Please Critique our profile.

It is about ths profile pic and the tag line to make this single lady take another look

To be totally honest some of the folks on SLS really suck with the picture thing. If you can tell just how someone is by looking at a picture then you are one smart person. It gets pretty frustrating to open pictures and never hear back from the folks you opened it for. One of our best friends from SLS we met with out ever seeing their face or body!

Thank you all for the tips. I appreciate the feedback and the ideas even if I didn't use all of them.

Ok to reorder, go to a physical computer, not an iPad or a phone.
Go to Tools > Manage Pictures.

In the "Approved Galleries" section, click on a photo and drag it to the order you want it in.

Personally, I think it should go: Couple > Baby doll nighty > Ass > Guy

So I am not sure how to reorder the pictures. When I uploaded them I did the picture of him last so I am not sure how they got to be in the order they are.

Hi. You've done a really good job. I think you can make it a bit better, but it's small stuff like using more direct language (we want to meet vs. we are wanting to meet) or missing words (it's girl time with, etc., all of which you'll find if you read your profile out loud). Oh, and taglines don't need periods.

I think you'll do beautifully, not just because your profile is good and your photos are attractive but because you've been super responsive to what has happened in this thread. That's the ultimate in a good sign. When the pandemic ebbs, I hope you'll go to clubs and parties, because that's where you'll really be a hit.

Good luck.

Touche’

Looks good, just one small change I’d make. Any chance you can get to the Grand Canyon? Have the guy take his shirt off and hang from the ledge, hang with one arm while doing curls with a 50lb dumbbell with the other. You may want to get that pic around 4:37pm on the day after thanksgiving. I know I don’t have a pic like that but this isn’t about me. If you are an Olympic swimmer, a pic beating Michael Phelps in a race would be cool too. Good luck!

I think it's a lot better.

Two suggestions : Reorder your pictures so that the couples picture appears first, followed by a few pictures of her, then the guy. My fear right now is that since the male half appears in the first picture, you may have people click away. You don't need a million pictures of the lady. What you have now is good.

As much as I hate to say it... 95% of the people on here looking are men. So you need a picture of the male half and a picture of the couple but the first thing the guy wants to see is the couple or the lady, not the guy.

Second... I don't want to nit-pick... but consider taking a new picture of the guy when you get a chance. I know it's 34 degrees in Wisconsin today, but I'm not crazy about the shirtless picture of the guy. Don't get me wrong - it shows that he's in shape, but pictures of the guy can be touchy. Guys just don't look right shirtless unless he's doing something where he would have his shirt off. Yes, I know there is a nude picture of my husband posing in a hotel room in Philadelphia, but it's artistic.

So I have an idea. Any chance you guys have an axe and a wood pile? Maybe around sunup or sundown when the light is good, have the male half go outside and take his shirt off. Have him take a few swings with an axe if you have a woodpile. Then have him pose contrapposto with one foot back and the axe over his shoulder. Shoot him a little from below to imply power and dominance. The mighty provider who is resting after chopping wood.

He'll be cold for a few minutes, but women suffer all the time - try wearing heels.

Definitely better

Looks a lot better. Good job.

Hello Everyone, we took to some of your responses and have updated our profile. Can you please take another look and let us know how we did?

I'd pare down some of the pictures. A lot of them are just kind of... meh. They don't all have to be professional action shots by any means, but I like a bit of variety/creativity when looking at profiles.

I'd flesh out your wants and desires a bit more as well.

Heh. I'm situationally curmudgeonly and if it was a single guy or an older couple I'd be right there with you. But they're young and adorable and it suits them.

I'm a bit of a curmudgeon and tend towards uncluttered. ;-)

Hi. I actually think the stickers are cute. I think you have too many photos and what you have is often similar to all the others, so you should do new ones (focusing on clothing that fits) but, hey, I like the stickers.

As far as your text, your tagline is fun and informative and the rest of your profile is okay, just needs a bit more filling out and some fixing, because apparently punctuation isn't someone's native language.

So, in Looking For, the first two sentences are fine as they are, but because they're not complete sentences, you sound terse and that's not a great look. So, just start with "We're looking for..." and go on from there. After you know a little more about who you're looking for as well as what, you might want to fill this section out more. The part about travelling needs punctuation and it doesn't go here.

Put it in Additional comments instead, with these changes:

We have kids, so it's difficult for us to be able to get out with short notice. We are willing to travel, but all plans need to be made in advance.

In Description, you've pretty much nailed it both with what you've included and in how you've phrased it. I'd ordinarily suggest adding another line, but I don't think you need to, because you've captured yourselves so well already.

In Fantasies, as @mayhem suggests, you could expand some on what her experience is. Maybe use a conjunction instead of all those short phrases lined up one after another. Perhaps add in a quick pass on a shared fantasy. I don't love the last sentence, but can't explain why. In any case, I don't think it adds anything useful, because it's vague in multiple ways. But if you do decide to do more than one paragraph in any section, an extra blank line is needed.

That's pretty much all I have at this point. It sounds like you've been deleting things, which is great, but I hope you'll think a bit about adding in some new ways to be uniquely you.

Good luck.

You know-I wasn’t going to harp about the cute stickers. I’m not crazy about them because I find them distracting, but it is something that people in their 30s would do.

It’s not something that I would do, but I’m 15 years older than they are.

You've got a reasonably good start but not really enough info in any section to entice others to contact you. Are you looking for couples for regular play dates or FWB? Are you looking for single ladies for FFM, FMF or some girl time without him? Are either of you the life of a party or would you rather enjoy quiet time with a few friends? If you don't have much experience what are you hoping to try and enjoy? Usually less than a half dozen sentences per section is more than enough - but you want to show a bit more personality than a single sentence list.

I'm not a fan of the cute stickers used to obscure your faces - blurring the photo or solid colored shapes are far less distracting. Even with your faces obscured you need to be smiling - your expression affects your whole body. And delete the selfies - too often the poses are awkward and your facial expression looks pained. Find someone to take pictures of you as a couple (or use a timer and tripod) and take individual pictures of each other. Dress nicely, in clothes that fit (nothing too baggy or too tight and no heavy coats) so people get an idea of you - Velma's core photos are always a good start.

I'm guessing you've already tweaked your profile a bit since posting this request as the warning mentioned by mayhem is gone - keep up the good work and let us know if you want additional advice.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

Not a huge thing for many, but it doesn't hurt to fix the grammer/punctuation in your profile. Remove the warnings at the end. They are toothless and some will see you as gullible (or worse) for including them. Best case is they add nothing to your profile.

Some of the things fit better elsewhere. For example, the sentance starting with, "We have kids so it's difficult...." is a better fit for Additional Comments.

Maybe expand of the Experience/Fantasies section. For example, what sort of experience has she had in general terms (i.e. MFM. FMF, etc.). In all of this, I can't tell if you're OK with full or soft swap or...????, so a little more detail about what you're actually looking for when you find your FWBs would be helpful.

“ you look like you are wearing clothes that I wouldn’t even wear if I had to rush into Target for tampons and milk”

I don’t always agree with Velma and some of the things she says, she can be a bit repetitive at times. However, that right there may have been one of the funniest things I’ve ever read on here. Kudos!!!!!

It starts off pretty good but goes downhill quick.

I opened a private gallery for you to see the kind of pictures you should have. Look at the stickied post I wrote about the DEBauCH method.

I would delete every single picture except the first one. The other pictures aren’t necessarily bad... it’s just that they are basically the same thing : unsexy, uninspired pictures in regular clothes.

If you guys were a resturant, you’d be an Applebee’s. It’s not that you are unattractive, it’s that for most of your pictures, you look like you are wearing clothes that I wouldn’t even wear if I had to rush into Target for tampons and milk

Also note: Be careful with New Years pictures - or any pictures around the holidays. It’s a good way of putting doubt in people’s minds that your pictures are recent.

I would take 4 new pictures and delete the rest as I suggest in my DEBauCH method and sample gallery.

If the lady half doesn’t own a pair of heels, she needs to GET OVER IT. I hate wearing heels too, but I love the way it makes my ass look. Take every picture in heels except any that show you doing an outside activity.

I would also remove the item in your profile where you complain about people not writing back. It makes you seem like a drama bomb.

Take some new pictures then repost so we can review again.

We would really love to have some feedback to our profile. We are new to creating this type of profile. We have updated it a couple times Adams just aren't sure we have the proper wording.