Help wanted

Sorry I’m late to the party, I’ve been busy.

I opened a private gallery for you to show you the kind of pictures you should have.

Use those as a guide.

As it is right now, nothing really stands out about your profile. Oops - you did read other reviews and realize that anything mean is about your profile, right? OK, good. You are probably a really nice gentleman but your profile doesn't entice me at all.

You have issues with grammar and punctuation (run on sentence, spacing, improper word choice, no terminal punctuation) - are you composing on a phone? I recommend copying your text to your computer word processor so you can run a spell check and grammar check when you are done. Reading it out loud sounds silly but will help you find poorly worded phrases.

I'm not sure if you're trying for an ellipse after etc. but it's done incorrectly (and is probably improper). An ellipse is three periods used in place of missing text. Et cetera means "and so forth" so I'm not sure what missing text the potential ellipse refers to. I'm a stickler for details (never saw that coming, did you?) so MFM, FMF, FMFM and then mff+ makes me crazy - either capitalize them all or none of them. And you are looking for discreet, drama free, safe sex - discretion is a noun not an adjective.

What really interest you? You think you can talk about anything under the moon (I always learned that phrase as under the sun, but whatever - people will know what you mean) but you probably can't discuss everything well. If you meet us you'll probably hear about gardening, cooking and canning, photography and travel, computers and ham radio, knitting and sewing - I'm guessing that we'd lose you on at least one of those subjects. But we'd like to hear about what you consider fun - maybe rock climbing, horseback riding or building furniture.

I don't really get a sense of you and what you're looking for - I'm getting sound bites. So rewrite with a bit more detail of the vanilla you. Tell us if you want FWB relationship or one-time encounters. Tell us what makes you happy.

Short and sweet is best - everyone is busy. You want them to like what they read and email you asking for more. You can get into details later.

Good luck!

~Phoebert's Wife

Thank you both, let me know about the rest of the profile as well, I don't want it to seem to generic or mechanical,

MsMolly cleaned up your tag line so I'll give you my advice on pictures.

Avoid selfies, smile and watch for cluttered background. Selfies make me think you have no friends and are usually not good pictures of you. Any friend and most strangers will take a picture of you (many will take several so you get a good one). Smiling really will come through in your body language (it even comes through in your voice - they always tell receptionists to smile when answering the phone). And watching for clutter in the background just helps keep people focused on the reason for the picture - you!

And if you feel the need for pictures of your manly attributes, please put them in a separate public gallery or a private gallery to be opened upon request. Some of us like a bit of mystery. Velma has a great system for core photos in your public gallery and she'll recommend a fully clothed, full body photo so people can see how you'll show up to a first meeting, a pool or beach photo to show off your body and a several photos doing fun things that you enjoy.

Come back & let us know if you want us to take on your profile text.

Good luck and have fun.

~Phoebert's Wife

Hi. You just asked about your tagline and photos, so I'm not going to offer a critique of your profile. If you want that, because I have ideas, please say so.

Your tagline needs just one modification to be interesting: Remove the "a."

For photos, you need at least one clothed full body shot, preferably in front of an interesting background. Even if you're planning on wearing animals on your face, smile anyway. It will translate in your body language.

So I have created a new profile with the same base content as my older one(just changed my UserName and tag line) now my conundrum is my tagline. What is a good tag line or what should it consist of? The previous one I felt was too generic so I took a more of a rhetorical question approach. Any and all feed is welcome
Sn: still trying to figure out the pictures thing and what I should post and what not to