Please review me

CountryCouple - please start your own thread for a review so that any advice for you isn't confused with advice to the OP of this thread.

Great idea to have others review your profile!! I need to do a lot more with ours. ??

It looks good - except you didn't catch MsMolly's advice about spacing and punctuation around that emoji you've used. ;-)

I'd still like to see more about your vanilla interests in Description. It helps when you indicate an interest in friendship outside playing for people to know more than you dabble in massage, work out and are a good conversationalist. What do you do for fun? What teams or sports get you yelling the loudest? Wine or beer? Brat on the grill or a French restaurant?

But for now, all the objectionable bits are gone, things are in appropriate section and it flows well - it should serve you well.

Have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. I like what you've done. Nice job. The only thing that struck me was wondering if describing yourself as very fit and then not talking at all about how open you were to various body types might make some women uncomfortable. I went to check your certs to see if there was any variety, but only one profile was open to me and I derived no information.

Anyway, that's just a thought about an otherwise well written profile. Good luck!

Thanks all!

Text adjusted, costume pic deleted. I'll try to get a friend to get some new pics to post.

Hi. I'm sick too and not as sharp as usual, but I'm afraid that doesn't blunt the bluntness. I mostly like your profile, but if it feels like I'm being mean, I apologize and ask that you keep in mind that my advice is kindly meant.

As far as photos, I think the one with the tie is hot. The rest, other than the costume one (and that's mostly a problem with the background) are okay, but not amazing. Don't be afraid to change them up pretty regularly or to ask others to take photos of you doing something interesting in an interesting setting.

Your certs are great and your tagline, while not exactly eye catching, is fine.

In Looking For, the unicorn thing is a bit offputting, plus it's axiomatic that self-proclaimed unicorns are more often than not batshit. Also, it leaves out straight women, because they're not unicorns. Do you really care if women are bi or not? Otherwise, the section is serviceable if not exactly charming. You might be better off if you spent a little more time on the kind of people you were looking for and a little less about how they could serve your needs.

In Description, the first paragraph is okay, although I spaced out on the sex wave, but if you're going to use emoji, you still need a period at the end of the sentence and a space before you do the :) thing.

Where you've been goes in Fantasies and the final paragraph in this section is much better placed in Additional comments. Which is good, because what's there now is a bullshit urban legend and needs to go as quickly as you can get the change approved.

Instead, maybe say a little more about yourself. I'm a massage therapist, so your claims of having good hands don't do a thing, plus it's usually better to let other people rate your skill at something, but maybe other women are more susceptible. We're all pretty up for being charmed and interested though, so talk about some of your vanilla pursuits as a way to be relatable.

The part in Fantasies about the massage group could probably be compressed quite a bit without losing its power.

And that's pretty much all I have for now. I thought I saw a typo on the first pass that I didn't find on the second, but you might want to check again.

Good luck. Maybe make some changes and come back for a review.

1. Delete the first sentence in the looking for section.
2. As she mentioned, delete the costume pic.

The red looks good on you. Keep those pics.

My brain is a bit mushy - fighting a cold - so this will be rather short. But there are only a few things that really bother me so short should be enough. Remember - everything said is about your profile, not you personally.

First - get rid of the stupid warning. Right now I'm looking at your pictures to see if "gullible" is stamped on your forehead. Would you really take someone to court?

I'd get rid of the two selfies as well. You already have a picture working out in the red shirt so not sure the mirror selfie that appears to be from the same day adds anything. The other selfie is poorly lit - it looks like you have some sort of costume on but I can't tell. Do you want me spending time trying to figure out what the heck you're wearing or reading your text to see if you sound like fun?

Your text isn't too bad. I'd like to see more vanilla detail in Description and maybe move the list of places you've been to Fantasies/Experiences. Talking about your vanilla activities will give others an idea of any common interests that can be used as ice-breakers - both in online messages and when you initially meet.

Good luck and have fun!

~Phoebert's Wife

Too long? Need something else? Inquiring mind and all...