Could use some advice

Thank you all. The advice given was exactly what I was looking for, and I am still prepared for a roasting if one comes along, as usually does when someone puts the review profile out there. My smile is one of my biggest hangups. Its a bit on the British side (sorry British folk) so I give a big grin mostly. I've modified a few things per suggestion, but I'll need further help to make it better. I think I will call a friend. Lol

Hi. If you've read any other threads in Better Profiles, you'll probably have noticed the responses are really blunt. It's kindly meant though and about your profile and how to improve your opportunities. Because the world is a better place if people have the amount and type of sex they want.

So, your major problem isn't one of education or writing skill but of organization. I think you have almost everything you need in your profile, but it's not displayed effectively. Instead it's like you wrote a bunch of sentences, tossed them up in the air and then randomly assigned them to the various sections. The thing is that what you have, however disorderly it might be, is effective enough that women reading it will likely give you the benefit of the doubt. Men won't though and they're usually the ones picking single guys for threesomes. So, let's improve your chances.

First, on your photos, I'm not a fan of endless selfies, even if they're pretty good, which yours are. Plus the only full length photo you have shows you favor baggy clothes. Can you either enlist a socially distant friend or use a timer on your phone and take a few clothed full body pics with you wearing things that fit? And then delete a few selfies, keeping only those with a smile? Because that would help. Skin is fine, but there needs to be a reason for it, like you're at the beach or a pool.

You might consider upping your lower limit in your age range to something less than 31 years your junior. You won't turn off a single teenager and it will look better to be a little more centered in the range.

For taglines, I usually recommend short and clever and yours is neither, but it has an awkward charm, so I'd keep it. Just don't capitalize "single" and remove the comma after "friends."

Looking For is meant to be about the people you're looking for and what you want to do with them. So, the first sentence is fine. The rest is about you and it doesn't belong here. What does belong here is that you're interested in couples for MFM, hotwives, single ladies, an open relationship, and regular meetings.

In Description, let your photos and stats tell the story of your build, height and appearance. Other than that, jsut get rid of those random capital letters. This section might need to be revised again, but I'd like to see how it all flows when you fix the rest of your profile. Because once again you've got that awkward charm thing going for you and I think it will serve you well. Seriously, it's like catnip for women, even me, and I'm mostly impervious.

In Fantasies, you can get rid of or reuse elsewhere everything before "I'm into threesomes..." You can also eliminate the part about being willing to travel. Once you've established a connection, that's a benefit. In your profile, it sounds a little desperate, which I doubt is what you're going for. What also goes here is your tentative interest in BDSM.

In Additional comments, the only thing here now that belongs is the first sentence. The rest either goes in one of the other sections or nowhere. Don't worry about reassuring couples, since it could backfire and because it's not your place. They take care of their relationship, you show up and do your thing to the best of your ability. Does that make sense?

So, make changes, do a thorough spelling and grammar check (there are programs and apps for that) and, finally, read aloud what you have to make sure it sounds good. Then please come back here and let people take another look at it.

Good luck!

I think you underestimate yourself. My advice is going to be rather general because your profile isn't all that bad. Just remember that this is all about your profile, not you personally.

You can probably delete a few of your selfies - most of yours are essentially the same so pick the best. If you care to show off your body then a pool or beach photo would be great. Smiling is best and watch for clutter or visual chaos in the background. When practical have others take pictures of you.

Your text is a bit repetitious and one-dimensional. Eliminate anything that shows in photos or is in your stats and toggles. Make sure your information is in the correct section - Looking For shouldn't include much about you (that's what the other three sections are for). Include vanilla interests in Description - it's not all about the sex, especially if you are looking for FWB relationships.

Even well educated people can have lousy writing skills - don't talk yourself down. You made a common error by using effect rather than affect but I still knew what you meant (and it's easily fixed). Varying your sentence structure as you revise your text would be helpful but it's not critical.

In short, I think Young2Ginger is correct - you're too far away!

Have fun and stay safe.

~Phoebert's Wife

Your gallery shows a nice variety, although I wouldn't mind seeing a little skin.
Your profile itself had only a couple minor typos that didn't affect my ability to understand what you were getting at at ALL. You could try organizing a little more, separating the different topics. Sentence structure is ok, but you have a lot of short ones, so try combing some.
I wish you lived closer, though!

New to the LS at almost 50. I don't have the best education and writing skills. I could use some help in crafting a better profile for my journey here. Thanks, I appreciate the help.