Looking for profile critique

First, what they said.... Now you have to keep in mind that biceps, flexing, and weight lifting pics pretty much only impress the men who are in their own pictures. Yours are, to make matters worse, unimpressive and a turn off altogether. You say that you are in good shape but my first thought is that you should have kept your shirt on. There are piles of single men who do have gym rat physiques and you are attempting to compete with them. Use your smile instead. Scrap the profile and take some time to get some good pictures. Find an uncluttered space, make sure your lighting is good, put on a nice shirt and get some decent pics. Use the timer on your camera app.

Everything, except your smile, in your profile is a turn off. Take some time and revise it as many times as you can until it is good.

Remember that everything said is about your profile and not you personally. I may be the kinder, gentler version of blunt and mean - but I really don't like your profile. At all. Not the text and not the pictures.

We're all here for sex - but you don't need to talk about it quite so much. In fact try to limit most of the explicit sex talk to your Fantasies/Experience section. Looking For should describe the couples and single ladies you hope to meet and what sort of relationships you hope to experience (one-time NSA encounters, on-going FWB, etc). Description should tell us about your personality and what you like to do. Let your pictures tell us what you look like. You want to give people a chance to say "he sounds like our type of guy" so they reply to your message or send you one. So - are you the life of the party - telling jokes and dancing all night? Do you like to attend live rock concerts or hear jazz played in small clubs? Football or basketball? Barbecue in the backyard or Chinese takeout? Hiking to waterfalls or working out in the gym?

Read other reviews and look for Velma's DEBauCH system for core pictures in your public gallery. My photo advice is more basic - smile (the serious look is not good for attracting ladies - we're looking for fun guys), watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background (I really don't want to see a toilet in your photos) and avoid selfies (they're usually not good photos and make it look like you have no friends).

Let us know when your updated profile has been approved if you'd like additional advice.

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

After that really nice first critique, mine is probably going to sound even meaner and harsher. Like everyone here, I really do want you to fulfill your goals - which in this case means get laid - and I'm going to be really blunt in pointing out the problems I see.

First, your photos. You know women like to not be afraid of men, right? You're wearing Hannibal Lecter's spare mask in the gym. That's not a great idea. Neither is anything unsmiling. Also, unfortunately, you're the exception to my "I love beards" opinion when it's short. If Velma doesn't show up, go looking for her advice on what sort of photos to have. Mine are keep your clothes on unless there's a good reason to take them off, like being at the beach or a pool.

I like your tagline, but it doesn't need a period at the end.

Looking For is meant to be about others. The only sentence that is even sort of about others is that you want to make friends with "like minds" whatever that means. Talk about being interested in couples and females and then that you want friends as well as playmates. Go ahead and leave in the second and third lines, even though they don't actually fit here because it's a good story.

In Description, you've including way too much about fucking and not much at all about you. I get that sex is on your mind, but I can fuck all sorts of people. Why would I want to fuck you? Well, because I was somehow charmed by you. Talking about how much you love to eat pussy is, surprisingly, not a selling point.

Who are you? What's your story? What are your interests? Why are you interesting? What will we talk about? Because, yeah, mostly it's going to start with conversation. If all you can talk about is what you want to do with your dick or my pussy, I'm going to be bored out of my fucking mind and leave.

Also, no lols and it's "every day."

In Fantasies, you've edged over into TMI. Yes, I know it's a sex site, but if you only knew how many horned up single men most women in the lifestyle have to sort through, you'd try to stand out in other ways. Take it down a notch and only mention orgies once.

Additional comments made me check your age. As in...I thought he was older than 24? Instead of boasting that you can fuck with a whiskey dick, try to end on a charming note.

Basically, this is your resume and the job is having sex with someone who doesn't have to fuck you. Be you, but also be a gentleman, charming and good mannered, without giving the sense that you're just desperate to stick your dick in some guy's wife.

Anyway, harsh as I've been, I think it's just your profile gone wrong. I think you can do well here, but you're going to need to do a better job of reading your audience.

Try adding some pictures of you dressed up. The ladies like that and it gives some more depth to your image.

Kudos on the profile, for a single male it looks nice out together. My one comment (others may disagree) is that we get that you are looking for sex. You make that abundantly clear, Sonia everyone else on here. Give us something more about you as a person. Many on here when seeking a single male want to know that there could be a connection based on some mutual likes (and dislikes).

Good luck

Looking at assistance in fixing my profile as it is horrible. Looking for tips on how to.improve and what to adjust? Thank you