Constructive Criticism please

Hope you don't feeling I'm piling on - but the stream of consciousness, diarrhea of the mouth writing style isn't doing you any favors.

Please copy your text into a word processor and start editing. Rearrange so content matches section headers. Add blank lines to break up the mega-paragraphs.

I can't address your content - your writing style is so hard for me to read that I just want to run in the other direction.

Your pictures look pretty good to me - you look like a man that enjoys life.

Good luck, have fun and stay safe!

~Phoebert's Wife

It seems like you have the potential to write your profile really well. Now, it looks like a ADHD induced stream of thought that maybe will get you where you want to be. Copy and paste it into a word processing program and clean up your sentences to start with. You need to keep up with a thought, complete it, and then make sure it is the correct subject heading. The biggest issue I have is that you are coming off as an old guy who never grew up. The expired cougar fetish and story probably need to go to help create a little distance with that. You can put it down in fantasies as the thing that moved you toward the swinging realm and it should be fine. The biggest issue I can find is that you call yourself bi-comfortable when you probably aren't or maybe you are??? Keep in mind that generally entails you and another man giving or receiving some sex act with one another. It doesn't mean that you are fine with something like dp or dvp. Be absolutely sure to clarify that or you may get some unwanted hands or other body parts coming your way. You have done a pretty good job just getting started. You just need to clean it up a bit and get things in the proper subject headings.

Hi. I generally assume people that say they want constructive criticism just want mostly agreement with a few helpful hints. That's not really how effective critiques go. But I'm going to hold back a lot and just give you a couple of high points.

Here's how your profile ends: "this was all typed in one constant flow. don't feel like error checking"

So, regardless of the content, my impression of you is you don't actually give a fuck about whether you're making things easy or hard for other people. Not sure that will get you where you want to go.

Your photos, some of them, tend to underscore that DGAF vibe, which isn't as attractive when you're in your late 30s as when you're 19. Fortunately, your dogs are super adorable and you do have dogs, so points there. But at least get rid of the photos that show sections of other people.

Good luck.

Looking for outside perspective on how to improve my profile