New Profile Requesting Feedback

First, thank you to everyone who gave feedback. I did my best to incorporate as many good ideas as I could. Second, the Dicknado has begun, but thanks, again, anyway. Good luck to everyone looking for fun out there. Stay safe.

The picture with the tie and the white dress should be first.

Hi. First, I really love that photo of the two of you all dressed up. It's so terrific that the Sharpie scribble didn't bother me (still, there's technology that does it better or you could crop it for the public gallery and use the whole thing in your private gallery).

Thank you for letting me see your profile. By now you might have gotten messages from single men, for which I apologize. Velma calls it the Dicknado and that's about right.

So, starting from the top, your tagline is a little too informative. You want people to be sufficiently intrigued to open your profile and get to know something about you rather than give up the goods in the flyover. So something short, clever, hooky, is really a better bet, but short and sincere is okay too.

In Looking For, you have the components, but one thing can go in Additional comments (which is good, because as @mayhem writes, all sections should be filled out and this will keep you from casting about looking for something) and the rest could use some refinement. What can go elsewhere is the sentence that begins "We both like to establish..." It is about you and there's no way to reframe it in such a way that the couples you're looking for are central, which is what should be happening in this section. You might also want to say something about the way you've currently toggled for less interest in full swap.

The last two sentences in Looking For can be reframed and should be. You have the rest of the profile to center yourselves and your desires, but this one is for and about others. So, you can say you're looking for articulate, well spoken couples up here and then use that weak in the knees phrase in Additional comments to emphasize your attraction to fluidity in conversation. Does that make sense?

In Description, you've accidentally hit on a pet peeve. He's described as a deep thinker and she's...sweet. It's really just a structural issue, which means you can fix it merely by changing the order of things, but right now it subtly dismisses her. This is how I think it should be written:

He is a deep thinker, who is not great at small talk but can really impress in larger discussions. He also has a witty sense of humor with lots of banter and storytelling. She is interested in everyone's whole life story, so be ready for lots of questions. She is also sweet, energetic, very playful, and fun.

Do you see how it's an issue of balance? Now you sound like a dynamic couple. Other than that, you just need an additional blank line between the two paragraphs.

Fantasies is terrific. And you have two things that can go in your currently empty section if you want. If not, then pretty much anything that ends on a high note will do.

Other than that, change your default photo and tagline periodically to increase interest.

Good luck. I think you two will do beautifully.

Looks mostly OK. Usually people refer to swap as soft or "full" (vs hard), but I'm sure people get the idea. The description could use a few more hooks. Things other than sex that you like to do that others can engage you in conversation on. Currently that is limited to books, and travel. I would think there are other interesting things that you also do in your spare time that may be worth sharing.

If GGMM reviewed you she'd say not to leave any sections empty, like the last one. Things like what your schedule is like, whether you can host and/or willing to travel, or any other miscellaneous stuff that doesn't fit elsewhere can go there. At least you don't have that toothless warning that some put there. Even nothing is bettter than that.

I think the Halloween photo is fine for now – but as soon as you can, get a date picture up there.

Look at the private gallery that I opened up for you and follow those instructions.

Your Halloween picture is ok, But it looks like it was taken in 1993 on a Kodak Disc.

Please, please, please get dressed up, go to a nice Resturant and have the waitress take your picture posing like I suggested.

And for the love of god, cock your arm. Stop resting it at your sides.

goodgollymsmolly, I think I fixed the issue. We would appreciate it if you would try again. Thank you either way.

VelmaAndShaggy, I realized what a huge mistake I made with the profile photo as soon as I read your post. Thank you so much for pointing it out. I subbed it out for a Halloween photo. We will also discuss your other suggestions. Thank you for taking the time to respond.

Happy hunting to both of you. ;)

Hi. You currently have single women blocked (SLS has an option for no interest but not blocked, but it doesn't work), so if you want me to take a look you'll have to temporarily show a sliver of interest in women. I promise, it won't unleash a surge of messages.

Otherwise, you can always read a few threads, because a lot of my advice is pretty much the same profile after profile.

Good luck.

I think it’s pretty good the way it is. I suggest that you look at the Sticky on the DEBauCH method which is the first article on the forum.

I also opened a private gallery for you to see the kinds of pictures you should have in the future.

Some nitpicks:

I don’t like that you don’t have a picture of yourselves together. Change that pronto.

I also suggest that the first picture should be you as a couple or the lady half. Don’t make the man the first or default picture - about 95% of the people on here looking are men, so I think you are risking being passed by.

Get rid of the picture of the lady half wearing that Floral Skater Dress from Hot Topic. I’m going to explain why in a second.

As a fat girl - and yes as a Size 12 I get lumped into “fat girl” territory - never wear floral prints. Look for dresses with solid colors. Also, watch how she is standing - her arm fat is all smooshed up.. Look through my private gallery. I give tips in there on how to stand so your arm fat doesn’t show.

Finally, if she is ok with kissing or doing boob play with another woman, switch her profile to “Bi Curious” but only if she is cool with kissing or light play with another girl. Most couples on here are looking for bi girls, or at least girls who are “bi for the team.” But don’t do this unless she is ok with it.

I think what you have is 95% there. Good job.

Title really says it all. New to this and seeking constructive criticism to have the best experience possible. Thank you in advance.