Profile Critiques

For the love of Corey Hart just put on a pair of sunglasses. The strike through is super distracting and a bit lazy when it comes to ways to obscure your identity. Also, just be honest with yourself and realize it doesn't really obscure your identity. Just take the dive and show your eyes, put on some shades, or use a rectangular blur. Your smile does help you quite a bit. Try and get some decent pictures without the jacket that aren't selfies and you should be in great shape.

You do still have a few typos to clean up. Also, you ask for a hotwife twice in the looking for section. One of the things to keep in mind is that many couples will not immediately allow hotwife play until they are comfortable with you. You don't come across as pushy but be aware that if you push for the hotwife only option in messages you may turn off some of who you are looking for.

Good luck.

"Good hygiene is more of a default that really shouldn't have to be specified."

That is almost always my position as well, but there's a reason I didn't mention it this time.

In this case, the picture the OP is painting of himself is a little vague, but what he has going for him is that grin and the self described non-pushiness. There is something about the mention of good hygiene that underscores the all American boy appeal in a way that is apparent even if I can't explain it.

Regarding my last post, there are more "hobbies" listed other than sex but the current options (hooks) are working out, hiking, or a movie. Nothing wrong with that, but it is a limited list of potential conversation starters.

In light of the SMs that list straight but do limited guy/guy play, having straight in the profile AND toggles is not a bad thing. Good hygiene is more of a default that really shouldn't have to be specified.

Looks like you decided on obscuring your photos - you might want to try to find a less distracting way of achieving that goal. And you now have a few photos duplicated in your public gallery.

Your text looks a lot better. I'd probably delete both references to being straight - it is in you stats and you shouldn't have to repeat it. I'd also leave out the bit about good hygiene. To me, mentioning either implies that you expect problems in those areas - but I might be alone in that assumption.

So a bit of rearranging and you should be good for now.

Have fun!

Hi. Definitely much improved, sir. I have some additional suggestions, but they're relatively minor.

Direct language signals a kind of confidence that is attractive to others. So, in Looking For, you could remove "Ideally," and "established by trust...parties" without materially altering the meaning. In that section, you also need a comma between "welcome" and "either," and an apostrophe in husband's. You could probably lose the emoji as well.

In Description, you can lose that "So," and add in avid and insert an "am" in front of "a busy professional."

In Fantasies, for the first time, you display all of the enthusiasm I was looking for, so even though it's long and a little too detailed, I'm not going to suggest many changes. I think you should get rid of the sentence where you entered to candles and in this instance hot wife is two words, because a hotwife is something specific.

In Additional comments, maybe move down the Hope to meet from Description, where it doesn't belong, to end this section.

Like I said, nothing major. Really nice job.

Looked OK. Not sure if I'm seeing it with the recent changes. Did notice a typo - "Am an movie watcher! ". Thinking the word "avid" is missing.

Some may feel the fantasy section may be a bit too detailed but I kind of like it. Perhaps a bit more along the, "What you like to do besides sex" in the Description would help. These are just hooks for others to engage you with/about.

Hi Molly & Phoebert’s Wife,
Thank you both so much for your replies! I read both of your comments and have made the changes you brought up. Let me know if you get a chance to glance over my updated profile :)

I understand the inclination towards the bullet point list - tried it myself several rewrites ago - but it isn't really a good look for a profile. You want the various sections to be consistent in style. A few sentences in each generally works best and use an extra line between paragraphs within a section.

MsMolly has given you great pointers for improving Looking For & Fantasies based on what you already have. In Description you need to tell us what makes you an interesting person more than about the attributes that might relate to sex. What do you do in your free time? Do you hike, take pictures from a drone, raise chickens for eggs? Do you enjoy dive bars or quirky restaurants or could care less? Does your cat rule your house with an iron paw or do you watch tropical fish to relax from your high-stress job?

I suggest composing off-site (in a word processor on your computer) so you can run a better spell check and a grammar check on the text when you think you're happy with it. That will catch most errors. Reading it out loud sounds silly but is great for finding awkward phrasing. Clean means that you wash regularly - say disease-free if that is what you really mean. Let your photos tell us about your body.

Velma has great advice for core picture and really only a few are needed for a single guy - full body photo dressed for a meet & greet, various photos doing fun things, maybe a beach or pool photo to show off your body. If you want to obscure your face in your public gallery that's fine but use some of the same photos in a private gallery without obscuring your face. Always smile, watch for clutter in the background and avoid selfies. Your pictures aren't great but they'll do until you get better ones. Other people are usually happy to take your picture when you are out somewhere so there is no excuse for selfies.

Post here again after you've done some more work on the profile and we'll let you know if you're moving in the right direction. There are many threads that can help you learn how to be a successful single guy in the lifestyle - if you read a few you'll see a recurring theme to the advice. All of it takes time and work!

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. The odds aren't actually stacked against you. Instead, you're part of a large group pursuing a smaller group, which means you need to stand out in order to succeed. So, the odds aren't your problem, at least not at the moment.

I don't have a ton of time (about four minutes), so this will be short, blunt, and not at all sweet. It's well meant, though, so keep that in mind.

Your photos confuse me. Three face pics with a distracting line through the eyes and then a 3/4 photo with you looking down at your phone. Pick a side in the anonymity game. Also, if she doesn't show up, see if you can find Velma giving advice on single guy photos somewhere in Better Profiles.

Looking For isn't terrible, but the second sentence, with the absence of "3somes," and the addition of an apostrophe in I'd, belongs in Fantasies. Add an extra line break so there's white space between paragraphs. Address the issue of solo women as well, since you've expressed an interest. Then just lose "regardless of the kind," and you're more or less good.

Description - Eh. You're more than a brief collection of line items. So, how about creating a paragraph here to give an idea of who you are. A better idea than you have given so far. People, even those who are looking for a stunt cock, still are more likely than not going to choose based on who you are. So, what makes you unique? What are some of the things you like to do? What will we talk about? How do we make that connection and start to establish at least that bare minimum of liking that leads to continued interactions?

You have the beginnings in Fantasy if you move the misplaced bit (and it's misplaced because Looking For is about who you're looking for). Then say something about your experience, even if it's currently nonexistent.

Additional comments is the place where you have a last chance to charm and interest. Don't waste it.

This isn't as comprehensive as I'd like, but your profile currently doesn't have a lot with which to work. Add some content and then come back for a review, please. It'll be worth your time.

Good luck.

I know the odds are stacked against me since I am a single male. So... I would like a honest profile review with what I can add, take off, and do to make sure I get responses from the messages I send out. Look forward to hearing from you!

Thank you,
-Mark