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I like this read. I would appreciate our profile critiqued.
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Hi. That was lightning fast. Awesome. I really like big swaths of your profile and think your photo is a big improvement. What's left are quibbles. They're obviously changes I think you should make, but they're in no way critical.

Your tagline is now serviceable. If you wake up in the middle of the night with a Eureka! moment and a clever tagline, write it down. Or steal from one of your brethren in a distant state, if you're so inclined. But what you have is just fine.

In Looking For, it's couple's fun and you really should at least give a nod to talking about who and what you're looking for. You should probably also remove both those ands in the last sentence of that section.

In Description, it's pleasing others, there's a comma after state and it's either a couple's dynamic or couple's dynamics, no "a." If you leave out the sentence about hating flakes, it will leave a better impression and then you'll have two uninterrupted sentences highlighting your own reliability instead of having them bookend some negativity. You have a punctuation issue after 4 years and love it, because that's not how ellipses work. End that with a period and just make the rest a sentence of its own.

In Fantasies, which is a really strong section, it's gets you going, no apostrophe, and please don't capitalize Dick or Oral.

in Additional comments, one of those iterations of pretty needs to go.

And that's it. Except I know there's a typo in there that I haven't mentioned. I can't find it at the moment, though. Sorry! :-(

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Hi. I’d like my profile critiqued. I would appreciate your opinion of the content and pics. Thank you.

The suit picture is much better, but seriously, the only place a guy should have shirtless pictures is on the beach or at a pool.

Ok... totally redid it including a new pic. Would love to hear your input???

Thanks everyone... very very helpful! I really appreciate it. I made a ton of changes... so just need to wait for approval for them to post.

Happy weekend to everyone!!!

Yeah, I'm not crazy about the bathroom selfie. It looks like the kind of teaser lead Channel 4 would display when they find a Congressman's profile on Tinder.

You're a business professional. Put on a suit. Suites on men are like garters on Women.

Hi and welcome. I'm going to repeat some of what Tramp says, but with more words.

First, congratulations on having a cert. That will help. Also, you have used the only line I've ever seen - the first mention of your size - that reconciles me to a man talking about his dick. This works because of the practical self-deprecation involved. Don't spoil it by mentioning your endowment a second time.

The line about being interested in single females if it's, etc., will have zero impact in eliminating drama and relationship seeking women. Where it will make a difference is that women will roll their eyes and assume you're high maintenance and a little fearful of women. So, unless that's your aim, you might really want to consider recasting that sentence so that it's both warmer and less off-putting. Also, reconsider your habit of referring to single women as females.

Here's how you're standard issue single man: Poorly lit bathroom selfie, an age range that goes from less than half your age to just a few years older, a humdrum tagline, the mention of discretion, which along with your daytime playtime and current inability to host just screams married man, and the lack of much text that tells anyone looking at your profile anything about you that isn't sex-related.

Since couples and women can choose from a fairly long list of single men, we're going to need more content about you as a person and maybe a little less about you as a stunt cock. Guys who are searching out a third for their wives or girlfriends are going to be way more interested in your current profile than women are, but we have veto power, so it's probably a good idea to think about what women like and include some of that.

Also, are you sure you want to rule out non-drinkers and non-smokers?

So, here's my general advice: In Looking For, talk about what you're looking for and talk about it in positive ways. In Description, stick to describing yourself. Who are you, what do you like, what makes you the special person you undoubtedly are? Lose every single negative thing, because it makes you sound controlling and kind of unpleasant. That includes references to piss. Anyone who's interested in watersports is probably over on FetLife anyway, but in the unlikely event you're asked to pee on someone, just say no. You needn't warn the rest of us that you aren't interested.

Move the information about your availability, etc., down to Additional info and remove your kik. Not only is it a violation that will get your account frozen, there's something slightly desperate sounding in including it in your profile or first email. And in Fantasies, maybe consider talking about your experience and/or your fantasies. That's where you talk about your DP experience. And "Dick" is not capitalized.

I think that's it. Good luck.

First of all, welcome to the forums.

I will keep my comments brief because there are a couple of ladies who do a much better job with the details. However, I will say three things.

1) You need to rethink your photos and the lack thereof. You seem to be in reasonably shape and not offensive in appearence, but a shirtless bathroom selfie standing in front of a mirror in underwear or pajama bottoms is a dead end.

2) Finding an interested single female is difficult enough for men...single male or otherwise. Do you really need to thin the market further by telling them in your third sentence that you're only interested in them if they are "no drama and mutually NSA." ?

3) I'm not wanting to imply that you're married, but your profile uses language that usually identifies just that. A man who is looking for daytime play and can not host "because he has children" {wink} is an automatic off-click/delete for us.

There are obviously some men who are legitimately in this precise situation. BUT, the other 9,999,999 out of a million who use that language are cheating spouse's.

Like most, we just go with the odds on that one.

Better, more detailed advice will come from others. Till then, here's wishing you the best.

Tramp

I’ve been at this for a little while and have some success but often have a lot of lookers without contact. Any advice on profile is welcome!

Should I add more personal info, activities etc...?

Thanks!