy when it comes talking about myself so any advice would be helpful. Thank you!