Profile Critique Please

Thank you both!

Hi. I mostly have impressions rather than a specific critique and I don't know how helpful that will be. The one really critical thing is that I have absolutely no sense of who you are looking for. None. I know you only want bi couples, but that's it. I think that's a problem and will limit the amount of positive response you receive pretty severely.

It would probably be helpful if you used Looking For to talk more specifically about others, something of who you are looking for and what you would like and rather less about yourselves.

Other than that, your age range is oddly specific, you could probably prune some of the repetition and it looks like you've figured out the smoking/drinking toggles, so that part can go.

I think repeated references to Sir are going to turn off people who would be fine with it if they met you in person (because it sounds more asymmetric than it probably is in practice) and wonder if it would be better to only mention it once. The same might be true of the board game references.

Generally though, I think it's well written, interesting, individual, and likely to be fishing in a really small pond.

Oh, and periods go after etc. and in i.e.

Good luck.

My apologies, I believe I fixed it.

Hi There,
I know the line about no protection is a little snarky and needs changing. However, besides that, if you could please give us an honest critique, I'd really appreciate it.

Thanks,
StartingHere (H - [the female])