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I've been really busy and couldn't really concentrate on your profile earlier so hopefully I'm still seeing the unchanged profile. I'm going to just mention major issues and generalities since MsMolly gave such detailed advice.

Looking For is way too long and includes information that belongs elsewhere. Try to eliminate the negatives and telling people what to do - neither is effective in a profile. In Description you can omit information that is covered in your stats or shows in your pictures. I usually like to see about a half dozen sentences about what y'all like to do for fun - together and separately. Fantasies doesn't need graphic detail just broad outlines of your experiences and the fantasies you'd like to indulge in - again usually a few sentences is enough. The bit about house parties is a perfect positive ending for a profile - I don't think you need anything else in Additional Comments.

My picture advice isn't as detailed as Velma's - smile, watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background and avoid selfies. The mirror selfies aren't so good - too much clutter to really focus on the two of you. I love the pictures of you kissing but the hanging light fixture coming out of her head is distracting. Based on the various hair lengths I'm not sure how current your pictures are - if you change your hair often then you'll want to update your pictures when you make a major style change.

Have fun & good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Thank you very much for the feedback! We will be doing a total overhaul on the profile. Will post here again after.

Thank you very much for the feedback! We will be doing a total overhaul on the profile. Will post here again after.

The paragraph about being hot to trot doesn't belong in Looking For anyway, because that section really should focus on the people you're looking for and then what you'd like to do with them, which even with all the deletions I've suggested pretty much does that, but it also is an area where you can spin that positively, probably down in Additional comments. Or maybe it doesn't need to be said at all and you can just suggest vanilla meetings for a first meet.

Description needs both more and less content. What isn't needed is any duplication of what your photos show. What is needed is something about the two of you as people. This section is a bit like concentrated small talk. Who are you? The crossfit thing does a decent job of giving one telling detail for each of you, but this is also where you want to talk about what kind of couple you are and some of the things you like to do. It's the relatable part that suggests people will want to know more. You've got some pieces scattered elsewhere that can be gathered up for this section, but see if you can also give a hint of the unique flavor your photos and certs indicate.

As far as Fantasies is concerned, I don't like the formatting even a little bit, but you do you. The last line is most likely true, but you needn't lay it all out there. This is just the place where you have a chance to distill a bit of your actual experience and talk a little about one or two fantasies you'd like to experience and the purpose is to once again engage others. You have X fantasy? Oh, hey, me too! I wonder if we'd find a mutual attraction if we met?

In Additional comments, I think most of the first paragraph can be woven into other sections. As far as being busy, we all are, and sometimes we can do spur of the moment things. Put putting it in your profile might indicate you're hard to meet and I don't think that serves you, so I would just leave it out.

I think there's more - I'm pretty sure I saw a syntax error or two along the way - but that's all I have at the moment. Good luck!

Hi. Just in case you haven't looked at other threads, here's my warning: People commenting in this forum can be brutally frank. Some of that can feel uncomfortable, but I solemnly promise that any negativity is about your profile and not about you and it's all in aid of helping you see and remove whatever is getting in the way of you getting laid.

So, with that in mind, Velma's your maven for photo content and I'll just confine myself to saying you have too many and some of what you have isn't serving you. Show the people that will be arriving for that first meeting - and you definitely have some adorable examples in your public gallery - and watch for clutter and confusion. Don't worry about being thorough and while I like and definitely approve of the boob shot that shows her piercings, the other body part shots aren't attractively composed.

Based on some of your photos, I really want to like you. I want your text to be as charming and engaging as the photos of the two of you kissing. And...it isn't. Instead, it's kinda cranky and prescriptive and something of a let down.

There are ways to talk about what you're looking for without scolding. Instead of saying, "It goes without saying...is a MUST," you could wind it in sorta like this: We're looking for couples and women like us, people who like spending time and effort getting ready for new people, like it's a date.

Not saying that's your answer, but do you see the difference? One tells folks what to do about something most sane, healthy adults do as a matter of course and the other takes the same topic and makes it a little personal and sexy. Also, is the bush coming back? Because I haven't seen more than a landing strip on 999 out of a thousand naked bodies in years and I'm always baffled when profiles take the preemptive approach to other people's body hair. I'd say it might be an age thing, but I have friends and playmates of all ages and have seen even most of my friends naked and no bush appears in that crowded crowd.

In terms of wanting couples who are secure and happy, yes, of course. Me too. But do you think that folks who have fault lines in their relationships are sufficiently aware that they'll take themselves out of the running? This is really something that is important to the two of you, but its place in your profile is debatable. It's certainly not useful.

I’m about to get on the train, but in a nutshell, take out the paragraph about how you had negative experiences and want to talk on the phone.

Pair down your pictures to 10. I opened a private gallery to show you the kinds of pics you should have.

I’ll try to write more later.

How is our profile? Too long? Too short? Bad description? Bad pics? Let us know please!