Profile critique

Thank you all for your help!

Oh no not an unexpected beard. LOL

You should start your own separate thread.

Would you guys be so kind as to review my profile?

Hi. I think it's great. Just a few nits to pick (which, when you think of it, is a really disgusting idea). Straightforward is one word, and you don't need a capital letter in the "but" that follows "giving and receiving." Your first two sentences in Fantasies are actually one sentence and while I can accept the format you've chosen for Additional comments, it needs to be consistent. So, there's a hyphen before the first sentence and an initial capital W in the third sentence.

Really nice job improving something that was already really good. Good luck!

I think it’s perfect.

One nitpick- it looks like the male half has a goatee in the picture of him outlined against the sea.

I don’t like that because it makes me paranoid that if you show up for a date, you could have an unexpected beard.

I often say the only exception to this is a vacation picture with a vacation scruff.

I don’t think it would dissuade me in this case, but I wouldn’t risk it. Take out the picture of you with the beard if you don’t constantly wear a beard.

Else, I think you are perfect.

I think it’s perfect.

One nitpick- it looks like the male half has a goatee in the picture of him outlined against the sea.

I don’t like that because it makes me paranoid that if you show up for a date, you could have an unexpected beard.

I often say the only exception to this is a vacation picture with a vacation scruff.

I don’t think it would dissuade me in this case, but I wouldn’t risk it. Take out the picture of you with the beard if you don’t constantly wear a beard.

Else, I think you are perfect.

It has been a couple months, but we finally had an opportunity to do a rewrite and change our pictures. We would appreciate input on any further changes we should make. Also, our private gallery is a mirror of our public one. Only without our faces blurred.

So, you've added a couple of photos. They are all casual. My sense is that you guys are casual people who NEVER dress up and never go out. You are beach, deck, pool people. You are not ballroom, evening, cocktail people... there is nothing wrong with that per se--but it means that people who are more versatile are going to write you off as not being able to hang with the big dogs. There are MANY more formal events in the LS.

This is WHY we suggest dressing up and showing off a photo of what you look like dressed up.

Currently, you have 5 photos.

Keep the lake photo of Mr in the blue shirt. That is luscious. His beard is fine, nicely kept and trimmed. If a man wears a beard this is EXACTLY how he should wear it. I don't even LIKE beards and I'm cool with him. I don't love the sunglasses in the photo, but it's bright sunlight, and they are appropriate for the shot. It will do. He is hot, HOT, ACHE, AYY, double U, TEEE HAWT.

Keep the white lingerie photo. It is similarly hot for the Mrs. A bit revealing for my taste. But very attractive.

The Mrs has an amazing butt in that pink thong. She must do a zillion squats.

Replace:

The beach photo in the black sweats with a formally dressed and posed photo of the Mrs: dress, heels, make up. Stockings are not necessary unless they are tastefully sexy. You've got the body, hon, work it. Classy, not trashy.

The gym photo, it does nothing for you. Instead, both of you dress up nicely: pressed suit, shined shoes, trimmed an squared away. Dress, heels, make up. Mr, take her into the city for supper or to the local high end wine bar. Tell the staff it's your anniversary (of the first Tuesday you met). Have them take a few snapshots of you in the well appointed lobby of the restaurant.

PSA: To start a new thread in any sub-forum, look in the upper right third of the page, where you will see "New Topic." It is in approximately the same place in which you find "Post Reply" on individual threads.

Maybe next year...

Start a new thread please.

Start a new thread please.

Velma, I think I got all the required photo's....Mary Jo

Stat your own thread and i’ll get on it.

NLS,
Back up, and start your own thread. It’s easier for people to respond to your specific needs if the thread is exclusively about your profile. When you start your own topic, include information about exactly what you would like to achieve.
Good luck

Ok, this critique thing seems fun. Almost like a "RoastMe." Would someone please critique our profile? I know it's around the holidays and I can only guess that's the reason there's not a lot of contact at this point. The other thing I wonder about is one photo he has a beard. Although he's recently clean shaven, is that a turnoff for the ladies nowadays?

Thank you all, for taking the time to look at our profile. We will put the advice to good use.

I’ve been in NJ all weekend dealing with my husband’s crazy ex wife, so sorry I’m late to the party.

Everything has pretty much already been covered. My only suggestion would be to somehow squeeze the body of the male half into a suit. I think it’s very important to have one of your first five pictures to be that of the male and female half dressed well like you’re about to go to a nice restaurant or church.

You need a picture like this in order to prove to everyone that you have nice clothes. It’s a reasonable estimation of what you might look like if you show up for a date. If you show up wearing a supplement T-shirt, I’m not going to be interested.

Make sure the picture is in the first five.

Never take more than one picture that shows the same thing. Right now you have three pictures of the woman’s ass-one is plenty.

You mention that one of your hobbies is hunting. I would take that out. Hunting means guns In the country is very divided right now on the issue of guns. I have no illusions of where my meat comes from but I think with that single word you were eliminating every single city dweller might be interested in your profile.

Hi. There's nothing glaringly wrong with your profile, but it isn't amazing and it has some common failings - "like minded" is meaningless, nobody needs to know you're rejecting them because there are only photos of her, that you need attraction or whatever else the two have you have agreed upon, etc. - but it's a credible first effort that just needs some editing and polish.

Oh, but no period in your tagline. Plus, fill out all your sections and eventually, when all your changes have been approved by the moderators, go in and change your smoking and drinking toggles.

Your photos aren't great. Go check Velma's DEBAUCH thread to see what tack you could take for a better approach, but at the very least, while your current profile default is great, the boob and butt thing isn't appealing. Plus, it won't attract what you seem to want, which is folks who interact with you as people.

Good luck.

Pictures:

Is this a Single Female Profile or a Couple Profile? The male is MIA! When you have zero pictures of the guy, it is assumed that he is a) a DOG b) a fatass c) really ugly d) auto-nope.

Leave your nudes in your Private Folder. The same goes for your red behind. Yes, you're hot, SLS isn't AFF or Fetlife. Most SLS members are up for a little light spanking, but it's best to negotiate that later after interest has been expressed and negotiated.

Our resident sage Velma has a formula for photos: DEBauCH

Date -- A formally dressed posed photo of clothing you'd wear out on a date

Event -- Take a picture of yourself out somewhere interesting doing something interesting/sporty

Beach -- Go to the beach, lake, or pool and take some swimwear photos

Chick -- A casually clothed photo of the Mrs by herself

Him -- A casually clothed photo of the Mr by himself

If you hate the beach (and I do) or you live where there aren't beaches, I suggest you can substitute:

Activity -- A photo of you doing something you enjoy

Underwear -- This is where sexy lingerie comes into play

Text:
You've hit the major points for your profile:

You are only soft swap (but you are wiggly on that). That may be part of the issue. There is limited interest there. It is what it is. Make up your mind whether how firm you are about being firmly soft swamp and adjust your slider if you aren't so dead set on it.

This is something you need to talk over with each other. Does one of you want to have sex with others, but the other doesn't? Would one of you want to, but the other prefer to watch? There are all sorts of permutations of experience available. You have to TALK about it. That's part of being new that happens between YOU.

You have plenty of conversational hooks (interests outside of sex). Bravo on that. That is usually the biggest weakness we see in profiles: those which ONLY talk about sex.

The word "like minded" is a throwaway. As is saying you are brand new. In two years, you will have forgotten to remove it. It doesn't take long to stop feeling new. The first letter in "loves music and animals" should be capitalized.

Cut the line about not responding if there are no photos. ALWAYS keep your profiles relentlessly positive!Some people don't have photos because of work and they are too un-savvy to crop out their heads. Instead, set up a QuickSend email that says "Thank you for your interest, we are not interested at this time, Best of luck, --(signed) your names" You can easily respond with that in seconds, or if their introductory email is very interesting, you can look a their profile. Open emails which have picture icons bc pictures can be attached.

Say "woman" instead of "female."

Your tag line is a little BLAH. The purpose of a tag line is to get people to IM or to draw them in to read your profile. Think of it as the blurb for your profile. It should be catchy and clever. It's a soundbite. Change it from time to time.

Congratulations on being together since you were 16 and 17 years old... and venturing into Swing. That's quite an adventure.

Best of luck.

We are very new to this life style and have only been here a couple of days. We’ve written and rewritten our profile several times as well as added and deleted pictures. Still trying to put our finger on what is missing or wrong. We would love your honest review on our profile as well as advise.