sns429, please start your own thread. To do that, go to the Better Profiles starting page and on the right upper third there's a clickable link titled New Topic. The only difference between this and an a post is that you need a title as well as text.
I'm not sure what your profile was like before, but it looks good now!
Thanks for the info / suggestions everyone.
I don't have time to give a thorough review, but regarding pictures, look at the private gallery I opened for you.
I would take out some of the cutesy stickers - its too distracting and have at least one full body picture.
Hi and welcome. I really like your profile, especially the way it makes clear that it's the woman writing. I think that's going to make it much easier to find playmates. So, in this instance, I wouldn't change that part of it to the usually much better option of he/she/we. And it stands out already for being artlessly charming. Eventually, if you find you like swinging, you'll want to change it, but it's a terrific newbie profile.
You do need to fix the typos - it's we are a little quiet in Description, it's and/or and you have wondered in Fantasies, plus it really is women instead of females (it's a grammar thing) in that section, and in Additional comments, there's a desperate need for a comma between our jobs and being discreet. Also, the emojis really do need to be deleted, since those question marks are just confusing to anyone who doesn't know why they're there.
In terms of content, where you go off the rails a bit is in describing yourself as a little bi-curious, at least if you'd like to try that FFM your husband fantasizes about. You're already newbies, which is dicey from a single woman's point of view (nothing like being someone's first and discovering it leads to a shitstorm about 3/4ths of the way through) and knowing you're tepid about the whole thing would pretty much lead me to say no, even if everything else about you looked good.
Other than that, I'd take that out about no drama. Partly because it introduces the concept into the conversation, partly because those who bring the drama never think it's them anyway, so it's pointless to say no drama, and partly because I'm not alone in thinking that anyone who mentions drama is probably the person/couple who is all about the drama.
Please do consult the sticky for Velma's photo recommendations. At the very least, a full length photo of the two of you would be great. It's absence, particularly with the zero for weight, is something of a red flag.
As far as messaging others, just introduce yourself, making it clear you're the female half (in this case "female" is correct) and say a little about why you're reaching out to that particular person or couple.
Welcome! I hope you've read other profile reviews because we're an opinionated bunch. Just remember it's all about your profile, not you personally.
Overall you're profile isn't bad - it just needs a bit of refining. I don't have time for a full blown review right now but several things jump out at me:
Check out Velma's post at the top of this forum for advice about photos.
Good luck, have fun and stay safe!
~Phoebert's Wife
Hi. Hubby and I are new here. Any tips on how we can make our profile stand out? I'm a little on the shy side so any tips for messaging others would be great too. TIA ??.
Kat
