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Hi out there?? would anyone please look at our profile? We're newish and struggling to find partners.
Thanks
Melissa

Hi out there?? would anyone please look at our profile? We're newish and struggling to find partners.
Thanks
Melissa

Thanks everyone for your comments so far!

Hi. Are you still out there listening? I hope so, because your profile is still pretty generic and I think you're selling yourself short.

I actually like your tagline. It's as enthusiastic as a puppy, but that's not a bad thing. However, it sets up some expectations about what the profile text will be like and you don't actually follow through in any consistent way.

In Looking For, change it to couples and women (not females, please), because you don't want to sound like you're going to be clingy and want an exclusive relationship. Or if you do, then make that clear instead of implicit.

In Description, you can probably not bother with saying you're shy at first. There are very few of us who are immediately comfortable striking up a conversation with strangers, so it doesn't need to be said unless you're completely tongue tied or anxious upon first meeting people.

You need another blank line in between paragraphs and it's losing, not loosing. Also, say more about what kind of person you are. This is the place where you give enough information that people want to know more.

You can do something similar in Fantasies with just a few words, maybe by starting that second sentence "I fantasize about..." That and leave out the last line or rephrase it so it doesn't sound like a cop out.

Put something in Additional comments, because you don't want people to think you can't finish things. Especially not here. Charming if you can, but definitely stick to the positive.

Finally, I like your default photo but not the second one. You're looking away from the camera, which isn't a great look. Also, please have someone, anyone take a couple of full body photos of you. With your clothes on, so you can ask servers or strangers.

Good luck.

I hope you've read other profile reviews - we may be blunt but we're talking about your profile not you personally.

Right now you have a free-for-all spewing of sound bites. CatchyNickname is right - your profile screams NEW and not in a good way. I'm going to go out on a limb and guess that you composed the profile text on your phone - read it carefully and you'll see odd typos.

You should analyze and reorganize your existing text - is it really necessary and is it in the correct section. Each section should contain text that pertains to the header. Looking For should state if you are looking for couples or ladies and if you are hoping for on-going FWB relationships or one-time NSA encounters or something in between. Description should tell us about you - what you like to do, are you shy or the life of the party. Fantasies/Experience is where you tell us what you have done and what you dream about doing. And then Additional Comments is where you say something interesting that ends on a positive note.

Your one picture is good - you'll need to add a few full body, fully clothed shots (most of them doing fun stuff) and a pool or beach shot to show off your body. Look for Velma's advice to other single guys on core pictures. My advice is simple - smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies.

Couples that enjoy introducing a single guy to the lifestyle are out there - but you are going to work harder to find them.

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Sorry for the confusion. I deleted the original post by mistake, but still welcome any and all feedback you may have for me.

Thank you!

You deleted your original message - do you still want additional advice?

Thank you for the feedback.

First, everything folks will say comes from a good place even if it sounds mean. It's like medicine...it might not taste good but it will make things better.

Velma will chime in on the pics. You can beat her to the punch by looking through some of the other threads for her suggestions.

Otherwise your profile is generic to the point of being bland. Condensed it says "I'm new. I'm New. I'm NEW". Might be attractive in a car, but it's only attractive here for someone that wants to pop your LS cherry.

You are a 3-dimensional person. Your profile should reflect that. Talk about non-LS stuff like hobbies, things you do for fun, even what you do for a living. These are called "hooks" or conversation starters. That gives someone a way to open a conversation if they're interested.

Start there.