Open for construction criticism

You'll want to go back in and change the "want drinkers/want smokers" defaults - unless you really only want people that smoke & drink! As long as you change nothing else at the same time then no profile review is required. Any time profile review is required then the defaults come back to haunt you and once the changes are approved you have to go back in and change from the defaults again.

Profile looks much better. I'd fix the remaining few typos and punctuation issues then once the corrected profile is showing change the drinking/smoking defaults and call it done for now. You're never really done - most of us tweak our profile a few times a year as things change - if nothing else to add new pictures and update age.

Have fun!

Well, that's a big improvement. You even have a photograph. That it's not showing up as a default might not have anything to do with you, since SLS seems to be having photo problems.

You still have some typos, but they're minor and mostly involve punctuation. I'm going with progress not perfection, and I think what you have now is an accurate reflection of you, so you're good.

Congratulations and good job!

Thanks for looking at my profile and the feedback, I have taken it all into consideration and updated it.. I am still working on the pictures but please take another look and let me know

Thanks for looking at my profile and the feedback, I have taken it all into consideration and updated it.. I am still working on the pictures but please take another look and let me know

Once again - anything mean is about your profile, you are probably a very nice person. I've been taking a break from SLS and have no idea why I checked the forums today but your profile is so bad that I feel compelled to respond.

Stop composing your profile on your phone - it is not a good look. Find a real computer with a word processor and compose off-line. You seem to have a problem with punctuation, capitalization and phrases rather than complete sentences. Once you are happy run both a spell check and a grammar check before copying the text into your profile. As others have said here (and on countless other profile reviews) your profile is your SLS resume. Most employers give a resume a quick read before putting it in the "call for interview" or "nope" pile - SLS members do the same. In both cases the "nope" pile is always the biggest. Guess where your current effort is going to end up?

Please don't use the phrase "single females" - it makes me want to ask "female what - dog, giraffe, human?" and you're going in the "nope" pile. You are looking for single ladies or single women.

Every time I've met someone from here with no pictures I'm always disappointed. I'm lousy at figuring body type from height & weight so I want to see a fully clothed, full body shot. You should always be smiling - anything else is usually a turn-off. Selfies make me think you have no friends; bathroom selfies are just pitiful. If you feel like you must have pictures of your dick put them in a private gallery to be opened upon request.

Are you looking for FWB or one time encounters? What will we chat about to see if there is chemistry? Tell me less about sex and more about what makes you interesting. Do you like to run races, build tree houses, rescue dogs from the pound or perform standup comedy?

Read through all the advice again and give it another shot - good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Looking For: Looking to make connections with down to earth couples and single females that's ready to indulge in adult activities.
***This is still pretty minimal and this should read "...that are ready to..."

Description: I am a down to earth intelligent D&D free, athletic black male, a true gentleman That aims to please With a strong sex drive, I love giving and receiving oral. and I have a good sense of humor. Always up for a good chat to build chemistry

***You are missing some punctuation and "That" should not be capitalized. A sense of humor is good, but you have nothing about things besides sex (other than chat) listed. Yes, this is a site for people looking to have sex with others. People get that. What they generally want is someone that looks and sounds like fun both in and out of the bedroom.

Your hobbies or whatever else fills your free time are points of interest that others could engage you in chat about. For example, maybe you like golf and someone else that does could use that as a conversation starter.

Fantasies and / or real experiences: I have experience in mfm, fmf, voyeurism, mfmf and couples swap. But my true fantasy is a room of beautiful women ready to please and be pleased by me

***While the "...room full of woman..." comment may be a fantasy, it kind of comes across as you thinking you're God's gift to women. Said a little differently, "Would love to be in a situation mff+ situation." or you could start off a little more humble and say something like, "I know it's not likely to happen, but....."

Additional comments and things to do, see, hear or learn about: I ask for discreet non pushy couples and females that are drama free and practice safe sex. Let's not waste each other's time so if we vibe, we vibe if not, no harm no foul.. discretion is a must and I am able to host in a safe comfortable location or willing to meet at QE.. so let's let our freak flags fly and meet each other's fantasies or double back on old ones

***Again, some punctuation and grammar issues. You don't need to mention you're discreet twice. The "waste each other's time" thing comes across as negative and not worth mentioning IMHO. I don't know what "meet at OE" means.

All little things, but the big thing is there is still nothing here to make you stand out among the hundreds or thousands of SMs you're competing with. Ask yourself after reading this why anyone would pick you over any other SM here, If you're thinking that a profile of any kind here is like hanging out a "Free buffet" sign to starving people, it's not.

I would suggest that you look at other people's profiles to get ideas for your own. You may be able to look at some of the SMs the forum members have already helped and copy things that you like that apply to you. As it stands now, it still comes across as very little effort on your part, which usually equates to people not wanting to waste their effort on you.

I normally don’t give profile improvement advice, mainly because MissMolly and Velma usually have it covered, however, since they already chipped in before you modified your profile, I’ll add a few words.

To repeat the essence of Molly’s caveat, I’m going to be blunt. This will sound mean spirited. My intent is not to make you feel bad, or belittle you in any way. Most of us that give any advice want you to have success here.

Your current profile is atrocious.
Your disregard for basic grammar rules makes it difficult to read and understand, and also makes you appear lazy as if you don’t care about details. Your writing is boring, and will not have you standing out from the thousands of other single men on this site.

At the very least, you should rewrite your whole profile offline, using a good word processing tool, preferably one that will help make not only grammar suggestion, but will give creative writing suggestions as well. Pull up profiles of other single guys. Find some that are really good. Copy what they have.

There is no excuse for you to not have pictures.

Success in this lifestyle is not easy, nor should it be, but success is absolutely worth the effort.
I sincerely hope that you find all that you desire.

Thanks for the comments I have now updated my profile if u could now take another look and let me know what you think

Hi and welcome. What follows is going to be blunt. You decide whether it's also constructive. Please do understand that the goal is to get you laid, so there's that.

You say you're real and want to be seen as such, but you've been on this site for two months without photos and with a very basic profile. That's not a great sign. And, no, saying you're working on getting photos is not a point in your favor. I don't approve of selfies, but you have a phone and either friends or family who could take full length clothed photos of you. If that's a non-starter, then pretty much any server at any restaurant can take one. And smile in those photos even if you decide to obscure your face.

As far as your text goes, you didn't proofread, so even what little you do have isn't going to get you far. How we do anything is how we do everything, more or less. You've put in minimal effort and been slapdash about even that. I'm just going to assume you're equally haphazard about sex. This is like a resume for a job and if you aren't willing to put in the work, people will pass you by in favor of others. So put in the work.

I'll eventually get to general recommendations about each section, but at the moment you're sporting a big ole yellow flag. You've used the word clean once and condoms twice, which is a pretty significant percentage of your current word count. That indicates you think you're jumping into a pool of dirty disease ridden folks. Not true? Well, words matter and people will be making decisions about whether to say yes to you based on yours.

Clean does not equal disease free and tested regularly. If you are and do, say that. And it's totally fine to say you always use condoms, and then insist on only playing that way, but just say it once so that it sounds like a hard limit instead of fear.

You've also used non pushy twice. Once is enough.

For the individual sections, Looking For is for describing who you are looking for and doing so in a way that lets people see themselves in your description. After you address the who, because that's the most important part, then get to the part about what you're looking for. And please don't use "like minded," because it means nothing. So change your tagline too, in favor of something either clever or sincere, but definitely short.

Description is about you. Who are you? "Non pushy" could mean a lot of things, so use more precise language, and describe yourself without assigning value - so "funny" is great, "amazing personality" is an eye roller. What are your interests? What makes you the person I want to meet? Stay vanilla and don't repeat things that are better left to your stats and photos, like "young" or your height or whatever.

Fantasies is currently a missed opportunity. It's fine to say you have extensive threesome experience, but one sentence is fine and nobody needs to know that you're fine watching unless it's one of your fantasies. Keep your fantasies non-graphic but do include one or two or at least address the issue in a way that makes you relatable and possibly likeable.

Additional comments is a great place to end on a high note. What you have now does you no favors.

Please add some content and then come back for a review. Photos too.

Good luck.

Your biggest issue is that you don’t stand out.

You aren’t just composting with every guy here you are also competing against my husband.

Ok, I married a triathlete who has started four businesses, and has a masters degree.

Tell me what makes you special.

I'm somewhat a newbie to the scene and would like any and all constructive criticism in regards to profile. I am aware that I lack the picture aspect, that I am working.. I am real and and would like to seem so to anyone who views my profile.